Name: Snorkack (Signed) · Date: 08/03/12 22:19 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

This sounds promising, an excellent idea for a story!! Looking forward to the next chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The second chapter is up now and hopefully I'll have the third in the next few days. ~coolh5000

Name: expelliarmus17 (Signed) · Date: 08/03/12 21:31 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

Excellent! Great introduction to what is sure to be a great story. Good flow and characterization. I liked the brief point of view of the Healer. My only critique is that you explicitly say that Theia and Adrian are blaming Samuel's lack of magic on someone else, while I think it is implied enough. People aren't usually conscious of blaming other people for their problems, it is just their coping mechanism.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The critique is very useful - I was a little concerned that I'd overdone the point of them blaming other people for Samuel's lack of magic and made it happen a little too quickly and a little too obviously, so I will go back through and edit a little bit to keep it more implied rather than explicit. Hopefully I'll have more up soon too. ~Hannah

Name: FearlessFlyer (Signed) · Date: 08/03/12 20:49 · For: Prologue - Breaking the News

Good start. I've always wondered what the scenario would be in a family such as this one when they find out that one child is a Squib. I'm looking forward to where this will go - keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! It's an idea I've been toying with for ages so I'm glad to finally get going. Hopefully I'll have more soon :) ~Hannah