Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/28/13 6:20 · For: Chapter 8 - The Ministry of Magic

This is a really difficult story to write, trying to see things from the other end of the spectrum. Well done. Do update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying it :) It's been an interesting experience getting inside the head of a character whose opinions differ from what we're used to. ~Hannah

Name: Snorkack (Signed) · Date: 02/24/13 16:33 · For: Chapter 7 - Detention

I really, really like this story, it is one of the most original here on MNFF and very well written! I also like that it fits so seamlessly into what we know about the year that would have been Harry's seventh, and the glimpses of characters one knows from the books. It's really like discovering some more of JKR's story. I'd kind of given up on it, though, because there were no updates for so long - but that last chapter is brilliant and now I can't wait to see what happens next. It would be nice to hear a bit more about how Samuel does at his Muggle school, too. Anyway, do update soon!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! I promise I have written 3500 of the next chapter already and I can't imagine it being much longer. My poor beta is up to her eyeballs in stress at the moment so it may be a few days until I post an update but I promise it will come! And once that chapter is done, I only have a few more to go.

I have thought about writing a spin-off about Samuel at Muggle school, but I have several other spin-offs I want to write from this story already - I think the first will probably be about Gemma and a bit more of her back story. I'm prioritising finishing this before I get too involved in those however.

Thanks again for the review :) ~Hannah

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/24/13 11:36 · For: Chapter 7 - Detention

OH MY!!!! the dilemmas here are so well thought out. I can just see how you wouldn;t want to cast a curse, but knowing your hex would be weaker than a Carrows must make you think it's better to get it over with.

I also kind of hate Gemma for landing him in detention but I understand why she did it. Would love to know what's going on with her, and Hector's aunt.

Great great chapter, very well thought out because we really get into the head of a character we know has the wrong opinion, but is also sympathetic.

Well done! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Caroleeeee, thank you so much for the review :D

Gemma has quite a detailed back story in my head and I think she will get her own spin-off one-shot or a couple of chapters at some point but I want to prioritise finishing the main story before I get too involved in spin-offs. The next chapter is almost complete so it'll be with Kara for betaing very soon :D ~Hannah

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 01/11/13 5:03 · For: Chapter 6 - Christmas

I am hugely enjoying this story. A refreshingly un-hackneyed topic, excellent writing, good plot development, good pacing, and so on, and so on... I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I have finally updated after a rather hideous wait, so I hope you will enjoy what comes next :) ~Hannah

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 10/24/12 11:12 · For: Chapter 6 - Christmas

I can see why Adrian is confused. You make him seem a very real person.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I'm glad you've been able to connect with Adrian. I've finally updated after a hideous wait so I hope you'll enjoy what comes next! ~Hannah

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/24/12 4:04 · For: Chapter 6 - Christmas

OH! I love Samuel and I'm really enjoying his take on things. The Squibs we see are so pitiful and lonely in the books (and seem to be obsessed with cats, now I think about it), but Samuel is normal and clever and he's making Adrian think.

Great chapter, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next one because I really have no idea where this is going next - eeep.

Croll

Name: IndigoPassion (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 21:36 · For: Chapter 5 - After the Match

This is a fantastic story! I wrote a Drabble on the same subject once, but obviously that was just a little Drabble, but this!
I just don't understand how you wrote your characters so well that I'm sat here cheering him on even though I know it's the wrong side. Honestly I'm well and truly hooked, this story is going right in my favs :)
-Lex

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 6:58 · For: Chapter 5 - After the Match

OH OH OH! You can't possibly leave it there. This is really getting brilliant!

Hannah, seriously this is a good story. You really have plotted this well to the extent that not once does it drag and nor does it feel at all rushed. I LOVED the part in Hogsmeade where Adrian is starting to question things. And the characterisation of Duncan and Hector is great. Of course there would be people stuck in the middle and they wouldn;t want to get involved - not being as outspoken as the Gryffs, but they're not going to be as ebil as the Slyths (not you, of course ... but that Julia .... ) Um, anyway, I really think you've given all your characters decent reasons and depth.

You have to continue this. You have to, you hear me. ~Croll~

Author's Response: Squee! Thank you so much for the all the reviews! Perhaps this will finally be the motivation I need to finish it! I have a plan for everything - it just needs writing. I'm about two thirds of the way through the next chapter.

Sigh us poor Slyths get such a bad rep. But I'm glad you're enjoying my Hufflepuffs!

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 6:47 · For: Chapter 4 - Birthdays and Broomsticks

OH NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! Quidditch cancelled! *sigh* although I know this is for 'the Greater Good' I can't stop myself feeling annoyed that Huifflepuff have lost their chace to get the cup for Cedric. UGHHH! And a nasty part of me is thinking that if Ginny hadn;t been banned, then she wouldn't have liked it, too. (okay that is unfair of me - you see how you've got me sympathising for Adrain). OH! and I am so pleased with the revelation that Dorian bought the record after they'd had the argument. And Gemma is sad to lose his friendship, too :(

Great story (I am getting repetitive). ~Carole~

Author's Response: Gemma has her own back story which I keep meaning to write up as a one-shot. I think she gets a raw deal in this story but I actually feel quite sorry for her. I was annoyed with Ginny too! It's really interesting getting to think and write about things from a completely different perspective.

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 5:59 · For: Chapter 3 - Muggle Studies

Good stuff! The Muggle Studies class was very well written and had a real feel of canon about it.

