That was SO good! I love the plot... *chuckles at the Title* I love the name, Rick. dick, yup. I really like how everything is coming into play so far. Very good! I'm SO going to the next chapter right now! I love it! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad you liked it so much --especially the title! Thanks again for the review.

Suzie, I just adore your poetry, dear. I loved this, and keep up the great work. I especially liked this line:

My love’s unconditional,
You’re my Harry, my life.

I loved this, and keep up the great work.

~Lindsey :)



Author's Response: Aww thanks Lindsey! :D This is one of my earlier poems but I\'m glad you like it! *hugs*

Whoa.

Schmergo...Whoa.

I will have to say that this was a completely AWESOME gauntlet submission. It blew my socks off. You wrote in such detail; it was amazing.

I love the way that you put the setting and all of the things in it in such great detail. You are an amazing writer, Schmergo.

I admire the way that you portrayed Theo and November. THey are very good characters, and I really like in how you wrote the pair.

The plot is just...awesome. I can't say that enough. I have never read a Gauntlet submission before, and I am now proud to say that I have read yours. The plot - The Dark Mark, Theo and November, The Murder, The Boggart, the poem/riddle...You truly wrote this fic as if it was your own; I've never seen a fic written in this much detail and have the emotional traits that you did. Kudos to you. :)

With that, Voldemort rolls up my sleeve, revealing my thin, pale forearm. I notice vaguely that the hairs on my arm are standing on end as he grips it, pressing it with a long, spindly finger. He waves his wand above my arm as he presses it, and an excruciating pain shoots through my skin, like hundreds of tiny needles.

This is how I have always imagined how the Dark Mark is etched onto the Death Eaters skin. You did a great job in portraying that.

I really can't find anything to "criticize" for my constructive criticism thing I got going on for this story. You had amazing betas, I see, and there were no mistakes that I saw. Perfect-o! :)

The boggarts that Theo and November had; they were so creative! Well, you know what I mean. It wound in so well with your story - brilliant.

Even though that this was meant to be a "serious" fic, you (of course, because you're hilarious) put in some humor. *laughs at the Aaron Carter comment* There were a few parts in this story that gave me chills from how serious and good you wrote it, when others had me giggling.

We’re both ending a page in our lives and starting over on a clean sheet of paper. We’re just two dead people on the road together, and inexplicably, we’re happy.

A truly wonderful ending. You left the readers guessing at what will happen next, yet you gave them hope in doing so. A truly wonderfully-written last two-sentences, and your style of writing astonishing.

A truly amazing fic, (LOL, I don't know how many times I've said that) but it's true. It's quite different than the Dark Lord's Blog (Hilarious, by the way), and you did a great transition from Humor to the Angst you needed to have in this story.

Fantastic. I'm adding this to my favorites list!! Great job, Schmergo. I'll be reading even more of your stories now...*laughs maniacally*

Thanks for the great read!

~Lindsey :)


Author's Response: That was such a marvelously detailed and positive review that it made me smile at the computer screen (which looked kind of stupid, but oh well.) I\'m so very glad that you liked it, because I personally thought that this was one of my better stories, but it hasn\'t gotten as much attention as my others. Thank you! :)

Oooh! Hannah! I love the cliffie! Very interesting so far! I'm not gonna leave a long review.. yet! LOL, *laughs maniacally*. I'm just kidding.
Very good so far and i'm going to the next chapter now!! Very beautifully written!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Hi, Lindsey! Thanks for your review. :-) Glad you liked it. ::big smile::

Ooohh again! Hannah, you must update soon, this is soooo getting good.

""They had a thing, you know?" Sirius said, wiggling his eyebrows."

"James grinned. "I like 'em feisty." Sirius giggled." LOL. I actually laughed out loud at this!

Well... i've just given you two reviews.. can you write even faster? J/K.

This was a very good plot line, i've never thought of anything like this! It's very creative, yet mysterious!

I want Lily/ oops should i say Conner, to meet Draco Malfoy... maybe.. nah i dunno.

I hope you liked my review, (i know you like, 'scuse me, LOVE getting them!)

Please update soon and i heard about your fic from you!

~Lindsey :) LOL, your fellow insomniac.

Author's Response: Hahahhahhahahaha. Thanks! And Lily\'s not Conner - she\'s Erin! It\'s so confusing to write, though. I\'ll start writing Erin when I want to write Lily and Lily when I want to write Erin. Arghh! And they might meet Draco - I haven\'t decided who I want to keep in the sotry and who I want to kick out. But anyway, thank you for both of your lovely reviews!

Oooh Cliffie! Very good, you MUST update soon! Once again, i love your ideas, I'm so wondering what is going to happen with Ron and Hermione...*tear*
Loved it!

