Hello loves, I'm Allie! You've obviously reached this page through grave error or through curiosity. I would urge you to turn back now, but unfortunately, it seems to be too late. =)
About me: I am a writer and an avid reader here on MNFF and other various sites as well. I am an ex-beta reader, drabbler, artist, duelist, TWSer, SBBCer, and my recent project is running the Gryffindor Review Crew with my fellow crewbee Claire so please, take pity on a poor author and leave a review. Updates may be slow in coming because SOMEONE deleted all my notes for my stories off my computer and plot lines has been lost and tangled hopelessly beyond repair. However, there may be some poetry and one-shots headed your way soon.
You can find me on the boards under the pen name dragonwings, so give me a PM if you want to talk!
Please read and most importantly, REVIEW! I love reviews, don't you? I get such a warm, fuzzy feeling inside. =)
Beautifully written, but I've already given you my opinion. (: Can I make one final itsy bitsy suggestion? This is something that I think I missed- "The name was irony and perfection."
I think that when I edited it I meant irony at its perfection, but if you don't want to change it, thats fine with me! Anyways, great job and good luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for being my first review!!! I\'ll look at that part again.
This is very beautiful and very deep. When I read it, the first thing that came to mind was Tom Riddle's diary. To me, it felt that the serpent was the diary. It kept welcoming her in, listening to her woes and troubles. But in the end, it betrayed her and she panicked and tried to get out. And also the part about how she was waiting for the hurt to go away. Maybe this isn't how you meant for it to be interpreted, but that is what I got from it.
Your rhyme scheme is just right and you stuck to a very strict pattern, (something that I'm absolutely horrible at) and that's very admirable. Over all you've done a great job here, and your poetry is wonderful. Thank you so much for participating in the Ballad Challenge!
~Allie
Author's Response: :D Thanks Allie! *is blushing*
Wow. This is incredible. *stares blankly at the screen* This HAS to be one of the better one-shots that I've read that's centered on a minor character.
I love how Theodore's so deluded about his father's activities even though it's a bti frustrating that he couldn't see through any of them! Kids really are blind to their parents' ulterior motives sometimes and I like how he didn't do a Draco vs. father switch and just automatically give up his family for the girl. Decisions like that aren't made in a minute. :)
Anyways, great job! I really enjoyed reading this and it made me really want a sequel!
~Allie of the Gryffindor Review Crew
Author's Response: Yay! I was actually inspired by a line used in V.C. Andrews\' \"Flowers in the Attic,\" when somebody says, \"She\'s your mother. We all want our mother to be the best.\" It hit home, and inspired this story. Thanks for the review!
Aww, so he dies? *is sad*. I like how it's sort of light on the angst and doesn't go too into detail. It had a bigger impact on me that way, just because I wasn't expecting Harry to die...But it is incredibly sad, I don't want Harry, Ginny, and Remus to die! Especially poor Remus, he's been through so much! *says a silent prayer to JK Rowling PLEASE!* Thanks for helping out the Gryffindor House with your submission- it's a great ballad and it's way better than anything I could write!
Author's Response: Thank you! -huggles you for the positive comment- ~Kathy
Very very nice! Great job, Hanni! I like the idea with the necklace- it makes perfect sense!
Draco with a sibling... Interesting. I would never put Narcissa as someone who would WANT to have a second kid. (gotta keep the figure sort of thing, lol) It's nice to see that Alise didn't follow in the footsteps of her brother and her father though- now that would be really depressing. Sort of doomed from the beginning sort of thing. Anyways, great story!
~Allie
Author's Response: It was more of an accident when she had Alise. You know what I mean? It was more like a pleasent surprise.
Thanks so much!
--Hanni
This is such a touching and fantastically written fic! I nearly cried it was so sad! :( I feel even worse for Neville now after reading this because it really hammers home the point that although they were tortured into insanity, the Longbottoms were loving, caring people with a son and a family. Sometimes, we forget that whenever we think (thought now since Neville's a total hero!) of Neville, and we just think of him as an awkward boy that's good at herbology. Overall excellence, great job!
~Allie
*squeals* Loved it! I go both ways on Ginny pairings- I love it when she's paired with a bad boy (*coughDracocough*) But Dan is so sweet and kind that you can't help loving him! I also liked seeing Ginny as a Quidditch player. I imagine that she would like a bit of glamour and fame being the youngest of seven so I love that possibility.
‘Oh, I see how it is,’ he said in an injured tone. ‘My company’s too dull for you. Well, I’m so sorry to have bored you.’ His face was serious, but the twinkle in his eye told Ginny that he was having her on.
‘Absolutely,’ she played along. ‘I’ve been trying to get you to shut up for the past half hour or so, but you just kept going on and on about how horrible the Cannons’ Seeker is.’
That is such a good date line! It's very realistic and it isn't mushy or anything which would've been really a bit weird. People usually don't profess love on a first date so that's another thing that I liked!
Nice job! Very cute, very sweet!
O MY BADNESS. lol, give me a minute, I've got to stop laughing first. XD
Phew! Now that I'm over that, great story Schmergo! I'm a bit bummed that I didn't get to read it right away since I was on vacation, but omg, it's so funny I don't even care!!! I LOVE THIS STORY! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad that you like it! ^_^ I\'m pretty sure you\'ll like the rest of the story more. You\'re also the first one to comment on the \"Oh My Badness.\"
AHHH!!! YAY!!! Omg, Schmergo, this is absolutely hilarious!!! *busts gut laughing* I have waited SO LONG for this chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! So have I! I submitted it, like three weeks ago...
