Aww, that was cute! The ending is kind of sad, but I couldn't help laughing. I always love stories where wizards are confused about Muggle technology.
What I found really unique about this was the way the words were slightly changed to fit the rhyming scheme. It's so cute. Good job :)
~ Melodie
Author's Response: Hey Melodie! Thanks for reviewing, and I\'m really glad you liked my poem! =))
Yeah, I agree about the \"kind of sad\"-ness.... Being a Squib is pretty depressing, but I couldn\'t help myself. =P
Anyways, I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
Fenn
I love your poems, and this one was no exception. The rhyming was cute and it was funny in general. It also seems like the kind of idea Hermione would have... Good job!
~ Melodie
Author's Response: Melodie! *tackles*
I\'m glad you like my poem--thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I think it\'s a really Hermione-ish idea too--I got the idea from Hermione\'s suggestion to have a \"sponsored scrub of the Gryffindor Tower\" in book Five.
Thank you so much for your review! ~Fenn
Woohoo! I'm so glad there's a sequel to the Dark Lord's Blog. I know I didn't review it, but that's because I read it on CoS instead...
Anyway, I think you're doing a fantastic job. I like the analogies. You never seem to run out of them! I also love how you manage to describe a setting in such detail using only jokes. I have no concrit because, quite frankly, there's nothing to criticize. Sorry.
Please update soon!
~ Melodie
PS: Happy Birthday! I don't know when you turned 15, but it says on your author's page that it was recent...
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you like this story, because I have a little bit TOO much fun writing it. I turned 15 on April 14th.
A modern-day twist to this classic wish leaves Peeves the Poltergeist with much more than he bargained for. Thrown suddenly into life as an eleven-year-old boy, the former ghost must live in Hogwarts as a first-year student. From some good old-fashioned Filch baiting to a run-in with the giant squid, our hero has a whole host of challenges awaiting him--and the only person he can rely on for help is a very ill-tempered Blue Fairy...
Written by FenrirG of Ravenclaw for the "What You Wish For" prompt of the Spring Challenge.
OMG!!! Snape is the fairy!!! I'm so excited. I had no idea this fic would be hilarious to the point of making me wake up everyone in the house by laughing so hard (though I knew that with your talent as a writer it would be fantastic). All I can say is congratulations, you've done it again.
~ Melodie
PS: Is that your final wish? That made em think of the show who wants to be a millionaire. I don't know if you've seen it...
Author's Response: Melodie!
Aww, your sweet review made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. *huggles* I\'m so glad you liked it that much--I wasn\'t sure if it would be funny, but I\'m delighted that you think it is. =)))
Thanks so much, Melodie!
Cheers, Fenn
PS-I was wondering if anyone would catch that! I put it in on purpose. =P *high five* Good catch!
Originally written for Julie/myownmuggle for the Ravenclaw Spring Fic Exchange. Charlie/Hermione. A big thank you to Abigail/joybell423 for beta-ing this for me!
Ooh, very good!
Hehe, I'm glad you write so many stories, because they're all amazing. The best part about this one was that you took things SLOWLY instead of having them randomly snog as soon as they met. It made the ship, which I would never have expected before reading this, seem more believable.
Another great thing was the setting. I mean it was unbelievably well described. I felt like I was actually there. I've sad it before, but I'll said it again: You definitely have a talent for describing places.
Let's see, what can I do in the way of actually helpful concrit? Um... well at the beginning Charlie seemed just the tiniest bit out of character to me. I know he loves dragons, but when we saw him in GoF he didn't seem like the kind of person who would tell stories ll day long. But then that's sort of just my opinion...
What can I say? It was wonderful. Keep writing (and update Fenrir soon, I'm dying of anticipation).
Cheers :)
~ Melodie
Author's Response: Hey Melodie!
Thanks so much for your wonderful, thoughtful review! *warm fuzziness* I\'m so glad that you like my story (and don\'t mind the slow pace!) and that you think that the ship was believable. =) And you flatter me too much--but I\'m thrilled you like the description!
Thanks for the concrit--I see what you mean. =) However, I\'ll try to cover for myself and say that... erm, never mind, I don\'t have any excuses! *giggles* But thank you, I\'ll keep that in mind!
Thanks again! ~Fenn
PS-Ahh, Fenrir... It\'ll probably be a while until the next update due to the Spring Challenge and the Gauntlet, but I\'ll do my best!
I'm really enjoying this story so far and I hope you'll write more soon! It reads easily and flows well, and you have excellent grammar/spelling/etc.
Story-wise I think you've done a really good job showing us Teddy's personality, which is impressive after just two chapters. He reminds me a lot of Harry, which is exactly how I thought he should be. What I really like about the whole story is that it's expressing a bunch of things floating around in my head about the next-generation.
Overall I think my favorite part was the article by Rita Skeeter at the beginning of chapter 1. It was so Rita Skeeter!
My only advice is proof-reading, which helps weed out typos and little mistakes. Other than that, great job. Keep writing!
~ Mel
Hey! You used to beta for me, I don't know if you remember. I feel kinda bad for giving up that story, but anyway... I really enjoyed this spoof, and I actually caught myself singing The Worst Child In London in the middle of a social studies test this morning (people stared)...
I just wanted to say that I love everything you write, and this one definitely goes in my top three favorites. Number one, of course, being the Dark Lord's Blog (which, I'm proud to say, I first had the privilege of reading in its original form on the Spoof Riddle Diary Entries thread on CoS... ah those were the days!). I can't wait to read your next spoof. I would suggest doing either My Fair Lady or Chicago. There are some pretty interesting possibilities there.
Keep writing!
~ Mel
Author's Response: Ooh, I most definitely remember you! ANd it\'s absolutely awesome that you\'d sing one of my songs in school... actually I\'ve don that myself. Someone set me singing my Prima Donna spoof as her ringtone... and I sounded terrible, by the way. I love \"My Fair Lady,\" but I can\'t say I\'ve ever seen/heard Chicago... I might want to check that out.
This was a whole lot of fun to read! I love when authors explore minor characters instead of the ones so well established by Jo already, since there's more room to interpret characterization. This story has a a fun Oscar Wilde-ish feel in parts (especially dialogue and some of Cadogan's internal musings) that made me laugh out loud. And I love the irony of the final line. Really great stuff! On an unrelated note I also tip my hat to you for holding up against the facebook monster. I thought I was the only one... Cheers :)
Author's Response: Oscar Wilde, eh? A more direct influence was probably G.M. Fraser's Flashman, although (by contrast) Cadogan really isn't a bad person. Thanks for reviewing.