Name: OliveOil_Med (Signed) · Date: 05/30/10 1:22 · For: Prologue: The World's Scorn

I know I am already your beta, and I may have already said a lot of what I am going to say here in my beta-ing, but everyone loves reviews...and so that is what I shall do!

I love this as a start to the story. It reminds me of how J.K. chose to start her first book, which I really think is a wise decision. Sense it is the Chinese wizarding world that will be the focus of this story, and the city and Beijing, as well as the training senter, will only be playing a small part.

I am very curious about this political organization that Headmaster Zhange and his wife were a part of, and just what that slogan on the walls was all about. I'm wondering what the headmaster's role will be in the story. Will he have as much of an influence over Feng as Dumbledore had over Harry? The way you have written the summary makes it seem like he will have a good deal to do with Feng's education outside the role of an administrator.

And am also excited to see the characters of the school's teachers, as well as how the subjects at Dragon Pearl differ from the ones taught at Hogwarts and other western schools. Is Alchemy at all related to Transfiguration, or is it a new art of magic entirely?

I know you asked me this already, but yes, this chapter does have just enough mystery in it. And I am very, very, VERY excited to see more of it!

Name: Sdogg (Signed) · Date: 05/29/10 18:05 · For: Prologue: The World's Scorn

Hey, nice chapter! Your story seems to be off to a good start and I'm anxious to read more!