Hey Fresca! This was incredibly sad, but also it was incredibly touching the way Dumbledore loved all those he was forced to kill. It was not really what I expected really, I was thinking that it would be something along the lines of a personal face-off between him and Dumbledore, but as you shown, Dumbledore loves others more than himself and he would willingly sacrifice himself to save the ones he loves as we've seen in HBP right after this scene. The grammar and spelling was immaculate (as always!) and the elements that you incorporate from the books, such as the lines from the cave, make this one shot really enjoyable. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, Allie! I don\'t know why everyone always wants to read and review this story, but I\'m glad that you liked it. :)
*sigh* Such narrow-minded people... I'm really sorry that you've met so much resistance with this story because of that one little thing about homosexuals and such...Then on the other hand I'm a bit more open minded and have little patience for people who make such a big deal about it.
Anyways! I really liked this portrayal of Peter. I never really thought of him as a particularly evil character although he's certainly portrayed that way a lot. You've sometimes got to wonder what pushed him over the edge, but then he could have always been that way like your story suggests.
"And Peter Pettigrew joined the Dark Side because he thought they would win. And he knew that once they had, all those who were not pure would be eradicated with every memory of themselves." This is my favorite part. It sums up what you're trying to convince everyone, that Peter was basically just looking out for himself and his own values. Not Lily or James or anyone else.
All in all- great story! 10/10
Author's Response:
You know, you might view it as a little thing, the homophobia, but it\'s really a large part of the story. It\'s the focus for all of his anger and dislike against the Order. See...in my R/S universe, James and Lily are both aware of the relationship. Peter is not (as far as Remus and Sirius are concerned, anyway) and that leaves him quite out of the loop. There had to be a reason for that. And, since this is a man who isn\'t particularly good at anything, but still considers himself better than Lily (for her being Muggleborn) then it just seemed as a natural progression to me for him to be homophobic
And yeah, that was a bit roundabout. I\'m sorry
Well, I doubt that Peter is this way in JK\'s mind, but there\'s no question here that a certain level of evilness (from our perspective) is required of Peter to have done what he did. Evilness doesn\'t require you to be smart or devious or anything like that-it only needs you to do bad things, no matter how might foul them up in the end
Thanks!
That was so sweet! I liked how you humanized Mr and Mrs. Malfoy on this one, it's very fitting for this setting and while Lucius seems to be a bit aloof (Love that word :P) from Draco he is a father figure so that's another thing that I liked about it... *tries to think of something constructive....*
The few slices of what could be called bread and a bowel of something that resembled a soup that sat next to a glass of darkly-coloured water, however, were hardly items worthy of being digested. Bowel should be bowl... Um, that's it! You can sort of see where each drabble stops which makes it a bit inconsistent, but all in all- an excellent piece of work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, dragonwings. I\'m glad you liked it, especially your comment about Lucius and Narcissa\'s characters. Making these characters a bit more human is a lot of fun.
\"Bowel\" to \"bowl\" *smacks self on forehead* You\'re right, I didn\'t catch that in the editing.
~Megan
*pouts* I haven't talked to you in ages! Bummer about the guidelines, I really loved beta'ing for you!
*huggles*
~Allie
Author's Response: Hey Allie! Long time no... type...
Well I\'m doing great over at TPP! Be sure to check out \'Finding Rhythm\' my newest story. (and don\'t take the beta bit seriously, you\'re still the most fun!)
Author's Response: Hey Allie! Long time no... type...
Well I\'m doing great over at TPP! Be sure to check out \'Finding Rhythm\' my newest story. (and don\'t take the beta bit seriously, you\'re still the most fun!)
Congratulations! *throws confetti* knew you could do it!
Author's Response: Yay!!!
*does happy know-it-all dance* I know how it ends!! :p I couldn't resist! I like Hermione's jasmine scent, did I ever tell you that? It's very unique.
Author's Response: Oh thank you! Actually, I wear jasmine perfume, so that\'s where I got the idea. I just love that smell!
This is so unbelievably awesome, James! Wow, I really had no iea of your awesome poetry skills until now... o_O I really love the line: "all suave all sashay" It really clicks in your mind and it contributes greatly to the feel of the poem. My favorite stanza has to be the one with the bed, and the fruit, its very *giggle* sensual. Really, awesomeness poetry skills!
This is so unbelievably awesome, James! Wow, I really had no iea of your awesome poetry skills until now... o_O I really love the line: "all suave all sashay" It really clicks in your mind and it contributes greatly to the feel of the poem. My favorite stanza has to be the one with the bed, and the fruit, its very *giggle* sensual. Really, awesomeness poetry skills!
Hey Jean! Was clicking 'round one day and re-found this wonderful story--of which I have yet to beta another chapter! Just send it over when you're ready, you know how much I love this fic!
~Allie
Great one-shot! I liked Roxanne she seemed really interesting. I especially liked her Healer background and the way that she and Draco met. It was interesting! Good job, Priz!
~Allie
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Allie!
I enjoyed writing about Roxanne too, she\'s one of my favourite OC\'s, specially because she\'s a Healer ;)
~Priz, member of the MNFF Toaster Trio