I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.
In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....
Told from the POV of Felicity, Draco Malfoy’s daughter. Disregards the Epilogue. Contains slash, though nothing graphic.
I liked this very much. I like that Draco obviously goes and visits his mother, even though he clearly does not agree with her much.
I agree that Felicity is not a very Malfoyesque name, but there may be a point there. And the meaning of her name might be making a point, as well.
I do hope they end up helping Harry anyway.
I agree with most of the technical points made by Inverarity, except that while 9 may be a bit precocious, She didn't strike me that way. I've known some pretty precocious children, I guess, but I also think it is more common when a child spends a lot of time with a parent, rather than with other children.
Good job.
Author's Response: There's a point. There's always a point. :)
I'm really trying to keep Fee behaving at the right age, so any help on that front would be greatly appreciated. Overal, thank you for reviewing!
I had to get up and go breath in another room before I could write this. I neve rliked cho and I have no idea what poor Cedric sees in her. Other than that, I think this really does him justice. I like the continuing use of King's Cross station. I like the sense that Fred is already on the train, or coming, and the way you tie that to his meeting the Weasleys. I just don't know what else to say.
Oh, except that I wonder if you intended the whole second half to be in italics, or if you missed a bit of code...
This must have been a very difficult chapter to write. On the one hand, you have so much Sirius has to know, that you have to show him learning it, reacting a little. On the other hand, it is so much, you sort of have to tell that he heard it, instead of showing him hearing it, at least for most of it.
You know, I have never understood why the time turners couldn't have been remade or fixed. No reason is ever given in canon. I think you explained where this one came from pretty well.
What I don't understand is how the time turner turned him back five years to being alive, but ended with him here in the now. I also don't understand Kingsley's problem. He can always say that while Sirius Black had been presumed dead, he had in fact been _ fill in trumped up story of your choice. In fact, why would he have to say anything. "But you were dead!" person exclaims. "Well, the rumours of my death were obviously wrong, weren't they?" The few people who actually saw him fall through the veil seem to fall mostly under three categories - 1. In Azkaban, 2. Dead 3. Can be trusted to keep their mouths shut. So unless Lucius Malfoy is out there running around looking to make trouble....
Of course the real problem is also not people wanting their families back. "We don't know how it worked and we are not mucking around to find out how." - Simple enough. How many people even know about the veil, anyway. No, the real problem is people trying to get Voldemort back. That Kingsley doesn't mention....
Just my random thoughts. I think you picked good details to show Sirius reacting to - Molly's duel, his walking with Harry in the woods, details about Snape... I think they are the points in the story he would have had the greatest reaction to. And I think you did a VERY good job with Hermione's conflicted feelings about the wedding.
I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I wondered the same thing about the time turners being remade. An interesting point about why it brought him to the here and now. And that will be covered in a future chapter. As will reactions about him coming back through the Veil. Thank you for your interesting points as they are sparking situations and conversations in my mind. I will be updating very soon as my muse wants to work on this story now. Terri
How did he feel when he saw how Harry had kept his room?
It seems to me that Sirius must be feeling a very confused welling of emotion at almost everything, not just Hermione being grown up and Kreachur being decent. What is he thinking about all this? About his having come back? I know he's glad about he house beign so different, but shouldn't he be feeling that everything is so different?
Then again, you may have a master plan about all this which you have not yet revealed, mwahahaha.
Author's Response: Doesn't every writer have a master plan? You will just have to keep reading to discover it. Thanks for your review and for your comments and questions about Sirius' mental state. Terri
Harry is 37 in the Ep., when James is at least 12 and possibly older. Let us give James, say, 15 years before he has Sirius - that would make James 27 - certainly a decent age to have a child, and Harry fifty two. Which means that Sirius is 11 when Harry is 63.
Sixty three is not old enough to die of old age. It is certainly old enough to die of things that get worse with age, but not really old enough to be dieing from old age itself.
It is especially not old enough to die of old age when you are a wizard and have personally met people over one hundred years old who themselves were not dieing of old age.
