Great story. It was wonderful. I felt like the characterizations were spot on, there was lots of action, and the romance part was subtle but still present. My only critique is I would love to see Lily be a great fighter. She rocks at charms, and I loved that you gave her her own fight scene. I'd love to see more! Great job.

Oh my God. That was the creepiest chapter. I was so confused, but intrigued. I kept thinking, "Time-turner? Is he going to go back and save everyone?" I never caught on it was a dream... there was maybe a hint at the very end. Wow. Powerful.

Seems a little quick and superficial for love.

I think you should have stayed with one voice. Switching to first person was strange. I think its better to be consistent. You can write those thoughts he's having from a third person. Switching to first doesn't add anything.

I;m not trying to be harsh, but I can't really finish this fic. It's strange because it feels like two different stories squashed into one. The first half and second half are so different. You started with an original concept, and then it seemed to lose its focus. The author's comments throughout the story or referring to yourself of your characters or your fic really ruin it for me. It breaks the spell of the story and is jarring.

This is a really great story. I loved how you worked in everything. My only complaint is the stuff at the beginning with Voldermort seemed a little anti-climatic. I loved the relationships you created and how you let Lily and Remus rock the house a few times. I understood why Sirius thought it was Remus and how Peter orchestrated everything. I think you've also written the best Peter-turning I've ever read. You made him so complex in these two stories. I loved it!!!! These are definitely two of my favorite stories, the Maurader-era stories I was looking for! I don't even know what else I can say to rant and rave about these! Just fantastic.

James' patronus changed into a phoenix? Was that an accident? I also caught another error, but I'm not sure what it was. It was a chapter or two ago... Hmmm...

Author's Response: yeah, sorry about that! that was definitely an error, which i guess i didn\'t catch (thought i\'d been thorough but there you go!) if you remember the other, do tell me, i\'d like to go back and edit my stupidity!

This is absolutely delightful. I loved the characterizations of both characters, and I especially enjoyed the insight into Remus' character. It was charming in the dialogue and plot, and I very much enjoyed reading it.

A final note - I enjoyed the length. Not all authors know when to stop, and this had a distinct beginning, middle, and end. It ended at exactly the right time.

My one criticism is how Tonks was already in love and hinting at it. It speaks to your characterization of her and her dialogue that it worked. It wasn't jarring. Honestly, my complaint is more of a preference than a writing technique. It just seemed a little quick is all.

Good work, and thanks for sharing!

I didn't really like the yelling at whole Lilly bit. If what her friend said is true, then why should we like Lilly? That means she's just really judgmental. And it's hard to believe that she would call her a "sadistic bitch" to Sirius. I can maybe understand the yelling in the heat of the moment, but that's a little overboard. She's not a very good friend then.

Finally on the Lilly thing, I'm sure she has good reason to dislike James a little. If she doesn't it makes it hard to believe he would like someone who was so mean. Why would we root for him to get the girl if the girl sucks so much?

It's really cute. I really like your version of how she agreed to go on the first date a lot better than how it happens most of the time. I really like the characterizations and the humor of it.