Hi! I'm Alyssa, and I'm 16. I'm a busy sophomore. Harry Potter is my default "homework-break." I love to write, and I'm currently obsessed with the Next Generation. JKR is a genius for giving us all these characters so conducive to fanfiction. :)
SQUEEEE! It's up!!!!! (little late...it's been up since yesterday, just haven't read it til now)
Soooo...ohboy! I love it love it love it to the eleventeenth power times two million!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Wow, I'm really hyperr...maybe 'cause i just ate a cookie)
So...I love the fact that Vlad is a writer. That's so...unexpected, yet not really...because he was really silent....and silence is a writer thing...so yeah. Um...what else? (Truthfully I read the chapter during school while I was s'posed to be doing research...so it's been awhile since I read it. Well not really that long...but still, I'm forgetting the details.)
APPLE. Wow. Idiot face brain head with a bucket of Daniel Radcliffe soup in a castle far away where no one can hear you Mickey Mouse...etc. That is what I think of him. Who does he think he is anyway? He's just setting himself up for...something...bad. (Lack of adjectives.) I'm sure he has the best intentions, though....don't we all?
Okay, I have to say this. I am a delusional Ted/Arden shipper. I've even read Pre-Juiced Plums and everything. I just think Ted and Arden are adorable together! And that's saying something, because I don't ship non-canon...ships. Not that this is canon or anything. It's just written so well it's like canon.
I'm eager to enter the challenge and get an IDIOTIC PRIZE! Yeah!!!!! I'm drawing...no wait, I should just send it to you...no spoilers :P
I love the whole wolf-fox-speak thing. I never would've thought of that. Here's a virtual chocolate frog card for your ingenuity. You're welcome in advance. I made sure it was one you didn't have.
It's so...Jordany to not be able to act dumb. I was rather surprised that Apple, as a prominent political figure, didn't have mind defences and that Jordan was able to get through so easily...but then, Jordan is a genius and Apple is...not a genius.
Um...I think that is all. I can't wait til chapter 12 is up!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love getting reviews from you... especially those that include the Elder Swear. It\'s interesting that you ship Ted/Arden, but I won\'t get annoyed... I ship some pretty weird things. Like Tom/Minerva. And in the Les Miserables fandom, I ship Eponine/Montparnasse... and Eponine died protecting ANOTHER MAN WHO SHE LOVED MADLY, and Montparnasse willingly offered to kill or hurt Eponine more than once in the book. What can I say, I\'m insane. OoooOOooOOh, I\'d love to get a picture (and I must admit, I snickered at your wry little \'I made sure it was one you didn\'t have.\' Have you read Out of the Darkness by Tim The Enchanter? It\'s one of my favourite humour fics, and there\'s a big chocolate frog card thing in thre.) As for Apple not having mind defenses, I think he (a. Assumed that there were only Muggles around, so there was nothing to fear, and (b. Was arrogant enough to think he was invincible in that respect. No one would make a big insane plan like that unless he had dangerous self-confidence.
Oh, brilliant chapter as always!
(Insert long and highly congratulatory review here)
Sorry, I'm short on time at the moment or I'd comment more. I'll leave a nice long review on your next chapter, okay?
--Alyssa
Author's Response: Hahaha, okay! Thanks very much for readin\'!
AAAAAAAHHHH....double review because I just thought of something: will you let contestants see some entries of the other contestants of your amazing contest?!?! That would be amazing.
And, so this isn't considered spamtastic, I'll write about Jordan/Giorgi. Absolupotivily adorable. The two are like polar opposites at first sight, but they really have a lot in common. That's amazing. I loved the whole football thing...it's so obvious that Jordan likes her. "She's my sister..." Yeah right, Jordan. We all know you don't think of her as your sister. It's pretty obvious that she likes him too. 'Course, they're both kinda oblivious...first time Jordan's been oblivious to anything!
