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... And he Turned Around Snobbily and Strutted Away by Mind_Over_Matter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: "Strutting around the place with his friends and admirers..." ~Professor Snape, PoA
There may be some reason behind Snape's words.
Date: 11/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Particularly Good Day
(You must read this as someone saying it with feigned suprise and ignorance) What? You have a story called 'The Harry Potter Literary Storm'? Hmmm, I've never heard of such a story. Why, I must have a look at this story as you have assured me that it is a 'million times more...' But wait! 'More' what?!
HA! Sorry, couldn't help myself. I loved this one, too. Am I suprised? No, because I already know what an awesome author you are! :D
Really, though, Severus was not sure whether to use one of his trademark sneers, or try something a little different and laugh icily. was this really a line from the book?
Seriously, thank you for sharing your funny ficlets with us!
-Your admirer,
Erica
Author's Response:
Why, yes! I do have a story of that name. Notice my astonishment at your having not ever read it! But it\'s a fun story. I have a sneaky suspicion that, if you read it (which you obviously haven\'t, of course), you might like it.
I\'m glad you like this. I wasn\'t sure whether it was acceptable or a complete load of tosh. But then, sometimes tosh isn\'t completely useless. Thank you for reviewing. And I\'m going to try and pretend I\'m not blushing like a tomato at the suggestion that my stories are worth admiration.
Thing is, I\'m terrible at pretending I\'m not flattered, and even worse at taking a complement without looking like a moron, as I\'m sure you\'ve noticed by now.
Oh, and finally, I can\'t imagine Snape ever thinking like that. But it would be remarkably cool if it did say that in the book. It would have to be followed by Harry wondering exactly how he knew of his Professor\'s very odd thought patterns.
Anyway, as usual, many thanks indeed, darling!
A Stolen Past by nuw255
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Fifteen-year-old Harry Potter wakes up in his cupboard under the stairs at number four, Privet Drive with no memory of the past five years of his life. What happened to his memory? What do his strange dreams mean? And most importantly, how will he survive in a school for incurably criminal boys?
This is primarily a mystery, with a bit of shippiness thrown in here and there. Of course, if I told you WHO is involved in the shippiness, that would ruin part of the mystery, wouldn’t it?
This story takes place immediately after OotP (and thus disregards HBP).
Date: 12/11/06 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Hassseth and Hedwig
Yes! Finally, we get to see everyone else! Not that I'm complaining, it just gives me some hope.
Another excellent chapter. I haven't reviewed the last few because, well, I'd simply sound like a broken record. The writing is impeccable and the plot inriguing! I've GOT to keep reading.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I hope the plot continues to please.
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Magic
It is not unheard of to perform wandless magic, and I'm sure moments of extreme mental duress would help a wizard to focus his energy enough to accomplish such a feat. I did not find the incident unbelievable.
Your story continues to fascinate and enthrall me. I agree that calling Hedwig 'Snowy' is rather disconcerting, however, it would be silly for Harry to figure out her name with only his Muggle memories.
I saw that you were able to post all 18 of your chapters very quickly. I must confess that I'm quite envious. I've been posting mine since March and I still have a few more chapters to go! Are you using beta readers? If you are they must be lightening fast. My story is complete, but it is the beta readers that are really slowing down the posting.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your comments. I actually haven\'t used a Beta for this story at all (although I do proofread each chapter several times over the course of a few weeks before submitting). My last Beta experience left sort of a bad taste in my mouth. But anyway, I think the reason my chapters get posted so quickly is a combination of the Mystery category\'s Mod being extremely fast most of the time, and the fact that I tend to submit a new chapter as soon as the previous one is validated. I try to stay several chapters ahead of what\'s posted so there\'s always a new chapter waiting in the wings.
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Hassseth
Another of Harry's abilities slowly coming forth. I truly enjoyed his 'discovery' that he is a Parselmouth. I especially loved what the adder had to say about him:
'"A human who can speak in the language of serpents,” the snake explained. “They’re not very common, as I’m sure you know, and to meet one who looks out for his friends as you just did.... It’s practically unheard of.”'
