This is the first songfic I have read that included the words to the song. It was different. They characters were OOC but it worked.

This story is quite amusing, not possible, but very amusing. It’s funny to think about what happens if you don’t think through your spells before casting them. The idea that he was randomly firing spells makes you really wonder what was going through Harry’s head to produce an Aging spell that only aged the body and not the mind, well not aged but un-aged (if that can be considered a word). You had a really good idea for a story and the interaction between the three of them allows some insight into what Tom and Albus are really like. The fact that Tom pouts is great; I have always felt that Harry pouts too. And of course it is very fitting that Snape was the one to “cure” the two of them. Good Job

Oooh I loved it. This was so cute, first kiss, I wish I could remember back that far, ohwait I think I can! (brushing cobwebs out of the way)

This first chapter of your story is very well thought out. There were a few minor errors such as missing letters or the wrong letter typed, you might want to re-read it so you can find them.

I must say I was on the edge of my seat while Tom was creating his Horcrux. The burning feelings were exactly what I thought it would feel like. You must have done some research to devise a way to create them. I liked the way you gave a glimpse of another Horcrux being created as he read the book.

However, I can’t imagine him being ‘scared’ but that is because we only know Lord Voldemort, not the young Tom Riddle, you worked it in well and gave a good reason why he was scared. I almost, almost felt sorry for him but it quickly vanished.

Using little snippets of things we knew from the actual story was a nice touch too, it made your story more believable.

Not many stories have been written that include how the Horcruxes are made and I think you did a very good job and your version is very believable.
~Kristy

The way you set the scene for your story is wonderful. I click of the cane (although this is only a movie thing) was a nice touch. Your descriptions made it easy to picture a long shadow cast by the moon, making its way down the street. I was left wondering though, is the drunken redhead man a Weasley? Following your character into the store was creepy and gave me chills, which I’m sure was your intent. I can almost smell the stench of rotting things and dark spells. The portrayal of Borgin is well written too, very in character with JK’s own descriptions of him and how he reacts to Malfoy. One little minor thing, while still maintain a hold on their shopping., this should be maintaining. Other than that this is another good introduction to what goes on in Diagon Alley, you are really good at setting the scene. You have stepped over to the dark side in striking detail. The description of the innocent looking ring and it’s affect on Quentin when he picks it up, it gives a prelude to what is about to happen. Dark magic is something that many of us wonder about and I think you have done a good job here. The way the ring starts to affect her, bringing her down and causing her to doubt herself is a brilliant concept for a cursed object. It doesn’t just come right out and kill her or show any signs that something is happening to her. The mental affect this cursed ring is really good, self-doubt really is a dark thing that lives in each of us and magnifying it to drive the character to suicide was well thought out. It is indeed a very sinister form of “punishment” that Lucius is about to set upon Narcissa.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this lovely review! I\'m so glad you enjoyed the fic so much. It\'s probably one of my favourite pieces of writing, so I\'m very glad you liked it! Thanks very much xx

The first thing I noticed was the warnings you have listed for this fic, I think you were overly cautious, just mentioning them really does delve into it but it is better to be safe than sorry. The warnings do make the story sound as if it will be a very dark one but with the lighthearted touches of Mrs. Evan’s it was hard to get into that mindset.

Ignoring the horrified gasp of her sister, Lily reached into the pouch she'd brought from her room, and throwing a handful of powder into the grate, leaned in to the resulting green flame and called, "Severus Snape!"

I love the way you captured Petunia here, I can see her sitting there with that ‘pinched’ look on her face.  The interaction between the sisters is very well done.

I also liked the interaction you used between Lilly and Snape but he comes across a bit grown up, more like he would be as the Professor and not a thirteen-year-old boy, however this is just my humble opinion.  It is a very good glimpse at what their friendship was like though.

I really loved your interpretation of how the Dementors were formed, it was a very creative and believable.  This area of the story was definitely the main focus and your in depth explanation could easily have been in a DADA class or book.

(I have said this in a thousand arguments about the Dark Arts!)

Overall I really liked this, it would have been nice to Snape’s opinion on several other aspects of the Dark Arts and this line:

"One of the things I have learned, Lily, is that if you do not learn about something, then you cannot control it.”

I loved this story, I'm sad to see it end. I just read through it again to make sure I hadn't missed anything. I'll move onto something else you have written.

Author's Response: Hi there! I\'m so glad you enjoyed this story! Thank you for leaving a review. There is actually one more chapter to go, and it\'s a bit longer than the rest, so it\'s not quite over. I\'m still editing it and hope to post it this weekend. I hope you enjoy it! I\'d be thrilled if you were to read some of my other stories and hope you enjoy those as well. Thank again for reading this one and for the lovely review! ~Gina :)

As I have said on some of your other stories, I absolutely love the way you write. This story could easily have been ripped out of the pages of one of J.K.'s books. I wasn't sure what category you intended for this but I find it a bit of an angst. As the reader you can feel Harry's joy at seeing his loved ones and his sorrow at having to leave them behind. The way he interacts with his parents that he doesn't know and with with Dumbledore that he loves is very true to character. I really liked this one and I will continue to read your stories as you add them.
~Kristy

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for reading this story! And thank you for the amazing compliments. *blushes* I wrote this story for a challenge over the summer. It was about the Department of Mysteries. I suppose the D/A category might be a good home for it, I hadn\'t thought about that. Thanks again for reading this story, and for the wonderful review!! ~Gina :)

This story is beautifully written. Your description of the abbey and the grounds surrounding it transported me to the same spot. I love stories that paint a picture of a world that you can easily see for yourself. Using only the word she made me hurry through the story to see who “she” was, I knew for sure it would be Narcissa. Using the abbey as a place to hide from Lucius, the devil, was wonderful. It has long been believed that evil cannot step on hallowed grounds and the way you portrayed Lucius in this story makes it easy to see him as the devil. I like how you had him step into Voldemort’s place and continue the terror that was going on. In my opinion, people who are truly evil only do things for their own benefit. Saying that he sacrificed people he loves and his twisted belief that they died as martyrs for him shows just how far he has sunk into the darkness. I must say though, I find it hard to believe that Cho could use the killing curse, as Bella told Harry, in order to do a dark spell you must really feel the hate behind it and I can’t imagine Cho reveling in that much hate. It does make sense though in your story since they have been fighting so hard for so long.

~Kristy


Author's Response: thanks so much for the fantastic review! :)

It was a little bit whangsty but you pulled it off. It was a good way to submit a missed time frame into the history of their friendship. You pulled off the emotions of a 12 year old boy well, I'm not sure I could have done that. I like that in the end he proved he was a Gryffindor.

Author's Response: Thanks! It is a little angsty, yeah, but it seemed to work better that way.