Um...there was something else...oh yeah, why did Jordan have to use a wig and stick on eyebrows when it's clearly possible to change those things magically? (Harry's yellow eyebrow in the 6th book, anyone? That's one of my favourite Luna quotes...random :))
Author's Response: I will post all of the entries on my friend\'s website. *Nod* Hehehe, Jordan/Giorgi shipping is fun, but I can\'t tell you whether they really are an item or not, because I am Mysterious. As for Jordan using the wig and eyebrows, they don\'t learn self-transfiguration until sixth year (this is their fifth year), there are Muggles all over the place, and Jordan had already done underage magic once that day, so I think Jordan didn\'t want to risk it!
Duhn-duhn-duhhhhhhhn.....
Jeez, Schmergo! Why'd you have to give us a cliff hanger ending like that!?!?! Darn it, now i hafta keep reading your story...(only kidding, i love it!!)
Soo...Ivy. Yeah. The girl is brilliant. That's all there really is to say on the subject.... :)
But what about Arden? I don't know what she'll think of Ivy...but Ivy will be nice to her. Wait--will they ever actually meet? I mean, during Ted's transformations and all...ooh, I'm eager to find out!
Apple. Just when I was starting to like that man...but what is "something illegal?"
Lee. Okay, brilliant theory here (but it's probably entirely wrong) Lee is Lily Evans. Lily...Elizabeth? Evans. Yeah. Just a guess. It would be so cool if it were true...but it probably won't be. Then again, I did suspect that Snape was good before DH came out...so if this is right too that'd be awesome.
Giorgi. Let's just say I'm very eager to hear more from her.
The Triwizard Tournament. Wow, Schmerg, you're full of surprises. That was entirely unexpected...but way cool.
Well, I ought to go now. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I do love my cliffhangers... wait\'ll you read the third book, that has the world\'s biggest cliffhanger near the end, and then you\'ll kill me.
Ivy and Arden will meet-- there\'s an Ivy/Ted/Arden interaction in Chapter Eleven. Wow, I really give away a lot of the story.
As for the rest... you shall seee!
Again, a great chapter. I like how Giorgi is developing; she sounds like an interesting character. As for Jordan, naughty-naughty for lying to Giorgi!!!! The whole thing is going to blow up in his face, poor bloke!
Ooh, and I like Lockhart--oh, I mean Apple (are they related or something? :)) Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you! (Heh, Lockhart and Apple aren\'t related... they actually aren\'t THAT similar... remember, this is all from Harry\'s point of view.) And I can\'t blame Jordan for lying to Giorgi... I mean, she would think he was insane if he told her he was magic.
I like this chapter! (How could I not?) I'm very anxious to see what happens with Lee. Poor Jordan. I think Giorgi will be good for him. They have such totally opposite personalities that they'll end up balancing each other out. Update soon, please!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think Jordan and Giorgi are fun to write because they\'re so different, so they will either end up being perfectly complimentary or murdering each other with axes. ^_^ I will update in about ten minutes.
Once again, beautiful chapter.
Okay, I have loads to say about this:
Firstly, I like how Apple has evolved. I think it is time for the wizarding world to be a little less "racist." Or...blood-ist? Because wizards and Muggles aren't really a separate race....
Anyway, moving on.
Secondly, poor Arden! How inconsiderate of Ted to leave her hanging with no answer and just go to the ball with another girl. It must've taken a huge amount of courage for her to even work up the nerve to ask him.
Thirdly, poor Emma! What was Tyroonie thinking, asking Marina out like that when he was just starting to get a chance with Emma!
Fourthly, WHO IS LEE?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!!?!?! (the caps and excessive punctuation were in the hope that you'd actually reveal something this time, but I'm sure my hoping is in vain. Oh well, it's just another reason to keep reading!)
There was something else, but I can't think of it at the moment. Anyway, can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: This is the first double post I\'ve ever seen ten posts after the first one. Odd.
AAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The above is the only thing I can think at the moment. (well aside from the Harry Potter rap on YouTube that's playing at the moment, but anyway.....)
I absolupotivily cannot wait to see the next chapter. And the next and the next, etc.
You always write the best stories! You remind me greatly of myself and all my friends, ie, incredibly random. In other words, ROCKIN' AWESOME!!!!!!!!!