Even if we give James 25 years to get around to having a kid and make him 37 and Harry 62 -, which puts Harry at 73, he is still not old enough to be dieing of old age. I know this because I know a lot of people in their 70's, and the ones I have known of who died in their 70's died of something specific. Cancer, for example.
Is this explained in a later chapter?
The love you portray between Albus and Scorpius is very sweet. I don't know why the Muggle barman has fire whiskey to give them and it seems odd to me that the Malfoys wouldn't have warded the house against unexpected visitors, but those are relatively minor points.
I do have to say, though, that I think Draco would have been more sympathetic than this. Not that he would necessarily have been thrilled, but somehow I find him a softer person than Lucius by time he grows up. He might have been concerned about appearances, but I think he would have surprised his son by supporting him.
We don't really know much about Albus and Scorpius at all, and nothing of them as adults, and we know almost nothing about Malfoy as an adult, in canon, this is just my gut feeling.
But again - l liked the relationship between the two young men.
Author's Response: *facepaaaaalms* I totally didn't think about the fire whiskey. Oops. I must go and change that. As for the wards around the house ... I did think of that when I was writing, but to have them would have ruined my ending slightly, and I like it as it is. And Draco - in my mind, he does support him. It's just the initial shock he has at finding out his son is gay, and I would have continued it, but like I said, I liked my ending as is. :) I'm extremely pleased you liked their relationship, though! This is the first slash I've written, so I'm glad I managed it well. Thank you!
I had to read this because you so seldom see Molly/Arthur stories. Very sweet! I can see Arthur saying that.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Very nice.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Very nice. I've read at least one chapter of you story about Albus and Marcum - this certainly does give it some backstory.
Actually, and maybe it is because I already knew about Albus and Marcum, I find Ophelia the most interesting of the characters. Another Slytherin family with a child sorted out - even in a new society, that must have been interesting...
It seemed like Albus was dead in the end of this story, and yet James didn't seem sad enough for that. Hmmm Mystery.
Author's Response: Oh Thea, thank you so much for leaving my first review! I really appreciate you stopping to read this story. I'm glad you liked it and that it fleshed out my other story a bit. I really enjoyed working on it and creating those other characters. As for the end, I guess it wasn't clear or sad enough, but you are right - and that's all I'll say about that! :) Thanks again for reviewing!! ~Gina :)
Hm...I have my assumptions, although I'm not sure I should mention them... Interesting how you have changed the house structure.
I do have to say that one thing bothers me a little. In some places you are quoting directly from either the movie or the books, and yet you aren't acknowledging that. I know we all know where it comes from, but to my way of thinking it would be correct to mention chapters, etc.
I do think I know who Masen is, what happened, and find his role model for teaching interesting.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. It's Supposed to he kinda obvious who Mason is, because it's more about the journey, and the colliding of past and present, than just finding out who he is ... although that will take up a large majority of the plot.
Sweet AND Clever! Not that I am a Draco=Ginny shipper, but the way Draco handles his family, when they think they are handling him... I bet he knew already, too... Very Slytherin. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you. I’m glad you liked my Draco – I did try to make him have all those Slytherin qualities we all love (well, me at least. I can’t help liking Draco. He’s so… underhanded.)
I like it.
Obligatory nitpick - I think you meant Neville had never seen him as more than the sadistic teacher, rather than less than the sadistic teacher, or however that went...
I like the concept, I like the execution. I think it is a tiny bit stronger at the end than at the beginning, although I don't find the beginning weak.
I love the last line.
Author's Response: I am so glad you liked it since if we didn't have that convo about Snape that night, I wouldn't have gotten the idea. I will go rephrase the line in question. Thank you for pointing that out. Thanks for the review. Terri
My heart is really bleeding for Neville here. It has always seemed unfair to me that he doesn't end up with someone. You've done a great job of showing Ginny's emotions and also kept her in character. She Is a person who knows her own mind, and she is not doubting her love for Harry for a minute.
