Hi ... everyone! =)
My name is Sara, and I'm a Malaysian. That's located somewhere in the South East of Asia. I'm a big fan of HP, and first came to the world of fanfiction during the year 2004.
My favourite genres are Romance, and Humour. Adventure fics with a good plot and interesting characters are good in my books too.
My ships are: R/Hr and H/G. Well. That's all I read, that is. Not H/G so much, though. And lately, I've been writing about Jimmy/Demelza ... read HBP, and you'll know who I mean.
Anyhoo, if you like reaing my fics, please drop a review. Constructive critiscm is always welcome, and in short, reviews brighten up my day. =)
That said, happy fanfic reading/writing!
Sara
Very nice, JessicaH! The plot sounds promising, and Blaise is very in character, from what we've seen of him ... good job!
Author's Response: Thank you. I hope you'll like the remaining chapters as well.
I love the way you described the emotion in this. Very realistic, and the little 'speech' at the end that she was saying to her parents ... that's realistic as well. I just have a few things to point out: She found she couldn’t cry no more. It should be 'She found she couldn't cry anymore'. The windy air plus the cold blowing snow didn’t feel nice at all as you stood there. The last bit of that sentence, 'as you stood there', should be 'as she stood there.' Overall, that was a very good piece. Good job! =)
Oh, this is wonderful. I love Norbert telling his story in the beginning ... I've always wanted to know what happened to the dear creature after Charlie's friends took him away. My favourite line is:
I think of him as my mummy, although I’ve come to realize that this is a biological impossibility.
Norbert says it so simply, and that's what makes it funny. Yes, I giggled when I read that. The way Luna just walked right up to Norbert, hand extended - that was good too.
I'd just like to know ... I've read chapter three already, and I was just wondering, how does Luna talking to Norbert sound like? Is it something like Parseltongue?
Oh, and just wanted to say - since that there are three of you writing this fic - good job on that. I have my suspicions as to which parts are written by a different person, but it's not blatantly obvious. =)
A very enjoyable read! What I liked best was the 'history' of what all of them has gone through. I think that it was beautifully written, and their personalities were captured wonderfully. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your review! I noticed your penname and was wondering--did you by any chance post on a Mugglenet CoS forums discussion on obsession in shipping? Because I remember someone with your name (or at least something close to it) replied to that topic, which I started (under the name 'LAbookwrm'). Thanks again for your review, and please keep an eye out for my other stories. I have already entered "Never," an entry to Challenge One, and I'm writing a Book Seven fic. Please, if you're interested, read and review them--I'd love more feedback from you! Love, Christine
Oh, that was nice. I've gotten an odd liking for non-main character fics, and I enjoyed this one immensely. Very good job, and I loved their playful banter. =)
In most humour stories, the jokes, what are meant to be funny, usually fall flat. But I have to say, despite teh toilet humour, this is a really good piece of work! You managed to make it funny, and yet, made it seem so ... I won't say In-Character, because Voldemort telling Snape to go without pants certainly isn't (Your statement about how Voldy asks Wormtail to robe him makes a whole lot of sense ... makes you think. Hmmm ...), but it seems ... natural, I suppose. =) And now I'm rambling. Good job!
Author's Response: Ha! I think I should start a Voldy Wears No Pants cult...hmm...
Written as a Term Challenge: Holidays Abroad submission for Slytherin.
Ooh, very different (in a good way!) idea! I like the way you described Tom's feelings and thoughts after gulping down the Amortentia. I dunno, but it just seemed right. I also like the way you ended it. Just a simple sentence, but it says a lot. Good work!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! it's nice to see a fellow Slytherin reviewing. Yeah, I work pretty hard on making the thoughts and action on the characters just right. You'll see more of that in the next chapter...
First off, I love the idea of Harry speaking to Sirius' younger portrait, as well as the idea of Sirius being in an alternate universe. Although it is a bit sad to think that poor Sirius is stuck there somehow.
There are a few spelling mistakes, however, which aren't a big deal. =)
Taping his wand against the mark -
'Taping should be 'tapping'.
His whiled his magic to work -
'His whiled' should be 'He willed'.
“You’re name, on the tapestry -"
Since that you're writing about Sirius' name, it should be 'Your name'. 'Your' would mean a possesion of the person you are talking to, while 'you're' is a simplified version of 'you are'.
“Don’t give up on my, Harry.”
The word 'my' should be 'me'.
Overall, a good read, quite enjoyable. I loved the ending, about how Harry is going back to teh only world he knows. That has to be my favourite line in this fic. =) Good work!
This was wonderful! The way you wrote it made it extremely enjoyable, and I enjoyed Cedric's and Hermione's thoughts nearing the end. And the ending was just ... wonderful. The way you weaved Oread/Echo into all this was good. The way you inserted her and wrote her our in the fic was beautiful. Just wondering, was Oread younger or older than Cedric? Overall, a very enjoyable read. Good job!