I like the story, its well constructed. I mean you have everything planned out perfectly.
I have one cannon error, wouldnt Dumbledore tell Harry he had a twin sister BEFORE his sixth year,especially after the fiascal in the Department of Mysterys.
Author's Response: Don't worry, I'll explain that later. *hint* Dumbledore will have to do some explaining again...it will be for a similar reason that he didnt' tell Harry about the Prophecy. ...its well constructed...you have everything planned out perfectly... wow! I feel so special! lol i didn't think it would be that good! THANX!
As always, I love McKee. I saw a new prespective of her. In the other stories I read about her, she was depressing, sad. One of those people who "try to take a stand." This time around, I saw a her as the kind of person who helps someone like her. Like Ginny. I have to say, I like Ginny more in this story, then I do in JKR's work. She seems smarter, and more like an average teenager. Keep writing how you do. I love it. :)
OOOOhhhh update soon, I want to know what happens.
Author's Response: awesome, thanks for reviewing!
I love the story. I love how they gossip about the way they are "shipped." I have one grammer mistake though, you had said "pussy-cat" and it should have been "pussycat." I like the little bet that Ginny and Hermione have going on. Did you just make up the statisics? Or are they real?
Oh, I loved it. It was really good, I was captivated by it i the begining and couldnt tear away from it. I
I have a few errors for you:
You have yesterdays robes it should beyesterday’s robes You forgot an apostrophe. You have Frog spawn It should be one word frogspawn Another part says The gentle humming of the air conditioner was broken only by the soft breathing of Onyx, my cat I think it would be better phrased Only the soft breathing of Onyx, my cat, broke the gentle humming of the air conditioner You also have cover less paperbacks It should be coverless paperbacks Coverless is one word. Also, sorry I'm almost done, you have not just for me but for the world. It should be not just for me but also for the world farther down, Stonewalls and Bedroom should be one word. You also have one cannon mistake, but this was also written pre-HBP, Lily is a Potions Master, not a charms. *smiles* I like how you describe Petunia, how she is partially superficial with no imagination, Why a wardrobe, what's a Gollum
Thank you for letting me read your story. I hope that you update it soon, it's been awhile.
I liked the story. My favorite part, is when he changed his name. It is going to be funny to read while he copes with things that girls have to cope with. I have one thought, wouldnt Ron be in diagon alley there with him?
The ending wasnt really what I expected. It was confusing. I dont understand it.
Author's Response: Yeah, I know, sorry. If you read the note at the end it says that I was in a rush and didn't have much time...yeah, I should have been patient and perfected it before sending it in (I guess I just coulnd't wait...=)) Also, I made it so that Harry was staying at the Leaky Cauldron alone, on someone's orders, I suppose (yeah, well, scold me for being so weak with the details, huh!) In the second chapter he meets up with Ron and Hermione. Sorry!
WOW. I love your story. My eyes were glued to the screen, I couldnt feel everything that was going on. I love it all completly. If you write like that in all of your storys They will only be stupendous.
I wish an 11 was possible in the ratings.
Oh, I cried. I love the whole thing. I love how you have the littlest bit of actual story in between. I will review again, when I have read them all, and give you anther rating.
Author's Response: Thanks ^_^ Glad to hear that you like the dialogues in-between and that you found this sad.
I like it, I like the description and also how you are writng a H/Hr. lol Keep writing like this, I can't wait for the First Chapter.
Britney
Oh, I forgot I had been reading this. I have been slowly reading it since the first chapter, but sorry the dumb login problems kept me from getting a review in.
All I have to say is I like it, Congrats on being a featured story, I knew you had the ability. I am learning loads from this already, about dance. I know that it is really hard to dance. I cant wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm happy you've come back to review now that the login problems have been resolved. I'm delighted that you like my story...I'll definitely keep updating.
I love it. Its really interesting. The begining, at first sounded reallly wierd but then it fit in the end. I like how she has a twist in her.I'll PM you my summary. :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the summary, it's loads better than mine. Haha. Thanks, my style of writing is "different" as my teachers always said to me, but they usually alwyas work out in the end.