Author's Response: Chapter 3 is in the queue. Thanks for the great comments! Heh heh heh, cliffie time!

This was quite cute, Michelle! The gnomes being put into play was portrayed really great! You have a great knack for writing poetry! I wish I could. Very cute poem, girl!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Lindsey! *Squishes* Thank you! Wait a second....is this for the Badgeer Review Circle? *Checks* I knew it! *Shrugs* Well, I love reviews all the same! Thanks for the Lovely review, my Lovely Beta and fellow Insomniac, Hufflepuff, and a bunch of other thing that we have ion common! -Gin

The forest is restless tonight. The wind blows fiercely, making the pine trees bend and creak in a rhythmic pattern. The cold air brushes past a gloomy cavern, making a furry tail protruding from inside blow from one side of the rocky ground to the other.

Great start. You gave very descriptive sentences, allowing the reader to already immerse themselves in your fic.

Actually the detailing throughout the first chapter of this fic was marvelous. You did a great job in letting us, the readers, know who you were talking about, and you did a great job of it.

Lupin. A great choice to write about, period. Also, a great choice for this particular style of writing and fic as well, too. You described the parts and physical appearances of the werewolves perfectly. You did a great job at that.

I really didn't see any huge problems, yet I saw a few punctuation problems. You tended to overuse the commas (I do that a lot, so no worries). I'm totally not criticizing, I'm just trying help! :)

The emotional aspects of the mother are quite good, actually. It would be apparent that any mother would go all sad in front of their child that will be leaving for a year.

When you say that Remus put his accessories down to hug his father, that was so sweet! We know how Remus is.. just a poor, misunderstood soul; who just happens to be a werewolf.

Remus gave his parents a final nod and a grin, faced the barrier between platforms nine and ten, and ran directly towards it. He disappeared instantly through the brick, luggage and all.

I loved the ending. If it were still the first and only chapter, I would have been like, "Please, continue. Now!" I am now wondering what you have in store for the reader sin your fic, now.

You used great adjectives throughout the fic. You must be an amazing writer, and have wonderful betas.

I really liked this fic. I haven't read any fics yet, as to where it comes from Lupin's POV, and from where the story is being told mainly about him.

I definitely want to read the second chapter... but I will have to come back later. I'm looking forward to it, but, until then, my favorites list awaits!

Thanks for the great read!

Your new Hufflepuff buddy, ~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Wow. Never in the history of this story has there been as lovely a review as this. I am floored. I can\'t quite remember at the moment where I learned it, but someone taught me not to be afraid of going into deep details. That really caught on to me, and I have tried to utilize detail in my writing carefully, but not to the point of writers like Tolkien (that kind of detail is over-the-top in my opinion). Thanks for the compliment on the detail, I was a little worried the tone I set didn\'t sound sophisticated and interesting enough, but you\'re vote of confidence has made me feel better. Ah yes, dear, sweet Remus Lupin. He\'s my favorite character of the entire series, and I find it ironically tragic that he does not have a huge fan base, especially compared to fellow Marauders James and Sirius. When I first wrote this story, I had found no stories specifically focusing on Remus\' point of view, which really disappointed me. Even today it\'s hard to find well-written fics focused on him. It took me quite a long time to figure out just what I wanted to write about regarding Remus, but luckily I found what I was looking for. Commas! Yay for comma overuse! Just kidding. I\'ll have to check for those. Thanks for pointing that out. I don\'t mind at all. In fact, that\'s quite helpful of you. I know I use them way too much. Always have once I learned of their purpose. I\'m glad you picked up on those little emotions throughout the story. I was hoping they sounded real enough. I was just trying to think of the ways I interact, and have interacted in the past, with my parents. Whenever one injects parts of their life into his or her writing, it really improves it wouldn\'t you say? I\'m glad you\'re eager to read more. I was hoping that was the feeling the reader would get. Oddly enough, I had intended to end this chapter with the beginning or Remus\' dream and chapter two begin with him stumbling onto the Platform. However, MuggleNet required more words for chapter one than I had, so I just smashed the two together! Thanks for the compliments. I certainly hope I\'m a good writer. I\'m constantly developing original ideas in my mind, but until they fully form themselves I\'ll keep to fan fiction for awhile. I\'m very honored that you added me to your favorite stories/authors after reading only the first chapter. That\'s extremely kind of you, and all I can say again is that I am speechless! Thanks again for this spectacular review, my new friend!

That was great! Wow, I can't do that, you're talented!! Great job, and I hope you win!

Author's Response: Thanks! :D I\'m glad you liked it. Good luck to you too if you enter :)

Oh! That was cute! Great work!

Author's Response: Thanks! :]