Starting^W Finished a film & TV production course this^W last year. Hope to become a screenwriter.
Update 2nd March - my first screenplay synopsis got rejected (sob!), well, not rejected, but it won't fit into a 6-minute film (our major assessment for the year), so I've got to come up with something short and punchy!
Update 6th July - it looks like I'll actually get to make a film! Got the essential crew, and first casting session this weekend! Maybe I'll get some time to write HP fics after it's done...
Update 30 March 2006 - well, I made a movie! After it's finished a successful cinema release (yuk yuk), I'll post it on a website.
I have to say, writing a fanfic and getting the feedback was INVALUABLE! Thanks Seren, and the other moderators.
It flows along nicely - and I think you've managed to put just the right amount of "information" into the dialogue, e.g. ********* “So I have to–“ “Yep.” “While I’m–“ “Yep.” “Before we–“ “Yep.” ***************** Anything more or less just wouldn't have been nearly as funny. I think you're right to resist the temptation to add any more, but perhaps a sequel, where Ron actually has to go back to Fred, George, Bill, or Charlie for more advice? Looking forward to more of your humour.
It flows along nicely - and I think you've managed to put just the right amount of "information" into the dialogue, e.g. ********* “So I have to–“ “Yep.” “While I’m–“ “Yep.” “Before we–“ “Yep.” ***************** Anything more or less just wouldn't have been nearly as funny. I think you're right to resist the temptation to add any more, but perhaps a sequel, where Ron actually has to go back to Fred, George, Bill, or Charlie for more advice? Looking forward to more of your humour.
Your descriptions are overwhelming - you've captured the mood *very* well, and your post-climactic world is very believable. I also think your characterisations are excellent.
It's obvious that you have a very clear picture of this story in your head - but sometimes the translation to the written word hasn't worked as well as it should, i.e. there are times when Hermione's thoughts and reactions don't come across as clearly as they need to, to maintain the sense of despair and fear she must be feeling. This interrupts the flow of the story a little, and I have to re-read some parts for it to "grab". Looking forward to more - it's in my "favourites".
Author's Response: Hey, thank you very much for your feedback, and I understand what you mean about clarity, it's hard to put across a situation that I dont have any real experience of.
I hate to say it but I am getting very annoyed with the amount of time its taking for chapter 6 to be accepted. It is in the queue so just keep checking back!
I like the pacing and tension - but don't make it any slower ;-) Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: LOL! Things get more interesting very soon, I promise...
ROTFL! Somehow I don't think our favourite couple will ever be the same...
All right - I'm hooked. When can we see some more?
All right - I'm hooked. When can we see some more?