Hi, all!
My name's Taylor, and basically I'm an art loving, accident prone, outdoors lover who can't spell to save her life (how ever did I pass the second grade?). I'm a 15 year old witch with my nose constantly in a book unless of course I'm writing my own, shopping, sleeping, eating, or talking ( which I do quite alot of actually...).
That just about sums it up...so, (once the little-peolpe-in-my-head stop arguing and decide to take that time and actually send in a fic,) please review, even if only to say how much you hate me, I'll do the same for you! And remember, though reviews are much appreciated, this is mostly just for my own personal well being (the-little-people-in-my-head liked the site and told me to join). L8R and keep in mind I'll probably have some fanfics up really, really REALLY soon...really....
GENERAL DISCLAIMER: I niether own, nor am economically profiting from the fantastical world of Harry Potter. J.K. Rowling and Warner Bros. do...I just live there..., so if you have any issues, go rant at them, though I do occasionaly use tid-bits of other songwriters/authors in my work, basically anything/anyone else is mine, (especially Acris, as she's basically me...) so NO TOUCHY!!!
~Taylor A. A.
P.S.
In case your wondering, I choose my penname because a while ago I was diagnosed with ADHD (big suprise there...) and a severe genetic mutation of Ehlers-Danlos Syndrome (which is some rare freaky collogan thingy that makes my body about as stable as your average rubberband) type 3 and Genome 13 (visit http://www.ednf.org for more info and to support the cause/spread the word!). Hence, 'Venia' is Latin of 'Grace' meant to be symbolic of innocence, wisdom, insperation and divinty whil e taint, well, that's pretty self explanatory, so if you don't get it, I'd suggest trip to St. Mungo's...really nice place actually, the little-people-in-my-head say they like the squishy walls...
HTis is really one of the most beautiful fics I've ever read...EVER! THe song you choose really compliments your story nicely and explains alot about Remus's hesitance around relationships...the portrayal of your OC also really explains the magic worlds reaction towards werewolves...excellent! Keep up the good work! Remus learning to pick up and move on, the scene with the mirror, was beautiful and filled with meaning completly beyond words, great job :)
~The Tainted One
That's really beautiful...GREAT JOB
Don't read if you are offended with rape and abuse. Contains events that will be quite offensive and possibly "disgusting". You have been warned.
Runner Up in the Dangerous Liaisons Awards and He Had It Coming Awards.
~The story is now Complete!~
Thanks for reading!
Awful and beautiful at the same time...you tread on dangerous ground biring forth the insanity of a mind ripped in two as the body is torn apart as well...hate, need, isolation, completness, emptiness...total and complete emptieness is the worst...you don't know what to feel anymore...your portrayl of Dumbledore was pathetic, he would have protected Hermione, even Pttor or atleast Neville or McGonagal would have had the sense to tell something was wrong despite Ron's temper...that's what I love about books, there's always a Dumbledore...you've ruined that for, despite your eloquent words, you've still given the characters hell, a world of emptiness that should have been filled, not by requeted lust but true love...true love or death...you gave them niether, and have left many scarred...you show truth, a beautiful and disgusting truth...an accomplishment as much as it is an atrocity. Congratulations, you've just described hell and all it's glory. It was a great fic, i only ask you remeber it and these words: play with fire and your sure to get burned. You'll go up in the flames of madness and angst and depression if you keep this up or keep it in, either way you'll be consumed...other than that I only noticed some slight Ooc-ness, and in general a disgusting perfection, pleasurable to read.
~The Tainted One
GORGEOUS! love Ginny, you did a great job on further developing her character here and getting inside her head...
~The Tainted One
OMG! This was so beautifull, you really show why Neville is in Gryffindor and you do excellent character develpoment...all of your stories are gorgeous...you do such an excellent job of portraying those feelings and facts that matter so much yet are rarely touched on, as for your writting in general, you obviously have innate skill, keep up the good work! You write so beautiffuly :) As for the messages yo send through your fics, that is a skill and wisdom that all lusst for, few obtain, and fewer are born with...wield it well!
~The Tainted one
This was sooo beautiful! you really explain alot in this fic, and do an excellent character development...as for incorperating mental illness into your fic, amazing! another Triumph...
~The Tianted One
WOWWOWWOW!!! That was truly beautiful, keep it up!
WOWWOWWOW!!! That was truly beautiful, keep it up!
Ahhh...and so it begins
Siobhan...interesting name. How is it pronounced? It seems quit pretty, does it have any specia meaning? Same goes for Miss. Murphy's tabby.
