A very interesting story. Very 'twisty'. I liked the way it got out that Luna was only acting. And Harry with his tendency to 'save people'. You could always rely on that. Luna is the best. I also liked that you let us on what Cho was thinking. Good job.

Author's Response: Thank you! I don't know why Jo went from strongly hinting Harry/Luna at the end of OotP (she was the only one he could talk to about Sirius, she made him feel better) to having him be squirmy embarrassed to be around her and out of the blue rivited to the way Ginny's hair was "dancing" (conga, samba, disco?) but I still hope the HBP text influenced Harry in a similar manner to Riddle's diary, and he won't turn out to be a silly boy, after all, sigh.

Very interesting so far and very refreshing to have things see through someone/something else's eyes. Can't wait to read more. There were some orthographic mistakes, you might want to go back and correct them. But thad doesn't mean that I couldn't enjoy your story. I liked the way you paralleled the cats' world with the humans'. That Slytherin cats look down on half-bloods. It was a good read and I will come back to read on.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'm glad that you are enjoying the story. Sorry about the spelling mistakes, I do my best, but that is one of my weak points. I do acknowledge that failing in my writing. I hope that you keep enjoying my story!

It was a really nice read. I liked the idea to look at that scene from a very different point of view.

There were some spelling mistakes (and one missing word, I think), but that didn't bothered me too much. The transitions were a bit of problem, but I think otherwise it was a very good fic.

You have definitely captured Cedric's spirit and I liked your fic, and that comes from a HP fan who doesn't really like Cedric.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's good to hear what people think of my story, for I am a first time writer and I want to know how my stories are(from reader's point of view). Keep on reading (and writing of course!)

Haha! Pantomancy! Really liked that idea, but not the imagery, I guess. Dumbledore wearing Snape's pants? Ughh...

Anyways, good chapter, with some hilarious ideas and lines. I have to tell that I quite liked the idea of Dumbledore's of imposing membership fee. Clever! And the sentence: "The reader is now to be spared any snivelling answer given by James Potter because it is at this point that Albus Dumbledore, with no thought for the already strained nerves of Lily Potter and the likelihood of her reaction to a sudden intrusion being both swift and brutal, apparates inside their godforsaken hovel." is simply hilarious!

Author's Response: Thanking ye! Yes, it is a rather nasty idea...

Hi! I really enjoyed this story, Charlie is one of my favourite characters.
Angie is such a good character, she really sounds believable. I liked your descriptions, and that for example you wrote what Angie wore but not how she exactly looked. That leaves space for the imagination.
I also liked the dialogues between Charlie and Angie. Her calling him a magician was brilliant! It was just right to demonstrate how different Muggles and Wizards are.
In a one-shot you've just created this whole person and it is a hard to thing to do, but you've succeeded.
Thanks for sharing this little story with us.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Ennalee wanted non-major characters... so... Angie just seemed like the perfect outdoorsy type for Charlie ;) I'm glad you liked her!

This is a very promising beginning. Can't wait to find out how Pansy gets involved. You have described the scene and the mood in a very interesting way. I liked how the siblings interacted.

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so very much. I really tried to set the whole mood in the prologue. As for the siblings, I take it from my own experiences with my younger sister. It's supprising that we get along so well yet we're complete opposites. But, thank you so very much for reading and reviewing!

Just dropping in to leave a review. I really like this story and the setting is wonderful. Snape in a cottage... with Hermione.




Anyways, keep up the good work, you really write in a way that makes your readers ask for more.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the wonderful review Joanna. I have been going through a period where I wasn\'t sure my writing was up to snuff. I have been reading so many other wonderful stories, I was beginning to feel completely inadequate. Having said that, I have completed my move (pretty much) and Chapter Six is on the way. Thanks again!

Oh poor-poor Severus! How will he be ever able to convince Hermione that he is no agent for Voldie? *anticipates next chapter with anxiety*

I really liked this chapter, although I was sad that they didn't talk that much. However, watching each other is almost as good if not better than speaking.

There were several great moments in this chapter. Hermione's table filled with food was hilarious, I just kept seeing that in my mind's eye. And the chase and gripping of arm scene was really my favourite. It's a really good stand to go on from.

Oh and Voldie reprimanding Bella... It was really-really well in character, for both of them.

But poor-poor Severus. He is taken away from Hermione. *cries*

Author's Response: Yes, sometimes silence can be more enjoyable than incessant chattering (to quote my dear Severus). I think I am ready now to branch out and include other characters. I am glad that the Voldemort/Bellatrix scene worked out so well. I really had a fun time with my brit-picker over Hermione\'s meal. Apparently I had a whole bunch of food on that table that the British just do not eat. So we had a lot of back and forth, give and take on that one. It was quite fun. I also enjoyed the chase. I like putting a bit of action into a story, and when you are trapped in a small house running from room to room is about the best you can do. Getting thirsty for some lemonaide? I know I am.

I really like the childhood you worked out for Salazar. It was very original and to place it into Afghanistan was really creative and unique. Your description of Kabul was fantastic, the imagery took me right there, to the middle of the city; I heard the shouts, I smelled the spices and the scents of the Orient.

Even at this age, Salazar wanted power.

This was a very powerful sentence at that place of the story.

When he realised what the slave traders wanted to do with him, his thoughts were right on spot for the future Salazar Slytherin. They were going to put him with those people, those battered, half-people...

This is a really great fic!

Courtesy of

The Naughty Penguin Society

Author's Response: I loved writing about Kabul, and it seems to have shown. Glad you enjoyed it, you naughty penguin you!

Wow, Jan! I already said that when I commented on that old drabble that you should really write more Hermione/Snape. Even though I have the feeling that they won't last you could convert someone to the "dark side" with this masterpiece of emotions!

I read the first part last week and now the second chapter. I really like how you described Severus' and Maeve's reactions to the new situation. And although I'm a Hermione/Severus shipper, I hope that he and Maeve come together again. They are meant to be (like Hermione and Severus)!

I really liked the second chapter, but I'm also curious about Peter. What did he put in that tea? And how will Remus go on?

Very interesting, masterfully written, and I beg for more;). And the fact that YOU are writing this adds to the entertainment factor!