It was a clever reference to most Parselmouths being dark wizards who would not do such things. I appreciated that touch.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked the Parselmouth bit; you caught what I was alluding to perfectly.
Date: 12/15/06 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: Back to the Beginning
Great job! A very fascinating and thrilling story. It kept me coming back for more. I appreciate your talent for writing, and the time you took to work on this story.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. It\'s always gratifying to learn that somebody new enjoyed my writing. I hope you continue on with the sequel.
Date: 12/14/06 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Harry’s Dream Girl
Awww, this chapter was so sweet! You handled it so delicately. I loved this one.
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I really appreciate your comments. I tried really hard to make it believable, and I\'m glad you feel I succeeded.
Date: 12/12/06 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: “I smell a rat.”
What an intense and breat-taking chapter! I was moved that Hassseth died, savagely happy that Wormtail died, and relieved when Harry finally left. Your battle description work very well for imgaining the scene. Great imagery!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I\'m still sad that Hassseth died, but I take comfort in the fact that she took Wormtail with her.
Date: 12/13/06 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Questions and Answers
Ah-ha! I knew it had to be something like that! A Memory Charm! I figured the whole hitting his head thing couldn't be the explaination. How else would Vernon know that they could shove him back into the cupboard under the stairs and he wouldn't remember? He must have known Harry's memory was modified. I kept thinking his memory was Obliviated, but knew that couldn't be correct, as he still had some memory. Excellent!
The plot gets more sinister feeling now!
Author's Response: Thank you! Now you just have to figure out who did it!
Date: 12/10/06 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: The Severe Beating of a Sixteen-year-old Wizard
What a terrible beating! The only thing that I can hope comes from that is Harry's memory returning (and the boys being expelled!). Your descriptions of the fight scene were excellently graphic. I cringed! Poor Harry.
On to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you. There may be some interesting outcomes from Harry\'s beating, but they might not be what you\'d expect.
Date: 12/14/06 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Confrontation
Finally, some answers! A very good chapter here. I was shocked, yet not so suprised to discover Umbridge behind it all.
Thanks!
Author's Response: Yeah, the Toad strikes again!
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Memory Loss
"A/N: I hope you didn’t find this chapter too boring; it was necessary to set up the rest of the story. If it did bore you, please don’t give up on me yet - it only gets better.:
Boring? How could it be boring? I thought it was wonderful! Full of great information. It was curiousity piquing. I think it's a great start. Fascinating story idea.
I saw no mistakes (though I'm no grammar expert) and I thought it flowed really nicely.
You've captured the Dursley's characters excellently. I felt very sorry for Harry and yet amused at how worry he felt for himself.
I can't wait to find out what is going on.
Excellent chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I really ought to go back and get rid of that author\'s note now that the following chapters are up. I\'d honestly forgotten all about it.
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: St. Brutus’s Secure Center for Incurably Criminal Boys
You have written another very fascinating chapter. You give little tidbits of the past away, but it's so muddled for poor Harry that he can't make sense of it. I'm still dying of curiosity to know what happened to him (what an excellent way to ensure that people will continue with your story!).
I feel so terribly sad for Harry and his situation, so you've obviously done an excellent job creating the mood. You've also done an excellent job with the imagery, too. Again, I found no mistakes.
An excellent story!
Author's Response: I\'m glad you think so. All I can say is, read on and everything will become clear (eventually).
Color of Betrayal by dnd_lady
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: How could Wormtail bring himself to betray his friends? What will it bring down upon him? Does he deserve it?
This and more pondered in another quirky poem by yours truly and her wonderful beta, Bubbles.
*generally triambic pentameter (like anyone cares)
*strong end rhyme
*consistent rhyme scheme
Date: 11/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: Color of Betrayal
I love it. As I said in my review of your first poem, I'm not usually one who enjoys poetry, but I had to read your work! I did enjoy it, and I especially liked the references to Judas, Brutus, and Cassius. I found that to be very appropriate. I'm amused by the ending line: Hell's icy waters. One does not normally think of Hell as icy, but I liked the image nonetheless.
