HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!
Ahem. Now that I've gotten my manical laughing out of the system, I can continue with the serious reviewing.
Lines that caused me to snort in a rather unladylike manner:
This particular clock screamed, “IF YOU DON’T GET OUT OF BED THIS INSTANT, RONALD, THE DARK WIZARDS WILL TAKE OVER!”
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... I think I’m scarred for life.”
“Um, you already were,” Ron reminded him, indicating his forehead.
“Oh. Er, yeah.”
The only thing that annoyed me was that Hermione didn't realise the poems were about her... she's really smart, after all.
Other than that, fantastic job! (As usual.)
- Katie
Author's Response: Oh, thanks Katie! Your reviews always make me happy! Although I wasn\'t exactly expecting maniacal laughing... you know, I\'m pretty sure Hermione knew exactly what the poems were about, but she was too polite to say anything (especially in front of Harry), mainly because in THIS story, she and Ron aren\'t dating yet.
That was beautiful... I love how you had Harry defeat Voldemort using *love*, not an Avada Kedavra or the Veil, as a lot of other fic writers had done.This was a really original take on the Final Battle.
The song was perfectly chosen, and the flashback to the night Harry got his scar at the beginning of the fic flowed beautifully and seamlessly into the Final Battle scene.
Also, the line at the end talking about how Harry thought about how love had saved him was the perfect wrap-up.
Great job!
- Katie
TEH BECCA! *tacklehugs*
Yay! Chapter Five is up! The chapter where Hermione gets more information on everything! Chapter Six in my fave, though, even though 'tis the least happiest (is that a word? Ah, well, it is now.) chapter.
But this one's great too! Especially the ending. . . . (CLIFFIE TIME!)
- Teh Katie
Author's Response: Now, now, Katie, teasing the poor little readers who haven\'t read the next chapter yet is just cruel. (Chapter Six is my favorite too! Me? Taunting? I have no idea what you\'re talking about. And happiest is a word.) Maybe there\'ll be a Chapter Six as a present for the readers (and Chapter Seven as a present for Teh Katie...)
Second chapter up! Woot! :)
Candyland... that game was fun.
I liked the slight cliffie at the end - not wnough to make me jump up and scream "WHAT HAPPENS NOW?", but just enough to make me want to read more.
Looking forward to the next chapter you send me!
- Katie
Author's Response: But you already KNOW what happens next! So of course you aren\'t going to be jumping and screaming. And I\'ve just sent you the next chapter- check your e-mail. *luff on teh Katie*
SQUEE!
This was accepted! All I can say to teh Becca is that she has done a great job so far, and that she deserves congratulations and reviews! ;)
- Katie
P.S. No, teh Becca did NOT make me say that.
P.P.S. Waiting for the next chapter, dear!
Author's Response: *squees for teh Katie\'s review* My lovely beta / fellow strange person, thank you for your hard work in helping me get this posted. My favorite-est chapter is in teh queue (well, no, it\'s not my favorite chapter, but my inner four-year-old loves it. You know why. :) But I do love it.)
And, surprisingly, she wasn\'t lying in her PS. I really didn\'t make her say that!
Yay to teh Becca for getting up another chappie! :D
I lurved the ending to this one - the article is SO sweet and sad!
Patiently waiting for the next chapter you send me...
- Katie
Author's Response: Yay for teh Katie for being so awesome!
Next chapter\'s coming soonish, I pinky-swear.
~Teh Becca
Becca! The angsty chapter is up!
(And you still need to send me Chapter - I think it's 5? - m'dear.)
This is my favourite chapter that I've read so far. I loved the flashback, I love the descriptions, and I love the characters, who are more real than some people I know in RL.
Great job. (Again.)
- Katie
Author's Response: Katie! I know- I\'m so glad. *lurves the angsty chapter*
(Check!)
Aww. No matter how many times you tell me you love this chapter, I never get tired of it. *basks in Katie-praise* Thank you, Katie! ~Becca
HA HA HA HA HA!
I know I helped write this, but... wow.
It just occured to me how random-ith we are. ^_^
- Katie
P.S. SAVE TEH BUNNIES! (Heh.)
Author's Response: :D I completely agree, Katie. Hmm... what to say... ITH!
(Oh, and let\'s keep the chatter to the forums, we don\'t want to get busted for spammy reviews, do we?)