Author's Response: It\'s Irish, it\'s pronounced \"Shuh-Vawn\". It\'s meaning has no bearing on her character [though it\'s meaning is generally considered \"God is Gracious\"]. And her cat, Mian, is Irish Gaelic for Desire ;) Which, yes, is a little purposeful.
WOWOW!
~The Tainted One
*taps foot impatiently* well, if you have so much of the plot already, WHY DON'T YOU UPDATE, MEANIE! sorry, *hehe* but you haven't updated in FOREVER and I'm starting to get rather depressed here...
~The Tainted One
Beautifully written, congratulations on a job well done! I must say, it's these scenes that have the most luxerious flow of words, they say that papaer and ink can never really convey the writter's thought...you must come pretty damn close!
Potter and Bell, though? Quite intriuging, and not entirly out of character either. Though with Harry's noble heart, I find it hard to believe that he would take the chance of being close to anybody openly, with the risks he would be putting them at. By the way, I would lovd it if you were to indulge yourself by writting a few one-shots on the Potter/Bell relationship, as well as the murders mentioned at the begining of this fic (specifically Petunia, but a Granny Longbottem, Dr. Granger, and Molly Weasly would be equally appreciated). Back on the topic of Harry, you choose to leave him as a rather one-dimensional character in your story. It is obvious that it is expected of the reader to have read the books inorder to have picked up on the pot, but you've done a delectible job on your charcter development so far, so why hold back? Though we have all read the series, a little well incoorperated background and brief recollection never hurt, especially with the Malfoy family as they are so key to your story. Delve into thier personal lives, thier emotions...seek out places and new hieghts that J. K. Rowling has so cleverly skirtted or left untouched, it appers she has done so for writters such as yourself) to play with and elaborate.
As for Siobhan and Lucius, well, thier relationship makes perfect sense. I do believe that now would be the perfect time for a chapter dedicated to Lucius's point of view...I'm rather stunned as to how he's been able to keep his little...secret...so carfully hidden from his lover, (especially with the Trio/Siobhan friendship) as well as to how deep his actuall love is, it seems rather out of character for Lucius to fell pure emotion (a one-shot explanation of why this is would make a fascinating read). Also, it's rather ify on how Siobhan is not already aware of Lucius's...connections...She is not easily precieved as a nieve girl, but none the less, she is still a girl not yet a woman, even coupled with her loss of virginity.
Anyhow, these next chapters are crucial, and must be played with the utmost certinty and elequence...choose your course wisley my friend...
As for this elusive Liam, he is only mentioned in passing, though he appears to have a startling affect on your main character, yet you choose to leave him relativly clear of the main plot, if I am not mistaken, Siobhan is to be writting back to her dear brother, time draws near to bring Liam into the light!
Another suggestion, having Draco discover his father's relationship while finally taking advatage of having Siobhan in his home would make an excellent read, as it would be Draco to drop the bomb of Lucius's loyalties to the Dark Lord. Another interesting, though quit possibly problematic/irrelevant, topic: You have not once metioned the use of a contraceptive spell. Though Lucius seems quite...experienced...in the matter, it would make an interesting twist to have this brought up, a pureblood scandal if ever! Any how, your work of drawing tantilizing bits of Siobhan's mysterious past has given your main multiple dimensions and kept readers intrigued, *curtsies and inclines head with a smirk* my sincere extolments.
Keep up the good work!
~The Tainted One
P.S.
I only have a single fic up, a short poem, and i was hoping that you would so kindly grace it with a review (no one ever reviews poetry, what's up with that?!?) I would also like to appologize for my rather atrocious spelling, how did I ever pass the 2nd Grade...? By the way, I would like to comend you on your excellent interpritation of Siobhan's loss of virginity; strikingly done, I must say...Siobhan is a well developt character, and she will sing your praises in the land of fanfics for many years after youve moved on.
Ahhh, the hard headed, sharp tounged Slytherin warrior Siobhan is afraid of war...troubled by a dark past, perhaps? Please expand on her emotions dealing with "...these kinds of situations" and "every other thought" that she needs distraction from.
