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Thank you.
Phineas' character is amazing! I love how we were able to be in his POV. Poor Sirius -- and that finger! Arg! Damn Peter to hell; hopefully Dumbledore can fix this. I wonder if Sirius and Remus were a couple? Is Remus going to look for Sirius?
All these questions -- I'm intrigued!
Please continue!
Author's Response: thank you for the response! all of those questions - and more - shall be answered, I swear.
for all of his self-sufficiency, Sirius is not used to doing things alone.
That is exactly how I envisioned Sirius - it was like a light blub going off in my mind when I read it. Again, I totally love Remus in all of his heart-broken, confused but still strong glory. Phineas' speech about Sirius and his family really got me thinking - I kind of wished he would accept his family. I mean, he is the last male Black - they need him to continue the name. Damn . . . I just realized that canon-wise, Sirius is already dead. The Black family is screwed . . . I really liked how you described all the details about the potion making - brilliant!
Great job! Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks much! That line came as a sort of revelation to me, too, in all honesty.
Updates pending, and I\'m almost finished w. chapter nine.
Still, for a long moment, the only thing Sirius can think of is how very much he would like to kiss Remus until neither of them needs that knowledge any longer.
Thank God some sort of evidence to Sirius' feelings for Lupin. So much tension - terrific! :D
Author's Response: thank you thank you....
ch. 11 should be sort of a de-tensionizer
(my incoherency is due to the combination of percocet and a broken broken finger)
The first paragraph was just perfect! The pale flames are still shining in their sconces, though Sirius can see sunlight shining through the edges of the heavy velvet curtains. I loved that description! Phineas' opinion and POV of Moody was great - I loved how they interacted. Very good!
Ok, wow - just wow. I loved, loved the first two paragraphs. Remus is absolutely wonderful in this one - but I have said that already. The dynamics in Dumbledore's office, between all the characters was amazing. Moody - you have written him perfectly. Because of you I feel really sorry for Bellatrix and her husband. Your descriptions of them - God, it was wonderful! Great job! :D
Author's Response: Thank you soooo much. I admit, I hate Bellatrix as much as the next Sirius aficionado -- still, I also felt bad for her after writing that -- all of that glittering malevolence brought to a dull, grinding halt.
next chapter is very much in progress, i swear.
So, with your introduction of Lupin I have decided that this is my favorite fic on mugglenet. This whole chapter is brilliant - the way you weave french and english together - it gives off the impression that the author is intelligent and knows the characters and what will happen to them. I was frustrated because I didn't know what the shop keepers were saying - I think you should put the list of translations before the story instead of after. Unless you were going for confusion on the readers' part -suspense, maybe? Oh, Lupin is heartbreaking! I really do hope Sirius and Remus are a couple - that would be so awesome! Wonderful writing, please continue!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m sitting in front of my computer blushing right now, I swear.
I\'m so glad you\'re enjoying the story - and thank you for the suggestions re: the French. It is very difficult to find the right place to put the translations, I will admit.
At the moment, I\'m working on ch. 8, so I can promise that there is more to come.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m sitting in front of my computer blushing right now, I swear.
I\'m so glad you\'re enjoying the story - and thank you for the suggestions re: the French. It is very difficult to find the right place to put the translations, I will admit.
At the moment, I\'m working on ch. 8, so I can promise that there is more to come. (goes to write more)
NO! NO! NO! HOW DARE THEY DO THAT WHEN WORMTAIL IS STILL ON THE LOOSE AND SIRIUS IS STILL ON THE RUN! DAMN CROUCH AND FUDGE TO HELL - DAMN THEM TO AWFUL DEATHS AND BURNING HORRIBLENESS! THEY MESSED EVERYTHING UP!
Arg - Lucius’ thoughts were very interesting when he was getting dressed - how he was going to kill all the aurors he could until he died - it was great insight into his character that I don’t see often. I wonder how upset Narcissa will be when she finds out that Lucius gave her sister over to the Ministry. God, Crouch and Fudge both majorly suck . . . *broods*
Great chapter by the way. XD
Author's Response: Thanks much! Although I agree with you that Fudge is horrible, in this case the guilty party is his predecessor, Millicent Bagnold.
Arg, I read about your broken finger on livejournal. I hope it's feeling better. :]
That was amazing. I loved the description of the Wealsey boys asleep. Even though the part in Peter's POV was short, it still was very powerful. I loved it. :D Please continue!