OK, I'm done now.
PS do not, I repeat, DO NOT quit writing. I see you as the next jKR. Well, not really, but I see you as the Schmergoriffic equivalent!!!!!
Author's Response: I personally have a song from Les Mis called \"A Heart Full of Love\" stuck in my head, except the twisted version where my friend sings \"My name is Marius Pontmercy!\" And we all yell, \"COOL!\" in Napolean Dynamite voices. That part was not in Les Mis.
Wow, absolupotivily? That is a word I will have to use in the future. And Schmergoriffic! Wow, you are like Shakespeare when it comes to coining words.
BEING INCREDIBLY RANDOM IS ROCKIN\' AWESOME INDEEED!!!!!!!!!! ^_^
I\'m so glad you like my story... it makes me very smiley. (As you can tell, I am in a weird mood today, possibly due to intense glee that my story is up.)
HA!!! I SO CALLED IT!!!! Lee is Lily Elizabeth Evans!!!!!!! I even got the middle name right!!!!!!!! *victory dance*
K, now I've got to go and finish the story. :)
Ahh! I cannot concentrate!!! I keep scrolling up and down to the review box. i don't think my hyperness has anything to do with the fact that i just had an end-of-school party with all my friends and I'm buzzing on ginger ale. Ok, let's de-spam here...
"genuine bewilderment that girls (especially in the plural form) found him attractive." Haha, that's totally every single one of my guy friends at school. And it's totally Ted.
“'There wolf,” he replied, pointing to himself, then gestured toward the castle. “There castle'.” Bahahaha! It took me a second to get it there...haha, I love it. Only Ted...
"You know, the one that say ‘Silence is golden, duct tape is silver?’ " 1. There's a typo there and 2. I love shirts that say that type of thing!
" “He just saved a whole bunch of galleons on his broom insurance by switching to—”" HAHAHA! I love it. You're a genius, Schmergo...
I don't ship Arden/Ted anymore. Arden now has enough self-confidence to find a guy of her own. But I do ship Haley/Vladislav. But maybe just as a one-time thing. Not getting married or anything. Just dating a bit and growing through and with each other, then getting over their crushes for something more serious.
"...as though they’d just finished reading a good book that they hadn’t wanted to end..." Awwww, how perfect! That's how I feel right now!!! But I'm okay, because I know you'll put the next one up soonsoonsoon. (hint-hint)
"He had forgotten all about O.W.L.s." *gasp!!!!!* Wow, Jordan. Just, wow. Get a grip, buddy! I have friends who would have the exact same reaction...and I would be Haley, the "voice of logic."
I think I can relate to all your OCs in a lot of ways. I'm like Arden because I love to draw (though I'm not nearly as amazing as she is) and Vladie because he's silent but not really shy, just observant, and Haley because I sometimes spaz out like she does, and Jordan because I like to think things out logically...I think the only person I can't really relate to is Tyrone. The term "dumb jock" comes to mind...though he's really not super dumb.
So...I think that's all i wanted to say...or at least all I can think of for now.
(Wow, that was a long review.)
Oh yeah, one more thing: I've drawn 2 pics for your contest, I just need to scan them in.
Author's Response: You are too much of a smarty *glares at you* You\'re a good guesser. And if your guy friends are a lot like Ted, then I am jeal-oussss.... yeah, the stupid \'there wolf/there castle\' is a reference to the classic, incredibly silly movie \"Young Frankenstein\" (now a Broadway musical.) I don\'t know why the mods always accept these stories when they\'re so riddled with typos, but I am glad that they do.
\r\nI can\'t imagine anyone calling Haley \'the voice of logic,\' but you are right. It\'s still funny, though. You might be able to relate to Tyrone a *little* bit more in the third book, because that\'s really when I flesh him out as a character-- he plays a more major role in that one.
Once again, beautiful chapter.
Okay, I have loads to say about this:
Firstly, I like how Apple has evolved. I think it is time for the wizarding world to be a little less "racist." Or...blood-ist? Because wizards and Muggles aren't really a separate race....
