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Name: weasleygirl2 (Signed) · Date: 08/16/11 13:49 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
PLEASE update soon.

I think you really got the emotion spot on in this chapter, especially at the end. The relationship with James and his mother is so sweet!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I was trying to make it clear that he really loves his mother without it being too sappy, so I'm glad you liked that part. Chapter 12 is done, but needs some tweaking. I'll update as soon as I can! :)


Name: cinnamonwitch (Signed) · Date: 08/15/11 20:56 · For: Chapter 1- That Easy
this is probably the best james/lilly story i've read yet! the plot is really believable and i think u stay really true to the characters or at least what i imagine they would be keep up the good work and i can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's high praise--there are many wonderful stories on this site, including J/L ones (my personal favorite). The next chapter is done, but I'm still going to do a bit more work on it before I send it off to my beta. It shouldn't be too long of a wait. :)


Name: pimentoplane (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 15:33 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
I'm so addicted! This is fantastic. I hope James invites Sirius so he can at least say his goodbye! The characterization of everyone is nice, too. I enjoy it thoroughly.

Author's Response: Thanks for such a lovely review! As much as I love James, he doesn't always do the right thing, but you'll have to wait and see whether Sirius does get a chance to say his goodbyes. And I'm working very hard on chapter 12 to make sure it's at least as good as all the other chapters! :)


Name: dory2o2 (Signed) · Date: 07/30/11 20:25 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
aww, this installment had me tearing up. Can't wait for the next installment!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :) I feel bad for making several people tear up with this chapter, though it is meant to be sad to accurately describe Mrs. Potter's condition and James' desperation. I'm working on Chapter 12 right now, but it'll have to be quite good to measure up to this one!


Name: hpgploversforever (Signed) · Date: 07/29/11 15:21 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
I just finished the first 11 chapters. This is an amazing story. I can't wait to see what else you come up with. Keep the chapters coming and I will keep reveiwing.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading & reviewing! I'm glad you plan to keep doing so, and I hope that you like the rest of the story as well as you did the first half! :)


Name: jamlil (Signed) · Date: 07/29/11 0:24 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
it was so sad.but you wrote it well.update soon

Author's Response: Thanks!! I'm glad you liked the chapter! And I'll try to get the next one out soon. :)


Name: iwishicouldwrite (Signed) · Date: 07/28/11 16:03 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
That was a really beautiful and emotional chapter. I love seeing this side of James, because he's such an amazing person

Author's Response: Thank you!! Wow, beautiful AND emotional, I'm quite flattered. :) Yes, it's an interesting side of James to write, because he's normally all fun and wit. However, in a crisis like this, I think he falls apart just as much as anyone else would and perhaps more because he pushes people away. And I completely agree with you; he is an amazing person! :)


Name: redandyellow (Signed) · Date: 07/28/11 9:56 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
This chapter was really good! It was nice that James thought about Lily....
Hope that Lily feels the same way!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked it. And in chapter 12 you'll find out. Speaking of which, I should probably get on writing that.... xD


Name: k4c (Signed) · Date: 07/28/11 9:47 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
I have tears in my eyes right now! This chapter was so beautifully written and you conveyed James' struggle to come to terms with his mums illness so well!

I think you got the character of James so right as I feel that he would have definately cut himself off from his friends, not wanting them to worry or burden them.

Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely, lovely review! :) I'm glad you thought that James' self-imposed seclusion was realistic. I imagined what James would do in a crisis based on Harry's behavior in OOTP, but also I think that he wouldn't want to be a burden, as you said. This was a rather sad chapter--I'll try to make the next one a bit more lighthearted if possible.


Name: Lost_Robin (Signed) · Date: 07/28/11 9:16 · For: Chapter 11-A Little Unwell
I really hope James' mum doesn't die.

Author's Response: I also have a soft spot for Mrs. Potter as a character, but you'll have to wait until chapter 13 to find out! Thanks for the review; I like getting people's reactions to the chapter.


Name: kivey (Signed) · Date: 07/20/11 16:46 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
Hurry with the next chapter please!

Author's Response: It's all finished! As soon as it's beta'd to its loveliest possible version I'll upload it. :) Thanks for reading!