Your gift for detail and description has not gone unoticed, you leave a magnificent picture painted for the reader that is not overly done yet satisfies the hunger of the imagination. Have you ever thought of doing a short piece just describing Diagon Alley and Hogsmenad? I'm positive your views on Weasley's Wizard Wheezs, Zonko's, Olivander's (dark past, obscure personality, sharp wit...Mr. Ollivander and Mr. Burke seem your type of characters) Borgin and Burkes, and most especially Honeydukes would be a chance to show off your skills and test your abilities of carrying an interesting plot throgh even the mundane trials of daily character life. as for unshrouding Siobhan's past, WOW!!! Job well done, this was obviously thought through, continue to expand on that, as well as Draco's resentment towards his parents and his past. Your story is well rounded, but you are not even close to being done, my friend....keep up the good work! By the way, the Death Eater scence, brilliant, it demonstrates Lucius's true feelings, Draco's true cowardice (there might be a story behind that, you may want to expand, or just leave it be as some comidic 'roll your eyes and snort' relief.
Yet, you STILL choose to leave Harry, and Katie, completly one dimensional and (dare I say it?) slightly OoC. I know that niether are particularlly significant, yet, if you choose to use a character or location, etc. by another (or yourself for that matter) take the time and respect to use them well. (Don't you dare give me 'the look') I may be young, and a novice writter at that, but you know that I know that you know (what the heck was that?!?) that you can do an amazing job at details like that if you ever decide to take a breather from the whole 'Lucius/Siobhan heat of the moment' thingy and actually focus on important details that could be used in the future to support you're plot and twists. (if that makes any sense at all, sorry for being so rude, but sometimes it's the littlest things that need the most clousure, especially when handling little known characters/relationships that seldom, if ever, appear in the original books. Unless your planning this big charade twords the end as a form of explanation, which I wouldn't be at all suprised about).
Also, a chapter or so ago, you displayed a lovely allusion to the Greecian muggle work Antigone by the philosopher and playwright Sophecles. Siobhan's sense of rightousness, family loyalty (despite cruel circumstance), sharp tounge, and vivacious personality is clarly reflected in the princess Antigone. Similarities, such as arranged marriage and murder/affairs/love, may also be drawn between the two in thier pureblooded bonds and restraints. I wonder, thoug, are you perhaps forshadowing the dark fates of Antigone and her lover Haimon? Is Liam being parrlled with Ismene? I also see many a tie between Antigone's troubled past/family (what with the whole Oedipus thing, and what not) and Siobhan's own life (the uncle marrying a sister, to have an affair with another, interesting twist on an ancient theme). your work far surpasses terms such as amazing ans exuberant, *bows low* congratulations.
~The Tainted One
Excellent! You've delicatly displayed the true emotions of your characters towards eachother (Pooter and Siobhan's friendship, Lucius's love, Siobhan's nobel heart, and even given Tessie more than just a role to fill as she takes on her own unique though rather muffled personality). Beautiful, breath-taking descriptions. Keep it Up!
~The Tainted One
Aww, Harry's so sweet, a bit dim (oh, alright ALOT dim) but he's still so nice! So sad, why is Siobhan so afraid of the unknown? Is it true that she really does not love Lucius? You did a beautiful job, keep up the good work, and congratulations on finally starting to give Harry some life. So it begins: Siobhan's only true friend must be the one to murder her lover who must be the one to save her from the 'sociopath with a snake fetish' (That is my single most favorite line in this entire story, and you should write a fic and give it that title..."Life as a Sociopath With a Snake Fetish"...it would be worth millions...)
Author's Response: Thanks for all the reviews! I\'m so glad you\'re enjoying. As for your suggestions -- well, I have a loooong way to go, and I do have the ENTIRE story planned. [Honestly, I could tell you how the story ends, as well as what happens in the next two decades of the characters life]. So, everything is going somewhere, and characters that are in the shadows, or aren\'t developed yet, usually will be. I still appreciate the feedback, of course, but yes -- I\'m writing it as a whole, so I\'m not in an awful hurry to develop everyone in the first few chapters ;) I hope you continue to read and enjoy!
Ahhh...and so it begins
Oh, things are heating up agian rather quickly!
UGGH!!! *runs after you swinging sharp/heavy object* I HATE YOU! You can't just write an absolutly terrific story like that that and leave us all hanging! Your point of view changes are well done and your characters well developed...SO PLEASE RELASE FROM OUR AGONY AND UPDATE, YOU MEANIE! *swats you over the head with mace* the plot line so far is well decorated yet remains strong and concise, always a challange for the author...it will really interesting to see how you play this out, you have the Ninette (whom I absolutly LUV, she's beautifully written) and Tonks friendship weaving delacatly around the mystery/suspense of the founders ring...ever sonsider doning a Dumbledore fic? me thinks you'd be great at it!
~The Tainted One
Author's Response: Er...*is a little frightened* Sorry for the lack of an update, but the next chapter is at beta now and will come soon.