I was in tears. I loved it. It sent chills through my spine. I didnt know you had that kind of talent in you. I shoud really read more of your work. I like the excuese of her enthusiaism.
I'm off to cry some more over this story. I wish an 11 was possible in rating it.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked my story! To tell the truth, my other story isn't as good as this one, even though it has five times as many reads. I tried to write it in JKR's style and not my own and it's just doesn't come out as well. I'll probably finish that story, but I've been thinking about what I'm going to write next and I'm going to write whatever I decide on more like this. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review!
I liked it, I love all of your work, I like how you brought emotion into it, I like how you have her not fighting in the war, how she is trying not to be "mushy" I like it all, It's nothing I wouldnt expect from you.
I loved it, I was rolling on the ground laughing at the end, I like all the cliche'd names. I love your humor fics, there alwyas funny. LoL
I like Phhil and Philll the best though, this is going to be a story I'm going to talk about oftne, Is there a way I can get an 11 put on this thing?
Author's Response: Aw, thank you Britney. I'm glad you liked it and that you understood it.
Oh, I like this one. I wanted to cry when Lavender grabbed Parvati's Portrait. I like Aunt Mindy more now than ever now, she is like a mother to Lavender.
Then end is really interesting, I cant wait for the next chapter, I wonder who those people walked into?
*walks away in deep thought*
Author's Response: Those people? Oh, I think you'd like to know... They just might be important *whistles* Thanks for the review!
Oh, so mad, I just gave you a review and accidentally shut down the window. *grr*
I like how you kept to your word and stayed away from religon. I also like how you portrayed Lavender Brown as a sad teen, as she should be, she is 17 and just lost her best friend. She really does need that figure, Aunt Mindy, right now.
Now onto some grammar mistakes. *lol*
In the first paragraph, you have flowerbed as two words when it should be one word. Also you have She just was captivated by the sight of it all,. This sentence doesn’t sound right, maybe taking out the “just”. Lastly you have Nothing seemed to interest her – with Parvati,, after Parvati there should be a semi-colon, not a comma.
Overall, I'm liking the plot so far, its mysterious. *lol*
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Nothing else much to say, really. :-)
:: loves Lavender Brown::
I got confused, I thought the letter she had was the letter that told her Parvati was dead, or at least her whole familiy was dead.
You're treading in shallow water TheVanishingAct, talking about religon and everything.
Overall I think it was good, I cant wait for it to be updated, you have to tell me when.
I hope my tags didnt make this all corrupt.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yes, I only use the metaphors of heaven and hell this once. Otherwise, we're in the clear! And yes, the letter was. It was just from Padma. Again, thanks for the review!
It was full moon when the Dark Lord sealed a part of his soul within a magical amulet, and then broke it in half. One half was left to the faithful werewolves to guard. The other half was tossed into the impenetrable depths of time where no one but him could get it. When the first half has been found, the Order of the Phoenix selects Hermione Granger to go back into the past to search for the missing piece. What is waiting for her is a brutal task that will test her beyond her limits, and an undying love that extends beyond the boundaries of time.
RL/HG, Post-HBP
No werewolves were harmed in the making of this story.
Update (9 May): Chapter 17, Burning, is up! Enjoy!
I liked this story a lot. I read it just on a whim, I know this isn't a very insightful review but It's really interesting. I also like the day that Benjy dies, not 'cause he dies, but because it's my birthday.
Britney
Author's Response: Awww, thanks Britney! I'm glad you liked it :)
“I’ve grown accustomed to her face…” is the line from ‘My Fair Lady’ that inspired, being proof that snarky and romantic are not a contradiction in terms.
*Rated for the 'D' word (another quote, :D) used in the note before the poem.*
I'm sorry I'm not one to leave..'OMG I lurved your poem' but this was amazing. I loved it. No critisim. Thank you so much for writing it. :D
Author's Response: I\'m one to say \'ohmyheck, I loved your review!\' :D Thanks!
I'm sorry I'm not one to leave..'OMG I lurved your poem' but this was amazing. I loved it. No critisim. Thank you so much for writing it. :D
Author's Response: Yay! I get a chance to say thank you again! ^_~