AHAHAHAHA!!
Bellatrix got shot - I hope it was in the ass! It still amazings me that someone could be so vicious as to torture someone into insanity. God, I hope she dies at the end!
Honestly, I was disappointed in the chapter until Remus showed up - I couldn't care less about Lucius and his problems. I mean, just because it plays a big part in the plot . . . pssh - whatever! Ahahaha! I love your Remus, have I said that already? :D
Author's Response: i was hoping someone else would have that reaction to Bellatrix\'s injuries. i thought that it was almost...poetic, y\'know?
and psh - who needs plot?
seriously, though -- thanks for the review, esp. the positive comments on remus. he\'s been written so wrongly so often that i always approach his pov with a little trepidation.
Ahahahaha -- you gave Remus braces! Wonderful!
Author's Response: Yep Moony\'s got braces. His teeth are a running gag throughout the whole story actually.
Wow, the first paragraph slapped me in the face - I was so stunned. At first I thought it was James, shaving for the first time or something. I started reading the story expecting sappy romance and I got a very good representation of an emotionally confused and hurt Lily. I really loved her POV - great job!
Author's Response: thanks, i\'m so glad you liked it!
I really liked your Snape voice in this fic - very nice!
I thought it was funny how Lucius just appears in Snape's house after he escapes from Azkaban, so casually and so acting like nothing is wrong.
Great work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I\'m glad you liked the fic. You know, I have trouble staying away from comedy when I write. I guess I unconsciously slipped that in. -----RMV
This won second place in the June/July Monthly Challenge: Great Love!
Brilliant. There's not too many femslash stories around and I was delighted to see this one. You captured the feelings they had for each other wonderfully!
:D
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the kind review! =]
Brilliant! I love how you incorporated the Weasleys - wonderful! :D
Oh, wow. I was kind of hesitant to review after the last one - so long! But I really do like your take on Remus, especially how the fic starts out with him reading a book. He's so absorbed in his reading; I love how he mumbles to himself.
his face etched with lines as though he wore a constant frown
I love it - the description is so much better than just saying wrinkles - great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, hope you\'ll keep reading!
That was kind of heartbreaking - damn Tom Riddle! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind review.
That was very beautiful. I loved the scene when she is crying in bed. Very real - very good. Wonderful! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it.
Wow - I really liked the first sentence. I could almost feel the cold sunlight. I also found the last paragraph brilliant - it was simple, but it really was heartbreaking.
That would make things easier. I could just forget and go on living my life. I don’t know why I’m here in the first place. I should just leave.
The only thing was that I felt like her thoughts could have been broken up instead of in all one paragraph.
Overall, great job! :D
Author's Response: Thanks! Do you mean, her thoughts are separate from the paragraph, or each thought is a separate paragraph? Thank you for the input! I\'ll think about it! And I\'m glad you liked it!
Ok, while I was reading this I got a sense that Ginny/Blaise is almost like Lily/Severus. The fundamentals are there - but I suppose Severus would be more cruel than Blaise, even on Blaise' worst days. I was wondering where you were going with this - until I realized that the time is really moving quickly. I hope after Harry breaks up with Ginny that she gets with Blaise. It would be great - I can just picture it - Harry running off to battle Voldemort, and Blaise and Ginny getting together during the summer or next school year. I really like your characterization of Blaise - he just seems so sad, so lost. Explaining his relationship with his mother was great, it really made me think about Blaise' character differently. Please continue - great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I\'m having a lot of fun with the Zabini family. Blaise is not cruel, he\'s just not very open. He prefers to guard his emotions, possibly a result of his patchy upbringing.
Hmm - I don't know how to take this. Harry seemed kind of out of character to me. I understand why he wouldn't look Ginny in the eye, but to accept a dance offer . . . It was almost like he wanted to make Ginny jealous -which totally doesn't make sense. Ahaha - Draco a werewolf - finally he gets what's coming to him. I wonder if he is going to steal the wolfsbane from Lupin. An appearance by Lupin would be awesome! Great work - please continue!
Author's Response: Okay...*takes a deep breath* Harry. Um, yeah. I know it\'s doesn\'t really work, but I needed to get him and Ginny to separate so I just forced it out. And Lupin makes an appearance, but it\'s in the companion Hr/D fic that I\'m anxiously waiting to get validated.