Wow! I completely didn't realise this was up here yet and I was just wondering why it was taking so long! Lol, really sorry! Just to say, well done! And yes, the thought of a llama running around one of my classes is pretty funny, too! Hehe! Looking forward to the next chappie!

Phily :)

Author's Response: That\'s alright. Thank you for all of the comments!

I have read and reviewed before, but I am using this to look at for class now and so I wanted to read and review again. ;)

“It is as if the flowers are keeping her company. The place is the Garden of Elov, a place of life and love, a place where flowers and greenery come to life when there is love and life around.”

The picture you paint here is so lush and full of life. Very detailed and bright. Nice!

The butterflies are a lovely touch. They represent the delicate and fragile state that love can put you in. Butterflies also have connotations of bright and vibrant colours in life and a sense of escapism: all things that I feel come into this fic.

“She exhales, disappointment once again washing the shores of her heart like a deep, dark ocean.”

A perfect example of where your descriptive techniques come into their own. Everything carries a lot of other ideas that, if someone thinks about it, add to the meaning of the simile. This, for instance, implies that her heart is deep and dark and therefore bereft of love. It may not be exactly what you mean, but it enhances things in my opinion. :)

The way you leave this part is lovely. The image that you use of them being so happy together and the warmth and life of them is a stark contrast with the sad tone of beforehand and this really highlights the joy of the last part.

Well done again on some of your most beautiful writing!

Phily :)

Hello there my fellow English girl! :D
Wow, I thought this was a great story. I didn't look, does your other story continue on from this or not? It would be great to see what happens! I think that you have a lovely way of writing, it's very clear yet sophisticated. Well done! I clicked here from the forums to see some of your writing and am very glad I did! The way you have written this from different points of view is very clever and I think you have Remus very well in character! :)

Just a couple of tiny bits that I noticed, hope you don't mind!

'Looking at her stood in front of him' I was a little confused here, do you mean to put 'as she stood'?
Ok, there was one other thing but I've lost it now, sorry! It was a tiny word so I wouldn't worry!
Lol, sorry if I was just being too picky there but this is really well written and a couple of little mistakes shouldn't bring it down. Keep up the good writing and I will keep reading when I can!

Phily :)

Author's Response: Wow! I\'m honoured! Thanks a lot, this review means a lot to me. Thanks for letting me know about that mistake, i\'ll edit it so it\'s clearer. The next one follows on and there\'s another in the queue as well as some more that i haven\'t posted. Hayley

I thought that this was so lovely! You weren't talking from personal experience were you? I felt really sad for Hermione! And their love seemed so beautiful. Sounding quite cliched now, I know! :D I especially loved this line, it kind of summed it up for me: "What he felt for Hermione was true adoration, unblemished affection, and pure love, and he knew that she felt the same way about him." It's so sweet! I'm a real addict to romance you know, hehe! The cuter the better!

Just two little things, (hope that's ok!)
"Of course, it wasn’t all achieved just like that. Ron hadn’t made the best grades on his Potions final for Snape’s class during sixth year" This isn't a mistake, I was just confused. Didn't Slughorn teach them potions in sixth year though??

"He loved her so much that, sometimes, it hurtto even look at her." hurt to, perhaps?

And lastly: "Ron felt her Hermione reach up to link her" I think either 'her' or 'Hermione' would be fine!

Anyway, hope that helps-just my suggestions! Keep the next part coming!

Phily :)

Author's Response: Aw! Thanks so much for your lovely compliments, phily! I appreciate the helpful hints as well, too. I will go back and change them sooner or later, thanks for that. I\'m so glad that you liked it! ~Lindsey :)

Gonz, this is such a lovely poem! It's a very interesting choice to use Petunia's point of view. I haven't ever really thought about her feelings in everything before, but this has, in a way, pointed it out to me. I especially like the last stanza, it's very touching. Well done! Cwiddy should really like it as her gift!

Phily :)

Author's Response: I starting thinking about Petunia when I did an assignment for Mythology class and I got really interested in the Lily-Petunia relationship. So when I read Anabelle Lee it screamed out to me as another way to show the that relationship. I\'m really glad you enjoyed my poem and lots a ton for reviewing!