It goes along with Neville being braver than he's commonly taken for for him to go out there and tell her that, too. Good job on both characters.
I love the last sentence.
Author's Response: Thank you... I tried not to make it too dramatic to the point of cheesy, and I'm glad you think that I was able to do it... Thanks again, for the review...
I had to sort of let this sit overnight before I could review. And frankly, in three years here I don't think I ever have reviewed a songfic, so I'm not sure I know what I'm doing. However...
I can see that Draco has been dwelling on this for years. It has kept him going. There is a long history of men who were thought lost coming home to find the woman they had been using to sustain their morale - a wife, a girlfriend - married to or with the child of someone else, in that sense this is really very realistic. Of course, Draco never had Ginny to begin with - but still, in his mind, in Azkaban, somehow he did have her, or something of her, and that kept him going.
It doesn't bother me at all if Harry and Ginny sometimes act like Muggles - Harry was raised as one, after all, and I am not so sure that every single magical way of doing things is actually easier or better than the Muggle way - we know he doesn't like Apparating, he can't fly on his broom during a London rush hour - I'd say walking home is possibly a really good choice for him. Because he was raised as a Muggle, he really is in a better position to chose how to do things - it is not as if he doesn't know how. Ginny is spunky and adaptable and I'm sure she doesn't mind moving from one way of doing things to another and back - it probably depends on their mood what they chose.
I can see the whole scenario happening, but I have to wish that something, someone could have stopped Draco right at that moment. Maybe there was something else he could have found to live for, but at that moment, it was too much at once. Very believable.
I'm debating the fact that he seems to let himself fall instead of just using an AK on himself. That doesn't seem like Draco, but at those moments when you are out of your mind, who knows what you'll do.
A fantastic and original first fic. Congrats!
Author's Response: *finally gets around to responding to some reviews!* Thankyou so much for your Review Thea! I love that you didnt't mind that they acted like muggles, it was the one part of the song that I didn't feel fitted perfectly into the story, but I could think of no other way to get it in. Ahh but does he die? I havent even decided myself whether or not he actually jumps/falls. I like to leave a little air of mystery, it depends how you interpret it, you obviously thought he jumped and died, but I was never really sure. Thanks again! *hugs*
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I'm truly intrigued here, perishing to know who the Death Eater is. Obviously, he was never known, or else, he was presumed dead. Is it the usual suspect?
And Malfoy - the fellow is cracking up. We can all understand why Draco is behaving so idiotically about Katie - he hasn't a clue how to behave any other way. Will he ever realize that Harry is not trying to torture him? Will he let down his guard enough, ever, to have any real friends???
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I love reading about people who are actually interested in my fics hehe and yes, I do feel like I'm torturing Draco (I feel really bad for him) but it's not Dark/Angsty for nothing! It's good to see that my reasoning behind Draco acting the way he does is coming through to readers and your last question is one I have been asking myself all through the writing of this fic. So, thanks for taking the time to review!
Well, I think you have a good point. I'm a bit confused, because it seems to be his wedding day, and yet he seems to already be back from his honeymoon, but maybe I missed something. Your logic seems to be working well, and I am going to follow this...
Author's Response: I agree that the prologue is very confusing and disjointed. Maybe I will rewrite it sometime. Thanks for the review!
I feel for him. I think Katie's father really is sick, or that soemone took her, and I hope that Draco survives all this.
Author's Response: I feel for Draco too. I actually feel a bit bad about all the pain I'm putting him through! But a story is a story and I assure you all that there is method in my madness! Thankyou to everyone who has reviewed! I love reading your comments :)
I have no idea. Usually I am pretty good at guessing, but you have me entirely confused! Enjoy!
Author's Response: Wow, not one guess? No, I suppose not. Perhaps the next chapter will offer some new clues... Thanks for reviewing. I like keeping people on their toes ;)
Very intriguing turns and twists here. I hope the fellow in the cloak is Snape, but he is the obvious suspect...
But what is with this Paul Trent?
Author's Response: Thanks! Stay tuned to find out ;)