-Stubby
Author's Response: Eh, true, Stubby. I\'m responding to my own review. . . KEWL. - Katie
That was absolutely terrifying, and I think it's going to give me nightmares.
Well done.
I can see this happening, actually - if anyone deserves it, Voldemort does. It almost reminds me of the Titans in Ancient Greece who were subjected to eternal torture (Google it, you'll see what I mean.)
Still, though, I have one comment to make. When the figures Voldemort used to make his Horcruxes appeared, there was "a young man with messy black hair and glasses," who is clearly James Potter. But Voldemort didn't use him to create a Horcrux - he used Bertha Jorkins.
Other than that, this was excellently written - great job. Even though I may have nightmares later, as I previously mentioned, I hope you win.
- Katie
Author's Response: Thanks for the brilliant review! :) This story terrified me too! But I hope you don\'t have nightmares!
Actually, the young man with messy black hair is Harry, because part of Voldemort\'s soul latched onto him.
I\'m really glad you pointed this out, because I realized I hadn\'t included Bertha in the story. *goes to add*
Um, no, you didn't send this one to me, I'm afraid.
Of course I'll still beta it! I'm not *that* evil, you know.
NOT SPAM: Love this fic! Can't wait for Chapter 4!
- Katie
Author's Response: Are you sure?? I sent one about a week ago with the subject line \"I\'m sending this from my dad\'s email address\" because mine wasn\'t working. Maybe your compooter blocked it as spam?
Psychic Mind Connection? Perhaps. . . .
WHAT NUMBER AM I THINKING OF?
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. . . .
PARROT!
Er, I meant three. . . right. . . .
'Fglad' has three definitions:
1) to be glad with a Transylvanian accent
2) a typo made by Schmergo
3) a rare species of turkey that is found only in Brazil that tastes delicious, but only when cooked in rosemary and barbeque sauce, and has rather sharp teeth and claws that tend to rip peaceful villagers to shreds from time to time
See, THIS is what happens when I drink a French Vanilla Frappuccino! I get random and hyper and I'm singing at the top of my lungs and oh my Godric is that something shiny???
*wanders off*
- Katie The Hyper
Author's Response: Hahahaha.... I actually did guess three... Now I\'m imagining an accent that fputs \'f\' fbefore fall fof ftheir fwords....
I kind of would prefer if you didn\'t just leave spammy reviews, though... not because I don\'t enjoy them, but because the mods get annoyed.
*shakes head*
It's not in my Bulk Folder. Maybe you typed the address wrong? If yo ulost it, just PM me and I'll resend my address.
NOTSPAM: This was such an original idea for a fic!
- Katie
Author's Response: Hmmmm... *strokes chin* I\'ll try to send it again in a few minutes from my own email address and see what happens.
You’re brilliant. Absolutely, positively, brilliant. I don’t even know where to begin reviewing… so I’ll start at the beginning! :)
I love your description of Snape. It was perfect.
Instead, he simply said in a voice that sounded so measured and polite that it was impolite, “Perhaps someone should inform your husband that ‘baguette’ does not rhyme with ‘maggot.’” I’m sorry, but I don’t understand this line. I couldn’t find anything that mentioned ‘maggot.’ Of course, I’m really dumb, so that might just be me being an idiot. *rolls eyes*
He sure likes using those three little dots, Lily couldn’t help but think. But then, I really like italics, so I can’t talk. Wow. I made this weird little noise there — I kind of snorted and squeaked at the same time. My cousin thought I had stepped on her cat.
Don’t end a sentence with a preposition, said her conscience. She had a writer’s conscience, which was an awful lot like a beta reader. Oh my Godric. That’s hilarious. And the scary thing is, you’re funny without even trying (or so it seems)…
“Thank you, m’lord,” gasped Desiderius, flopping back into his seat like an invalid starfish with relief. 0_0 An invalid starfish. A starfish that is invalid. Invalid is the starfish. Starfish is the invalid. I cannot get over that line.
Now, TIME FOR CHAPTER FOUR! *nudgenudgewinkwink*
- Katie
Author's Response: Awwww! I always love your reviews! I shall definitely nominate you for \"Best Reviewer\" next QSQ.
