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06/17/09

Reviews by Storytellerdoll

Love Can Make You Feel Stupid by VanillaScent

Rated: •
Summary: Ginny Weasley is smarter than you think. That's why she's tutoring a Slytherin a year ahead of her. Even if she's the smart one, when she wants a boyfriend and falls in love with a certain someone, love can make even a smart person feel stupid.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 02/14/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Well, I like the story... Very original, and very entertaining. The writing is a bit immature, as though written by a 12 or 13 yr old, but perhaps that's what you are. In that case, great writing. Try to have some more sentence variety. :D

Teaching the Dark by BittersweetLove

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Hermione usually prides herself in being able to ignore boys and study instead. But tutoring Draco Malfoy may just get in her way. The real question is, how will Ron take it?

Rated 3rd- 5th years for future chapters ( I think?)

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 02/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Surprise

You write better as a 12 yr old than many do in their forties! The only suggestion I have is different verbs for the dialogue, something more interesting than "called" or "exclaimed." Keep writng, you're talented!

The Knick Knack by SeverusSempra

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It’s not impossible for a Slytherin to marry a Gryffindor. They just might not agree on how to decorate the house.

A very fluffy AU one-shot about what might have happened if Lily Evans had wound up with Severus Snape.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/18/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

fabulous story! I think it did capture Snape's personality, but I think you made him seem a little older than nineteen.... Over all, nice writing.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :) I think the tricky part is that they get married so young in the Wizarding world during the two wars (hence Mrs. Weasley's comment about Bill and Fleur)-- Lily would have been 21 when she died, for example, and would have had Harry when she was 20, which puts her at about 19 (or 18?) when she got married (if everything happened in the traditional order.) :) Maybe they're a bit more mature than we Muggles at that age. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

A Different View On Love by helz_belz

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: James would do anything to get inside Lily’s head. Lily would do anything to get away from James. Lily was brewing a banned potion. James went to find her. Lily made a mistake and the potion exploded. James got his wish, but is it much more than he bargained for?

Now Complete!

After a year the Epilouge is now up! Come read for a bit of fun!!
Runner up QSQ - Best Chaptered Canon Romance

Reason for Nomination:
This is the most unique take on how James and Lily really got to know each other. The story is hilarious and keeps you laughing throughout, but it never lets you forget the serious stuff. Plus, she somehow manages to end each chapter with a nice cliffhanger.

~~hestiajones

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: It Must Be The Shampoo

Beautiful. Very funny, too! Can't wait to continue!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Sorry for taking so long to reply to this review :)

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: It Must Be The Shampoo

Beautiful. Very funny, too! Can't wait to continue!

Author's Response: Aww thanks. Sorry about the long time to reply. I promise I'm continuing.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six: Concurrent Concussions

I know I already left a review, but your story is too hilarious to not drop another! It's creative, funny, and intelligent. I love your "sneak peaks" about the next chapters. You've got quite a talent, and you should definitely write Orsha's Wish, just for fun. :)

Author's Response: Two reviews are always better than one. I'm glad someone likes the sneak peaks, I have fun writing them (often before I write a chapter). Haha, Maybe I should write Orsha's wish. I did steal my sisters name for the authors name though (her first two names anyway)

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter Twelve: Objection!

AAAAH! WHERE'S THE NEXT CHAPTER? lol Your story drew me in (unexpectedly, I am ashamed to say,) but now I seriously don't know what I will do without the conclusion! Type, helz_belz, TYPE! :)

Author's Response: Tee hee. Sorry for taking so long to respond to this review. I'm glad I drew you in (even if you didn't suspect it). I promise I'm typing! Only 2000 words to go and I'm finished! (Oh yeah, and I have to update them. Update info is on my profile)

Floccinaucinihilipilification by WhiteRoses

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: James is stuck to Lily. Litterally.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 07/13/09 Title: Chapter 1: Abligurition

AAAAAAHHHHH! What happens next? WHAT HAPPENS NEXT?! lol Great story so far! Keep going! Please!

Love at First Strike by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: When Cupid and his trainee, Godfrey, arrive at Hogwarts, their plan is to bring some love into Angelina Johnson’s life. Cupid knows exactly who she should be with. Unfortunately, when Godfrey panics the second arrow ends up in a totally different place.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Cupid Gone Crazy challenge.

I am not JK Rowling; I doubt you're surprised by that.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very funny and creative. Lovely story, brilliant read! :) Keep on writing!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I plan to keep on writing for as long as my laptop holds out. Carole xxx

Beneath the Shell by Afifa

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A typical love story: Boy loves girl. Girl loves boy. They end up being a couple. They are happy.

Another story: boy loves girl. But. Girl does not love the boy. No happy couple. So how exactly does the boy feel and what does he do to try to win over his love? Most importantly, does he succeed or does he make a gradual progress or does he even give her reason to hate him more?

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: One shot- Beneath the Shell

Lovely story! I'm definitely reading the sequel. Nice work, it's a great read.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :D Thanks for the review. :)

Snuffed by Indigoenigma

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: All Bill needed to be perfect was a pretty girlfriend. Young, gorgeous, part Veela, and preferrably French.

It was a real shame, then, that the perfect girl was dating Charlie.

Not that it mattered to Bill.

Categories: Other Pairing
Characters: None
Warnings: Alternate Universe, Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Words: 1467 | Hits: 2249 | Published: 05/24/09 | Updated: 06/01/09
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Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 06/17/09 Title: Chapter 1: Flame

Wow, thanks for writing this! It is so cool to know how Bill and Fleur came to be... even if this is just fan "fiction." Great writing, by the way; keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the comments!

A Suitable Young Man by Blue Phoenix

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: After a year playing Quidditch for the Harpix’s, Ginny finds herself whisked off to Italy for a summer holiday by none other than dear Aunt Muriel. Although Ginny might welcome a holiday, Muriel is not the best of traveling companions. And when one Draco Malfoy comes rather literally tumbling into the scene, will this prove to be the nightmare holiday Ginny envisions, or something else entirely?

Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Romance-Non Canon

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 02/13/10 Title: Chapter 20: Coda - Epilogue

WOW! I have to say, I really, really like this story. You're an amazing writer! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you :)

Two is Better Than One by ron lover

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Hermione has to chose between Harry and Ron, between friendship and love.

Reviewer: Storytellerdoll Signed
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Between Friendship and Love

I like how you used 2nd person, very uncommon on stories such as these. I really enjoyed this!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you like it! Thanks for reading and reviewing.