Ooooh, nice! I love the mystery. I already have a guess about who it is. :) And what's really interesting is that while some people might view Peter as timid, fearful, and whiny, he was in fact the only one with his head on straight and concerned about what might happen. And then he was right, and did the best he could about it. Loving Peter!!
Hope Sirius is okay, too. ;) ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Were you right about the mystery man. No one else got it... well, they didn't say. Sirius will recover ... ~Carole~

I still love your Peter. I almost wonder if you are setting things up for after graduation?
And there is the barman. . . Poor, poor James.
Okay, the other thing I've noticed along with the more focused POV is that things don't seem as rushed as the early chapters. I feel like I'm really into the story now and can enjoy it unfolding. Great development! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Mmm, Peter. Well, he can't suddenly have decided to betray them, it must have been a growing thing. My feeling really is that Lily changes the dynamic so much between the four of them, but other things contribute as well. So many theories - so little time - ha ha - ~Carole~

I'm all caught up with reading - and totally caught up with the story! The development of your writing is amazing. The last two chapters in particular just read so differently. And yet the characters were there from the beginning, which is the best part. I love them. Your canon characters are so engaging, and your original characters are so fleshed out. The dialogue is so fun and snappy - I smile to myself every time I see one of those insults we've chatted about, lol. Right now I feel very bad for James. I love what you are doing with his character, from the captaincy to Lily.
I also thought the bit with Peter and Snape was fascinating, in part because I wrote a challenge piece once in which Peter was bitter about his friends and got snared by Snape. I totally think it could've happened! I look forward to seeing where that goes.
I have my suspicions about Rich, especially that lead he was following up on. The use of the word glamour also jumped out at me. Not sure what you are setting up, but it's neat to try to pick up on clues and think about where they might lead, even if they lead nowhere.
I remember a FB update about James and Sonia so that will be interesting. ;)
Really lovely, fun story. I'm enjoying it tremendously and am glad I finally read it. Good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you for all your wonderful reviews, Gina. You've picked up on so many bits, and made me think about the whole story with refreshed eyes. Snape/Peter ... mmm, no not slashy, just ... Snape was a good manipulator, wasn't he? ~Carole~ PS - new chapter should be up very very soon.

Shoot, I forgot to mention Peter. I can't write him worth a damn, but you gave him a brilliant part here. I loved that even his friends were impressed with him, lol! It's so easy to forget who he must have been at Hogwarts based on the ugly person we meet during the trio's years. Great job with him! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ah, credit to Terri here who kept telling me that I had to make him more likeable and worthy of being a Marauder. Thanks again ~Carole~

I love the way you write wizards in the Muggle world, like your Dancing Queen story! Very good! And Sirius got played - ha! But the best - and most heartbreaking - was seeing what Sirius had to deal with at home. I liked the glimpse of a relationship with his brother, but his mother sure is scary. No wonder he ran away! Very well done! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm particulalrly fond of this chapter because I'd had it in mind for a long time and nearly wrote it as a oneshot. But it suited the story and I liked the aspect of Sirius getting drunk in a London park - LOL. Thanks for reviewing. ~Carole~

Wow, another fantastic poem! I tend to favor poems that rhyme, but this is one of the best free verse poems I have read here. I love love love the form, and how you maintainted and developed it through each section/season. Your word choice is wonderful, and the ending is sad and beautiful. I am so impressed! Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Wow, really? ThankyoU! Yeah, I tend to prefer to read rhyming poems, but writing free verse (I feel) leaves your options a lot more open. Glad you liked it!

Hi Ritta! So this is the Ravenclaw Story of the Week! Congrats! You should totally have more reviews, because it's a lovely story. I've said it before and I'll say it again: you *get* Draco. You always write him exceptionally well. I also loved, loved, loved how you wrote all the other Hufflepuffs. I think of all the houses, Hufflepuff is probably the only one who could have accepted Draco if he hadn't been Slytherin, and the way you characterized them made that happen and made it all very believable. You must have done a lot of research for this, wow! I liked the structure and pacing of this piece, and since it's part of *Harry Potter's* story, I liked how you included Draco's interaction with Harry in it as well. Luna's appearance for the title was spot-on. The only suggestion I would make would be to work on punctuation, as I did notice some missing commas throughout. And of course, you could totally continue it as the idea of a Hufflepuff!Draco is really fascinating, and you've presented it so well. I want to know if he still joins the Death Eaters?? Great job, dear! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review, Gina! XD I'm glad you still think I get Draco. This is one of the few stories for which I've done a lot of research. I reread SS and took notes about the Hufflepuffs and all the major events in the book. It drove me crazy, but I was determined to make it believable, I'm glad it shows. =]

Nice poem! I love the idea of the repeating line, it works great. The lines in between were good as well but a few of them were a bit longer than others and thew the rhythm off. I missed the rhyme in the last two of these - chance and fate - so I'd suggest retooling the end a bit, just to clean it up. I love the last two lines, though, so I'd just tweak the ones before them, if that makes sense. And the reviewer who suggested turning this into a one-shot had a great idea! Good luck with your writing, poetry or prose! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I agree that the rhythm was a bit funky, and I'll go back and clean it up a bit. And the rhyme with fate is mistake in the penultimate stanza. Chance had no rhyme. :) And I will definitely think about turning this into a one-shot- when I have the time and the muse. Thank you for the review! ~M_W

Nice job! I really liked your other Peter story so when you mentioned this in your Dueling Thread I thought I'd read it too. I love what you do with Peter. You captured his voice very well. You made him way more than the snivelling character we meet later on. I liked his relationship with him mom, and I LOVED reading his transformation for the first time. Great reactions - his friends didn't bat an eye but he was disappointed. Perfect.
I liked the subtle switch to the nicknames after they could all transform. Nice touch.
Meeting Regulus was also a great touch - have you written anything else with him?
And have you written anything about how the Maruaders found out about Remus? Because I would read that in a second! :)
More than anything, though, this story leaves me wanting more, sort of like your other one. The ending does seem a bit abrupt - was losing the map the beginning of the end? It wasn't clear why it ended with that scene, which was part of the reason I wanted to keep reading. I really want to know what happens in between this story and the challenge entry you wrote!
You are very talented and I really enjoy reading your stories.
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Gina. Peter is a bit of a WIP for me, which is probably why it ended a bit abruptly. I was thinking that him losing the map wasn't just where it began to fall apart, but also started showing the differences between James and Sirius, because James is clearly more mature at this stage and less likely to blame Peter.

Oh stop giving me plot bunnies, Remus year two ... eek ... *shoves to back of mind*. Regulus, hmmm, actually I haven't thought of much about him - not sure why. Thanks again. ~Carole~

That was very sweet! You write Ron and Hermione very well, and make Rose/Scorpius sound intriguing. Nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina! I definitely think Ron and Hermione complement each other and as a couple will always be sexy, no matter how that thought grosses their kids (or some readers, lol) out.