I know you explained that the star-dogged moon was an ill omen (which I thought was a fun fact - then again, maybe you and I are different. Read any Grammar for Dummies books lately?!), but do you know exactly what it is? A moon with several stars 'chasing' it or something?
Prewett'd : Gucky and the Fork Tree by Mind_Over_Matter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: August 12, 1956
Everything’s running as per usual in the Prewett household, until young Fabian finds something – or, perhaps, someone – who proves to be the instrument of change.
This WON the ‘One-Shot Challenge: Muggle Artifacts’ *Is so proud* I can't believe it!
Name: Mind_Over_Matter
House: Ravenclaw
Artifact: Aerosol Can (insecticide)
Date: 11/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Muggle Magic
So cute! Such wonderful imagery. What a wonderfully woven story! I think these would have to be my two favorite lines:
"Most of their remaining night, Fabian and Gideon spent trying to think of ways to impress the spray bottle." Just the thought of trying to impress a spray bottle!!
"He was rarely scared of anything — not because of bravery, but because he just didn’t care about all that many things, because he was stupid." How like a child to think this way! I loved it.
You have to tell me, though... what was Gucky? I totally didn't get it... I still loved the story in spite of my ignorance!
Author's Response:
Hey, it\'s you! *Mad waving*
^^ haha. Gucky was a can of insecticide. You know, the ordinary stuff from the shops that you spray to get rid of bugs? An aerosol can is just that kind of spray can, and can be insecticide/hair spray/etc.
XD It\'s so funny to try and slip into a child\'s state of mind to write this kind of story. You know, especially more than one. It probably doesn\'t look like it, but I spent quite a while trying to construct and properly write the sibling dynamic.
*Shuts up about psycological jargon*
Thank you so much for coming and checking out this story! And then even more for reviewing ^^
Trust and Betrayal: A Prequel by Starmom
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Summary: What happened on that fateful night at Godric's Hollow and the (still!) unknown events that followed in the next twenty four hours, before Harry's arrival on Privet Drive? What motivated the actions and decisions that were made in the years leading up to the defeat of Voldemort? The truth is neither black or white - only complicated shades of grey. Behind the stories of Lily Evans, Severus Snape and Peter Pettigrew we learn that we are all vulnerable to evil.
(written between HBP and DH - story is complete)
Date: 11/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: November 1, 1981
What an excellent and curiousity piquing start to a story! You word choice is diverse and your imagery is wonderful. I also thought you captured the known character of Dumbledore very well, and gave more life to a character we don't know that well. I'm dying of curiousity to know what the 'truth' is in the phial. What a great cliff-hanger of sorts.
Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you Sekhmet! So glad you have you here and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on this story!
Date: 12/08/06 Title: Chapter 2: 1. What the Future Beholds - 1978
What a chilling end to this chapter!
Again, the imagery was excellent. Each scene in this chapter deftly created its own distinct feeling. I love how you are weaving life histories, backgrounds, and idiosyncrasies for these characters.
Very well done, indeed!
Author's Response: Ah, good! *Chilling* was what I was after!! Glad you enjoyed it and I really appreciate your comments!!
Date: 12/30/06 Title: Chapter 3: 2. Friends and Empathy: 1970 - 1972
WOW!! What a spectacular chapter. I'm sorry it's been so long since I've had a chance to read this story. It really is very good. It's so rich with detail, one would think you'd stolen JK's notebooks full of backstory!
I've got to ask, was Peters mom really named Brandiwine, or did you make that up? I LOVE that name, it makes me think Lord of the Rings, too.
Absolutely wonderful chapter. The detail and imagery is excellent. I feel like I'm really getting to know these characters in a brand new way. The thought of Peter and James as first years is just so cute!
Excellent!
Prewett’d: Wedding Tears, Funeral Tears by Mind_Over_Matter
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
December 3rd, 1980
It is a dark day for Gideon Prewett.
His fiancé has died at the hands of Voldemort’s followers. His brother has been missing for two weeks. Now, numbness and desperation are beginning to get the better of him, and the line between Right and Wrong is fading.
This was a story of the Gauntlet, third run.