James\'s line was stolen from a Smosh video (online comedy shorts) where one of the characters says \"Let\'s try cutting this baguette!\" but he pronounces it \'baggot,\' and the other guy goes \'WHAT DID YOU CALL ME?\" Those two Smosh guys always reminded me of James and Sirius, so I put it in. There\'s a really rude, very impolite word that rhymes with \'maggot\' that\'s uised against homosexual people that you should be very glad you don\'t know!
The thing about the \'writer\'s conscience\' will come back! And the conscience\'s name is Katie, by the way... I think I mentioned that.
This story is very silly, isn\'t it? ^_^
How did I not review this yet? *scratches head*
Well, THIS IS BRILLIANT.
Yurp. That about covers it...
Oh, and at my voice lesson, my teacher said we're moving from 'Phantom of the Opera' to singing - guess what? - 'The Scarlet Pimpernel.' (She has a knack for picking things you spoof... though I daresay we won't be singing 'High School Musical' or the Beatles any time soon.)
- Katie
Author's Response: ZOMG, you\'re singing Scarlet Pimpernel? I recommend singing \"When I Look At You.\" I did that song. ^_^ Or the Riddle, if you like things sinister... My favourite songs are \"Falcon In The Dive\" and \"Into the Fire\" but those aren\'t necessarily good songs for a female range.
By the way, 'Voldemort' IS French - it means 'flight from death.' (I looked it up, because I'm too stuuuuupid to learn a language.)
And the Monty Python reference made me laugh.
- Katie
Author's Response: OH GOOD. Here I was hoping I was accurate! I\'m glad you caught the Python reference. Your drabble for the humour class was hilarious, by the way. I love Hermione\'s song.
Yay! Chapter Two is up!
And you credited me for beta-ing! And you, the funniest person I know, called me hilarious! WOOT! (Except you left out the 'h' in 'harrypotterfangirl21.' But I digress.)
Er... just a quick question for ya: How's Chapter Three submitted? You never gave it to me, you see... *is completely confuzzled*
*hopes Schmergo has not forgotten about her*
- Katie
P.S. So this is less spammy, nice cligghanger there at the end.
Author's Response: Oh-- Katie, I was about to email you to tell you that my friend RealLifeBeta\'d chapter 3 for me, which means she wrote comments on it by hand and gave it to me. It\'s one of the fun things to do in Algebra class! And I was quite anxious to submit it, because this chapter took FOREVAH in queue.
Author's Response: Oh-- Katie, I was about to email you to tell you that my friend RealLifeBeta\'d chapter 3 for me, which means she wrote comments on it by hand and gave it to me. It\'s one of the fun things to do in Algebra class! And I was quite anxious to submit it, because this chapter took FOREVAH in queue.
That's fine. (I usually draw in Algebra, myself.) Just send me Chapter Four whenever you're done. :)
Also, that was supposed to be "cliffhanger" there at the end of my last review - not "cligghanger," which isn't even a real word. ^^;
- Katie
Author's Response: Righty-o! And I don\'t mind a typo, since I apparently messed up your username! And I can\'t even edit it until Chappie 3 goes through, because it\'ll RESUBMIT IT! Oh waily waily!
MNFF MAKES ME MAD. There, I said it.
I added this story to my Favourites List, and I DIDN'T GET THE EMAIL when it was updated! BLEH. So, this review’s a little late in coming. . . . Sorry about that. ^^;
First of all, AHOHEMGEE, “Where’s The Girl” is my favourite song from this musical! I like pretty much all of them, but that’s the one that I listened to for about an hour straight last night — that, and “Falcon In The Dive.” (Terrence Mann is amazing, no? Though I also really like "Madame Guillotine," "The Riddle," "Into The Fire," and "Only Love.")
BUT BACK TO THE CHAPTER, EH?
Aberforth was of the great belief that this was highly unnatural. The only herb that real men should smell of was garlic. *giggles* I kind of agree about the lavender thing (the guys I know only smell like Axe. >.
Author's Response: BLEH. I really hate it when that happens, it happens all the time! We seem to like the same chapter!
I HATE AXE.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I had a page-and-a-half long review for that, AND MNFF CUT ME OFF!
AGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Here's the rest of the review:
I kind of agree about the lavender thing (the guys I know only smell like Axe. >.
Author's Response: AGABLAAAAAAH!