I have a small quibble about the 'Defence' class. Carrow changed the class to 'Dark Arts' and not DADA, although if you're planning to include that later in the story, then ignore me. :)

I'm glad Adrian has some people to hang around with, but seriously he has to wise up soon. *sigh* this is a great story, Hannah, I hope you're not sick of me saying that :) - Carole-

Author's Response: I think Kara picked up on that as well when betaing. I think in my head, I'd imagined the class still being taught under the pretence of being called DADA but was in reality just DA but then I've just re-read the part of DH where Neville talks about it and it probably was more likely that the name was just outright changed. Maybe if happened after Christmas though (so I can deal with it later in the story hehe). Thanks for the review!

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 5:47 · For: Chapter 2 - Try-Outs and Tribulations

QUIDDDITCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! yes! I love Quidditch - ha ha ha.

Yes, it is going to be a long year for Adrian, but sadly for Bob, this won;t be a long review because I need to read the rest of the story.

Really enjoying this. It's original and also refreshing to see a character with distasteful views being presented sympathetically and not a Slytherin.

Well done. ~ Croll ~

Author's Response: Thanks youuuu - my response also won't be long as I have to leave enough to say to respond to each review individually. But it's so nice to hear that you're enjoying it! I actually quite enjoyed writing the quidditch thoguh I worried it was a bit boring for people to read.

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 10/20/12 5:35 · For: Chapter 1 - A New Year At Hogwarts

OMGGGG!!! Hannah, this is brilliant. You are presenting both sides of the argument so very well. I do, in a horrible way, find myself sympathising with Adrian and of course he'd want to believe that, even though he must know it's unfair.

Your character development is also great. Samuel is well realised and I'm enjoying the details about the Squib school. It did aways seema shame to me that the Squibs were pretty badly treated in HP - belonging to neither world - but Samuel has something about him.

Great work. ~Croll~

Author's Response: I am so glad to hear you say that about Adrian because I really did want to create a character that people liked, while at the same time giving him unusual views and making him believable!

There's more on the squib school to come in the next chapter!

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 08/19/12 21:24 · For: Chapter 5 - After the Match

This story is developing nicely. I can see that people will have to take sides before the end of the school year, but where will the uncommitted go? Keep it coming.

Author's Response: Thanks! There's been a bit of a gap, but hopefully the next chapter will be up soon :)

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 08/19/12 16:40 · For: Chapter 5 - After the Match

I love how Adrian is slowly waking up to things! Brilliant!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yes, I think over the next few chapters he'll start to wake up even more. Hopefully the next one will be up soon!

Name: Lost_Robin (Signed) · Date: 08/17/12 18:54 · For: Chapter 4 - Birthdays and Broomsticks

Sorry I haven't reviewed before. Great story. And right after that last line: Oliver Wood woke up rather outraged at his last dream: Snape had cancelled Quidditch. Sorry, had to say that.

Author's Response: Haha, I wish! Thanks for the review :) ~coolh5000

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 08/10/12 18:05 · For: Chapter 3 - Muggle Studies

I wasn't sure about this story when I started it bc the whole pure blood stolen magic stuff has been done with slytherins to an infinite amount BUT you completely hooked me when he was sorted into hufflepuff!! WOW!!! A new angle! Misguided by his love for his brother so he's completely relatable but also ignorant at the same time!! Love it!! Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you're enjoying it. I wanted to create a character that wasn't a bad person as such to show how regular people could be taken in by what was happening in the wizarding world during DH. I've been writing quickly so hopefully it won't take too long to finish - I hope you'll read the rest! ~coolh5000

Name: CanisMajor (Signed) · Date: 08/09/12 3:18 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

Great start to a story with an excellent premise. The striking moment is that reaction when Theia sees the Muggle family: a shot of pure jealous hatred, from someone who might have thought she didn't have a jealous bone in her body. Dramatic emotion, yet it rings completely true. You didn't really even need to pursue it: by the end of that first paragraph ("How does it happen?") we already have all we need to know for now.

One criticism: you have a few viewpoint changes in this prologue, and I'm left wondering who the rest of the story is going to be about. Theia? Adrian? Or Samuel himself? I guess the next chapter will clear this up.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I've had similar feedback about overdoing it a bit in the prologue so perhaps I need to go back and revise parts of it. This was always going to be Adrian's story, but I wanted to separate the prologue a bit and decided to make it more of a multi-pov to give the reader an introduction to all of the characters. I hope you'll continue reading! ~coolh5000

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 08/08/12 17:47 · For: Chapter 2 - Try-Outs and Tribulations

Good story line. Interesting stuff.

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you'll read on when I add the next chapters :) ~coolh5000

Name: crbluvsravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 08/04/12 17:00 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

I really loved reading this because it was so interesting. Keep me updated!

~crbluvsravenclaw

Author's Response: Thanks :) The second chapter is up now and hopefully I'll have the third in a few days ~coolh5000

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 08/03/12 23:51 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

OHHHH, Ilove this set up, Hannah. Really this is brilliant. Of course they would be resentful, and of course they would harbour this resentment towards the Muggle-borns. Clever set up. I was struck by the characterisation of Adrian - that innate selfishness where he doesn;t want his toys touched - ha - that is SO like children. They rarely see beyond themselves until older and you captured that perfectly.

Really interested to see where this goes. Well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Carole! Lovely to hear your opinion on this :D I was worried about making the boys too old so I was careful to keep little elements of childhood in them. I hope you'll like the rest of it too! ~Hannah