Date: 11/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Hopeless
You are quite the talented one. You pull off humour so well that you've got me snorting out loud, and yet, you have written such a beatifully dark piece here. It is somber, it is sad, it is foreboding. It's also quite realistic.
You're descriptions and imagery are excellent. I never get bogged down in reading your writing, yet you paint the picture vividly enough for the scene to be... well, seen! The characterization is excellent also, he's full of life on the page even as he struggles with being empty in the story.
I feel giddy after reading Happy, I feel serious and thoughtful after reading this. I truly appreciate your versatility as a writer. I hope this is something you may like to continue with profesionally someday, as I think you could do it well.
This is dark, but this is beautiful. Kudos to you, my dear.
(p.s., can't wait for chapter 7 part 1!!)
Author's Response:
*Is blushing furiously*
Wow. Thank you so much, and I\'m glad you got to come and read this story. This is so very different from Happy\'s story, but I\'m really delighted to hear that you still like it.
(P.S. ;) Shouldn\'t be too long now before it\'s up *Excitement*)
Date: 11/18/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two: A Man Can’t Fly
Another dark, yet fascinating chapter. You are quite skilled at weaving such a depressing tale. It is a marked difference from your humour fic, but I appreciate it greatly. It really captures and draws in the reader, and it feels so real. His pain and confusion and suffering is so tangible. I can't wait until I have time to finish the next chapters!
Excellent writing!
I would like to add, though, that while you have done a spectacular job articulating his pain from the loss of Morticia (and I know everyone grieves differently), another feeling that is very prevelant (at least it was for me), is a cold emptyness. A feeling like you will never be warm inside again. I'm not sure if you can use that, as I think you have finished your story, just thought I'd share it with you.
Author's Response:
This review is so lovely, it\'s difficult to reply to, in my current state of having no vocabulary, and barely having the ability to put two sentences together and have them make sense.
Never the less:
I\'m utterly delighted that you\'re liking this story, despite it being so dramatically different from anything else I\'ve ever posted here. Thank you so much for your comments.
And about the last one - I know exactly what you mean. I really do. I sort of tried to include that kind of feeling a little, but the reason why I didn\'t make it clearer, and intensify this feeling is that, in his way, Gideon is still really in a state of denial, for almost of all this story. It\'s hard to invent a character\'s unique grieving process, especially in this even more unique situation, but the way I\'ve sort of put everything together, the penny hasn\'t really dropped. A loss like this/these deviates from both his idea of reality, and his idea of his own identity, if that makes sense. Also, this is in first person, and his thoughts really aren\'t coherent enough to describe a feeling like that. Basically, after all of this discussion, justification and explanation, the simple answer is that, for Gideon at least, that empty, icy nothingness which can well inside you after a loss would just happen later on in the grieving process.
*Reads that again* And I apologise for my rambling ways. You brought up a very valid point though, and I wanted to answer properly.
A Past Reclaimed by nuw255
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Sequel to A Stolen Past. Please read that story first, as this one really won’t make sense if you don’t.
Harry Potter has rejoined the Wizarding world after a year-long absence, but still has no memory of his time at Hogwarts. Will he ever get his memory back? Will he be able to pass his classes without it? And most importantly, will he ever be able to defeat Lord Voldemort? Read on as the last of the mysteries introduced in A Stolen Past are finally revealed.
This is a story of friendship and mystery, with a healthy dose of H/G thrown in for good measure.
Date: 12/27/06 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: The Pickpocket
Oh, Tyler. What a good friend for trying to help Harry out. He just had no idea what he was getting in to. I have one comment, though, Ron made the comment: "He’s a Squib!” - but a Squib is a person born of magical parents but can't do any magic themself.... Does he have magical parents and you just haven't told us yet? I thought he was just a Muggle. Did I miss something?
Author's Response: Back when Tyler wrote to Harry saying that he was being chased by dark wizards, one of the twins (I forget which and I\'m too lazy to go check) guessed that Tyler was a Squib because he knew about magic but he wasn\'t a wizard. Harry just played along, so now everybody thinks Tyler\'s a Squib. That\'s the reason for Ron\'s comment.