NOT AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Okay, so MNFF must seriously hate me. I'm terribly sorry about all this, but here is the rest of the review:
*giggles* I kind of agree about the lavender thing (the guys I know only smell like Axe (EW.)), but GARLIC? EW. Good to eat, bad to smell like, in other words.
“No, no, this is a sherbet lemon, which is a sort of sweet and not dangerous at all, except for possibly causing dental trouble. I don’t quite see how it can be confused with a wand.” HA! Sherbet lemons are actually a bit sour to me, but then, I could be eating a different brand.
I must say, you have Dumbledore perfectly in-character this entire chapter. All of his lines and actions are things that seem EXACTLY like things Dumbledore would say and do. Congrats on an excellent job there.
“Why are you yelling ‘Dumbledore’ so much?” he asked. “I mean, I know, it’s a really cool name… sometimes I just like to yell ‘pudding…’” HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!! That not only was incredibly hilarious and in-character, but it forcefully reminded me of my one friend who randomly shouts “DEATH,” even though he’s ANYTHING but emo. It’s really funny, actually. Never fails to get me laughing.
Methinks I have trouble staying on topic. . . .
Wow, said Lily’s conscience, who she’d decided to name Katie after her editor. You’ve reached new lows. 0_0
You actually put me in here. For some reason I thought you were kidding. . . . but, anyway. . . . *Ahem* THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU! You have quite seriously made my day with this!
The scariest thing is that I kind of sound like that when I’m searching for typos. . . . (And by the way, you’re missing a period at the last line of your summary. What, I’m a nitpicker.)
Babies were born, old men died, a cat cried out in the distance (probably because someone threw another rock at it), a tree fell in the forest, and Mrs. MacGinnis next door yelled at her creepy son for bringing more dead polecats into the house. You know how people (like me) are always telling you that you have a unique, amazing writing style? THIS IS ONE OF THOSE TIMES.
Putting in a sentence like that laced with humour and fact is one of those little nuances of yours that makes me think “Oh, Schmergo wrote this!” as soon as I see it. ‘Tis very unique, and very creative, and very other adjective that I have forgotten at the moment. ^^;
It was the kind of rock too large for kicking. He heard his toe bones crack. OUCH. Breaking your toe hurts! (I, um, kind of ran into a metal desk last summer and broke two of my toes. Just goes to show hoe graceful I am. *rolls eyes*) Poor Snape! Why are you so mean to him, eh? I know he’s the Chauvelin Villian Dude in this story, but still. . . .
‘Happy’ went on the list of other unSnapely words like ‘shampoo’ and ‘lederhosen’ and ‘kitten’ and ‘lollipop’ and ‘karaoke’ and ‘tango-dancing with Lily under the moonlight wearing matching Gothic-Victorian costumes.’ Another fantastic example of your brilliant writing prowess. (I like that word. For some strange and unknown reason, it reminds me of ‘The Lion King,’ which I just finished watching. (*EMO SOBS for Mufasa*)) That last one gave me the most hilarious mental image in the History Of Ever.
Basically, once again, you’ve outdone yourself. Another excellent chapter, another fit of laughing from me, another plot point to contend with, another song spoof, another long review, and another terribly long sentence that I’m going to stop writing now.
- Katie *sings LOUDLY to ‘Falcon In The Dive’*
*gets strange looks from family*
*shrugs and continues singing*
*uses WAY too many asterisks*
Author's Response: Yeah, they are sour... I take these vitamin C lemon drops to keep my voice in good shape... I really like them.
I think I sometimes yell \'DEATH\' too... it\'s just kind of a funny thing to do.
Katie the Conscience will definitely reappear!
The funny thing is, that sentence you said was so original appears in one of my other stories, \"Oh No, Nott Again.\" My mom pointed out that I reused it... at least I came up with it myself.
I am mean to Snape because at this point he needs redemption! BAD SNAPERS.
I JUST REWATCHED THE LION KING TWO DAYS AGO!!! HAVEN\'T SEEN THAT MOVIE IN SO LONG... AND YOU BRING IT UP RIGHT WHEN I WATCH IT! We have, like, some kind of psychic mind connection! Scar is my favourite Disney character of all. The word \'prowess\' might remind you of Lion King because I think the Cowardly Lion from Wizard of Oz says it.
I\'m so fglad you liked this!
Author's Response: \"Fglad?\" What the Nifleheim is that?