Wow, Lindsey! I love it! :D :D Thank you so much! Hehe, it made me laugh and was still really sweet and touching with it! Well done! (I'm feeling an overuse of exclamation marks coming on, as usual, sorry!)

I especially laughed at this at the beginning: "He twirled into the room and sighed onto the couch, lost in his own thoughts." The image of Ron 'twirling' cracked me up! I do hope it wasn't supposed to be too serious...

Ooh, when Ginny came in... "She had a very round belly, and was looking at them intently." I was like 'awww' that's a really nice little addition in there! :)

"Ron had officially become addicted to the ‘enternet’, and now he couldn’t seem to make himself get off of it." Aw, we all know the feeling, Ron! Hehe! I loved this idea for a fic as it's just so out of the ordinary and it is really bizarre to imagine Ron looking at all this stuff; it's a very interesting concept!

I love love loved the ending! It kind of leaves you hanging but in a good way, I think. I think that he would understand when he reads and it would be weird but fun for him. However, you may have meant it in a different way? Ambiguous!

I just wanted to say again, thanks so much for organising and a huge thanks for my story! :D *massive huggles!*
I look forward to the next SB!

Phily :)


Author's Response: That was such a marvelis review! *huggles back* (We seem to be doign that a lot . . . *giggles*) Anyway, thank you for being a part OF the SB, and I hope to see you in it again. As for this story, I am really flattered and excited that you like it, because I didn\'t know if you would, actually! But, I\'m happy that you did. (the image of Ron twirling was fun to imagine as well, and I myself and addicted to the pc, so yeah. LOL.) Thanks again! ~Lindsey :)

I loved this story so much! I PMed you regarding the review for it in Fiction Junction that I just did, however, this deserves another! :) The description was so beautiful that I could picture everything you were depicting in the most detailed way. I thought the beginning was very effective with the enumeration of the attributes of the snow and your writing style throughout really explores Lily's feelings in a very effective way. Well done!

I never usually even look at Snape/Lily, but this was so cleverly written that I couldn't not keep reading, if you understand my meaning.

Well done once again. I am a new fan of your writing!

Phily :D

Author's Response: OH Phily! That post in FJ made me so much happier than you could have possibly imagined! Wow, thank you for the comments on her personality. I was a little hesitant to push the boundaries regarding submissio guidelines, but you\'ve made me gleeful that you understood the pairing :D

This is a very sad, yet lovely story. I like the original idea and the use of music throughout added extra interest.
I thought that the use of ‘her’ during the first section of the writing instead of giving away that it was Luna was a great idea. It gave an air of mystery to both the girl and her music, which I assume was intended. Well done!
Your characterisation of Harry was very consistent with the books. I can just imagine that he’d do rounds at St Mungo’s on Christmas Eve in the aftermath of the war. Luna, too, was well written in her very expressional and deep-thinking manner. Finally, the relationship between the two characters was sufficiently awkward at the beginning, developing into quite a tense section, followed by anger. This progress through the emotions really allows the reader to pick up on the background to your story, despite it being a one-shot.
I especially liked the use of the sentences:

“Harry rested his elbows on his knees and ran his hands through his hair.”
Giving a great sense of Harry’s despair at the words he is hearing.

“He’s green eyes flashed black, and he slammed his fist on the piano keys.”
Displaying Harry’s anger and frustration at Luna in the present, but also his frustration at the fact that many Deatheaters remain uncaught.

I did notice a couple of slight things that I wanted to point out if it doesn’t seem discourteous.
1. “He’s green eyes flashed black, and he slammed his fist on the piano keys.” I think that the ‘he’s’ was meant to be ‘his’?
2. “It’s not as if I’ve had to deal with?” I’m afraid I got a little confused when reading this part, and thought it may be missing a word.
3. “Because even though I believe you could right about him…” I thought that this sentence may read better as “Because even though I believe you could be right about him…”

Other than these tiny little things, it was perfect! I thought that the ending was very fitting with the story. It left a sense of the unfinished yet with no need for another chapter to be added. “While the note now held different meaning, it was right. Things were different now.” This last part really made me want to think about the events that may have followed this meeting.
Well done on such great work!