Anyway, moving on.
Secondly, poor Arden! How inconsiderate of Ted to leave her hanging with no answer and just go to the ball with another girl. It must've taken a huge amount of courage for her to even work up the nerve to ask him.
Thirdly, poor Emma! What was Tyroonie thinking, asking Marina out like that when he was just starting to get a chance with Emma!
Fourthly, WHO IS LEE?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!!?!?! (the caps and excessive punctuation were in the hope that you'd actually reveal something this time, but I'm sure my hoping is in vain. Oh well, it's just another reason to keep reading!)
There was something else, but I can't think of it at the moment. Anyway, can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I invented Apple because I wanted to show how much the political climate has changed since Harry\'s childhood, especially in the wake of the whole Malfoy fiasco.
I feel very bad about Arden, but Ted didn\'t exactly have a choice. He didn\'t have the opportunity to see Arden after she asked him, and she ran away before he could answer. And if Ted agreed to go with Arden, think of poor Ivy!
The boy was between a rock and a hard place. It\'s never easy to choose between two different people-- someone always has to be let down.
How do you know it was Tyrone that asked Marina? Hmm? Remember that this is just a few days before the ball. He might have given up hope on Emma asking him., and I think he\'s learned better than to try asking Emma out!
Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. I can't wait for the next installment!
Author's Response: I\'m blushing. Thanks so much. I was actually writing the next chapter when my computer \'dinged\' to tell me I had a new review. It\'s just sooooo hard to write Hermione\'s pov. I\'m so used to Harry\'s.
Brilliant, I love it as always! Please update soon! And I wanna see more R/Hr!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I\'ll update soon, don\'t worry. Must finish chapter 7 before I post chapter 6, though, otherwise when my classes start up again I\'ll get behind my readers! I find it harder to write R/Hr than H/G, but I\'ll see what I can do to include some more after chapter 6. (chapter 6 is Harry in Diagon Alley, so not much chance for romance in his friends\' lives ... unless ... hmm...I have an idea) cj
I like this so far! This is definitely a story to watch. *clicks on 'add to favourites'*
Author's Response: So glad you are enjoying it so far. More will come soon, I hope.
But one cannot grieve and live at the same time. And one realises it doesn’t really take much to go back to living after grieving: love thaws all sharp icicles the way spring has never yet broken its promise of driving away winter.
~LucillaJoanna of Hufflepuff believes Seasons Change and avows it with this entry to the Winter Tales Challenges.~Dedicated to Wulfric Brian Dumbledore, who intimately knows grief and will successfully befriend it, too.
This is a good story so far; I especially liked the imagery of the "fleecy" yard.
One thing that was a bit confusing (for me, at least) was when Teddy first changes his hair to brown and it affects Andromeda so much. Maybe you could explain that. Just a suggestion.
Author's Response: Thank you, Bella. The hair-- it is explained further down. ^_^
Awww, good story! You captured the emotions well.
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. Capturing the emotions properly was a big deal for me. I\'m glad you think I did it well.
Oh, beautiful story. Very well written.
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m so happy you thought the story was beautiful. Thanks for reviewing!
Absolutely beautiful. I loved the part at the end when she reveals she'd been talking to Severus the whole time. I always enjoy your work as an author. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! And I will.
Oh, you've characterised Hermione perfectly! It's just like her to research all the makeup and haircare products she can. I wonder...do you actually have a "traumatic experience involving a Barbie doll" in mind? Because that would be really interesting to hear...
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m really happy that you think my characterization was \"on\"; I was very nervous about that part of my story. I don\'t have a specific experience regarding the Barbie doll to reel off the top of my head, but I am considering writing a one-shot sequel, and if there seems to be enough interest in it, then I\'m sure I could come up with something. :) Thank you for reviewing!
Oh, I do love this fic. You've created such good personalities for all you characters. I can't wait to read the next chapter, which I can see is in the queue right now.
I wonder why Teddy's mad at her...does it have, perhaps, a double meaning?
I absolutely love it! Please update soon!