Name: GinnyWeasley1234 (Signed) · Date: 09/12/12 22:58 · For: Chapter 1

You really thought this out didnt you! It is EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Name: Dory_the_Fishie (Signed) · Date: 04/30/09 21:21 · For: Chapter 1

You know, I don’t read very much poetry, simply because in general I’m not a huge fan of the genre, but I do occasionally like to pick a poem and review it. So here I am!

I don’t claim to be any sort of expert on meter or rhyme or what have you, but I will say that I’m impressed with the iambic pentameter here. It isn’t perfect, but poetry rules tend to be rather loose, I think, in some cases. At any rate, I know that I struggle writing poetry with any meter to it at all, so great job here. The meter really does make the poem sound that much more lovely.

And, you even rhymed! That’s something I usually find basically impossible. Also, here, the rhymes don’t sound…I want to say ‘rhyme-y.’ What I mean is that even though there is rhyme, it’s not like, “Oh, hi, I’m a rhyme!” Rather, it’s something that simply adds to the rhythm of the poem. It enhances the words rather than detracts from their meaning.

The ‘I was born to die’ is quite chilling, but I like it. That’s exactly Harry, isn’t it? I think you’ve really captured him. And the idea of the world’s fate resting solely on him – I love that. It’s sad, but so poignant and just a fabulous thing to include. When we found out in DH that Dumbledore knew all along that Harry was probably going to have to die – well, that was big. And you bring that into this poem, and it coincides perfectly with Harry’s decision in canon to meet what he thought was going to be his death.

That Harry is ‘faced with the courage is die’ is also a wonderful line. It is almost like his courage has simply taken hold of him, rather than that he consciously thought he had to die. It’s like fate, really. In itself, the imagery of the sun is a nice addition to the poem, but I particularly liked that bit because, not only does it juxtapose death, but it symbolizes a rebirth of sorts for Harry.

My only real criticism is more like an opinion. I would’ve liked to see some punctuation in the last few lines; to me, they just like empty without a comma or period or something. The rest of the poem is quite structured, with punctuation all intact, and that last part feels just a little out of place. But, perhaps there was some hidden meaning there that I simply missed because, like I said, poetry is definitely not my thing. I did enjoy this poem, though, so good job!

Name: AlexPotter (Signed) · Date: 04/14/09 16:39 · For: Chapter 1

Wow.

Very poignant and to the point. Pretty much sums up what Harry believes are his final moments. I'd imagine this to be precisely what he was thinking as he walked into the Forbidden Forest expecting death. Very well done. ~Holly

Name: Amanda Vega (Signed) · Date: 04/13/09 19:12 · For: Chapter 1

Here is your Easter Egg, Arianna!

I love the perspective here. It's an interesting portrayal of his feelings, especially how he accepts it as his "friend" - that's an emotion that is rarely explored, and when it is, it's usually not as eloquent and well-written as you have shown here.

A few of the rhymes seem a bit forced, but that is inevitable with a rhyming poem! I think it's very well done, though!

Name: A Arias (Signed) · Date: 03/26/09 22:06 · For: Chapter 1

Your welcomed! And your right! Good poem indeed.

Name: A Arias (Signed) · Date: 03/26/09 21:08 · For: Chapter 1

Nice poem. Although I can't imagine Harry being poetic. He must really be dying...

Author's Response: Hee-hee. No, I don't imagine Harry a poet either, but the written word is an ability to all when inspiration strikes. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing! /Ari

Name: RedChequeredConverse (Signed) · Date: 03/26/09 15:38 · For: Chapter 1

GORGEOUS, sweetie! I loved it.

Also, this story has a very nice banner for it over on the forums . . .I wonder who made it . . .

Anyway, very good! And I'm going to go right now to check out your author's page. :-)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you darlin', I'm glad you liked it. Teh banner shall go up as soon as I can get to photobucket (I hadn't known this had been validated!). /Ari /who is now officially a MNFF author :D