Name: heliopath (Signed) · Date: 07/19/11 7:43 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
Hmm.. again half of my review got lost while getting posted! :(
(writing this for the 3rd time n hoping this will get posted) I somehow got this idea into my head that this chapter will be a mopey one, full of misery. m so glad it wasn't!! :) Thanx for making this a good, long one. Love ur writing, eagerly waiting for more! :)
P.S: Why didn't sirius simply send james an owl? Asking him what was up, i mean.

Author's Response: Well, thank you very much for making such an effort to review! I appreciate the feedback. And, while there is a healthy dose of angst in this chapter, I didn't want to make it too mopey, because I think that Lily is ultimately a very strong character. I do remember that you reviewed asking for a long chapter, so I'm glad I could deliver! Sirius did send James an owl, but James just didn't answer. You'll find out why in Chapter 11!


Name: heliopath (Signed) · Date: 07/19/11 7:11 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
wth!! I wrote a long review!!! And for some obscure reason only 'O sirius" got posted out of the whole thing.. which looks kindof silly. :(
Anyway, what i said was that this was such a sweet chapter and that i loved every single moment of it! Sirius is a sweetheart! Loved his intervention! and the protectiveness of his friend's girl.

Author's Response: I didn't actually find that out of the ordinary, since I end up thinking "Oh, Sirius" quite a lot whenever I read the Harry Potter books! :) Yes, Sirius has many faults, but he's very, very loyal, which is something I wanted to bring out in this chapter. Oh and thanks for the review, especially since you had to repost it!


Name: heliopath (Signed) · Date: 07/18/11 10:19 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
O Sirius!!!


Name: I hate Tuney (Signed) · Date: 07/17/11 13:21 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
I really liked that Sirius defended Lily!! "no real man hits a woman"

Author's Response: Yeah so much of the time you only see the breaking hearts/ hexing people for kicks side of Sirius that I wanted to show the decent side of him as well, since he's basically a good person. Thank you!! :)


Name: dory2o2 (Signed) · Date: 07/14/11 1:06 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
I really liked this chapter. My thought after reading this was "I wonder how James will take the news that Carl pushed Lily?"

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!! James has a lot of other things on his mind to say the least, which you'll see from chapter 11, but there's no love lost between Carl and him as it is.


Name: jamlil (Signed) · Date: 07/13/11 11:33 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
i dont want to be lily because she's now waiting.i know it's realy hard.however it's a sweat thing.(love, i mean)
please update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you for the thoughtful review! Yes, I think a lot of people can identify with what Lily's going through, but love endures all things. And I'm almost done with chapter 11 so it can be beta'd soon and then posted! :)


Name: M_E_Potter1423 (Signed) · Date: 07/12/11 21:46 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
This is great I absolutely love continue to kick ass with your great words! :)
Though do give us a notice that couples are officially couples (you did not say that with Lily and Carl) by the way what's with the name "Carl" anyway? I would pronounce the name "Carl", as Caarrrlllll
Anywho I enjoy your work email me an update or something like they do so on fanfiction? okay sounds good.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I've never been told that my story "kicks ass", so I'm quite flattered! I did mention that they were going out a couple of times but those were in previous chapters so I'll look for a way to add more mention. As for emailing updates, I think there's an option for that under edit preferences in your account. Glad you're enjoying the story!


Name: wauwabee (Signed) · Date: 07/12/11 8:36 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
I really liked Sirius in this chapter, I always like him, but I really liked him in this. I dunno why. Also, I think you wrote Lily's reaction to James leaving very well. Her frustration was very realistic and just all around well written. Well done! I really want to know what James' deal is, what's going on with his family and all that. He had better have a good reason for leaving.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the lovely and detailed review!! I'm happy that you liked the chapter! I'm especially glad you liked Sirius, because he's one of my favorite characters in canon and I want to do him justice. Also, I did try to make Lily's angst understated but still appropriately...angsty. James does have a good reason for leaving...just wait for chapter 11!


Name: Lost_Robin (Signed) · Date: 07/11/11 10:18 · For: Chapter 10-Missing
I saw a squirrel-shaped cloud while reading this and thought of Sirius for some odd reason.

Author's Response: A squirrel-shaped cloud? Those are rare! Although the chapter does feature Sirius heavily, I think if I had seen a squirrel-shaped cloud I would automatically think of Professor Quirrell. Phonetics and all that. Oh, and thanks for stopping by!


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