Lovely job! You did a great job with Remus's character; your description was great through the octave. The turn is excellent, and the conclusion - He's fee - is perfect. I would only suggest another word for 'more' at the end ; it pops up four times in the last three lines, and although the repetition does work to some degree, I think a different word in that second to last line especially would really make it more meaningful. ('New' perhaps?) Otherwise great job, I really like it - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Remus is one of my favorite characters, so it was fun to write about him. I am fascinated by his backstory and werewolfness (there has got to be a better word for that!), and I\'m so glad you liked the sonnet.

I agree about the \"more.\" I caught that after I had submitted the poem! I think I\'ll give it another look and see if I can change it. \"New\" sounds like a great suggestion, thanks!

Author's Response: Edit: I\'ve changed the penultimate line, and I think it works so well now! Thanks for the suggestion!!

Nice job! You've done a great with the rhythm of the piece; even the lines that continue onto the next flow smoothly when I read it. This sonnet is dark, tragic, and completely unique. What a fascinating take on the Grey Lady! Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I\'m glad the flow worked well, this was probably the hardest piece I\'ve tried to write for MNFF. It was going to be a one shot, but the sonnet form just seemed to suit it better. Anyway, thanks again!

Hi Suzie! You continue to write amazing poetry. =) Great job with the rhythm on this poem, it is so easy to read. You did a really good job with Merope's character, too. In the octave you can feel her despair; in the sestet there is a bit of hope. The title is absolutely lovely! Wonderful job - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you Gina! *hugs* I\'m glad you like it. I was going to write Merope poem for the last challenge, but it didn\'t really work out. The rhythm always take me ages but I think I got there in the end! :) Your sonnet was wonderful, by the way! :D ~Suzie

Fenn! This is absolutely lovely - knowing Julie, this is a perfect story for her. :) You did a great job with Hermione's character in particular, capturing her mood changes from peaceful to purposeful - I really liked that. I loved the pendant, that was a wonderful touch, and the end was perfect! They didn't kiss, but the last line leaves the reader with so much hope. You set up the beginning of their relationship really well here - are you planning to continue? I think you could. Great job, I'm glad I read your story!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hey Gina!

Thanks so much for your sweet review! I\'m so glad to hear that youl liked my story--the ending, too. =) I\'m not planning to continue it, but who knows? Maybe in the distant future when I\'m short on plot bunnies I\'ll come back to it.

Thanks so much! ~Fenn

Hi there!
Great job with the Gauntlet prompts, I bet this was so fun to write. You did lovely with Tonks' character, I especially enjoyed seeing her meet her loved ones. I also liked the water room, it reminded me of Alice in Wonderland for some reason.. And of course, it's always neat to see an original character like Declan return! Good luck with the challenge!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for a great review! I had a great time writing this, and when I found out it was in the DOM I HAD to include Declan. :) I work him into almost every story I can. hehe. Cyns

Nice missing moment! It seems very plausible to think these two spoke before the scene in Spinner's End, and you did a good job especially at showing Snape's anguish at agreeing to what Dumbledore asked of him. Actually, I don't see a lot of discrepancy in linking this with your other story: Snape simply agrees that Dumbledore is expendable here, which could be interpreted very vaguely. Occlumency would work too. Good luck as you continue with this series of stories!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: I\'m glad you found it plausible and especially glad that you thought I did a good job showing Snape\'s anguish *beams* Good point on the lack of discrepancy -- thanks! And, of course, thanks for the luck as well!

Hi Laura!
Nice job! I liked seeing this first meeting between Rodolphus and Bellatrix. You did a great job of bringing out both of their characters. Good idea to put Bellatrix into Ravenclaw; she seemed both bitter and pleased about it, which was very believable. I especially liked reading Rodolphus's thoughts and seeing him gain some confidence by the end of his encounter with Bellatrix. It is interesting to think he was seduced more by her than by the Dark Lord. So what happens next? How do they end up together??
Good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)

HI there!
Sorry it took me so long to leave a review, but I just finished my own and have finally gotten around to reading your finished product.
Wonderful job! I think this turned out really well - the rhythm flows nicely and the rhymes don't ever seem forced. The turn is *great*, one of the best turns I've read in the entries so far. It really helps define the couple you are referring to. I definitely think it fits Lucius and Narcissa, and I think it could apply to their son as well.
Again - great job, and good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hey Gina! I\'m glad you like it! Thanks so much for all your beta help! Best of luck to you as well!

Nice job with young Draco, Suzie! Was that the diary of Tom Riddle at the beginning? With the way his father yelled at him and hit him, no wonder Draco hates books - and Hermione - in your brief wrap up at the end. Good explanation and connection. Now - I wonder if he knew the precious diary from his childhood had been given to Ginny Weasley, and what he would think of that??
*whistles innocently*
You are a very talented writer!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review Gina! *huggles*

Yes, it was the diary. :) This was originally an overlong drabble for a Slyth challenge where the prompt was for a character to come in contact with a horcrux. :)

Hmm hmm.. I hadn\'t thought about the Ginny connection... *strokes chin* hehe Thanks for all the compliments! *hugs again*

~Suzie <3

That is so sad! Nice job on the rhyme and rhythm. I also really liked the image of Ginny as Harry's northern star. Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)