I'm intrigued. It was a bit sketchy at some points, but it was still worth the read. Update soon.

Author's Response: Glad it was worth the read

Yep, I'm still reading. I must say, as a person who had NEVER read a General fic, I quite like this one. I'd like to beta for you, just send me your third chapter.

Great, way to leave the reader wanting more. This was an interesting concept, and I like how you cut right to the chase. I want more. Right now. Please update soon.

Wow, just wow. I'm very surprised that you haven't gotten any reviews for this because it's absolutely amazing! I even got a bit teary at the part with Harry's death, I'm so glad that it wasn't real. Update ASAP!

Author's Response: Thank you soooo much for your review! This is a re-post because my story got deleted before so that could be why there aren't a lot of reviews! I hope to get a lot more...keep reading! Thanks again!

I admit, I don't usually read dark fics, much less leave reviews for them, but this echoed the thoughts of a confused girl during war so well, I couldn't pass up the oportunity. As a self-proclaimed Ginny-hater, I clicked on this fic thinking that it would be pretty much like all of the other Ginny fics; missing Harry and feeling mildly sorry for herself. Needless to say, I was happily surprised when I read this. You protrayed Ginny as someone experiencing the war differently than I have ever seen her protrayed; kudos to that. The line But what took away our happiness? You-Know-who? The Death Eaters? Murder? Ourselves? was one that really made me stop and think [something that doesn't happen in many fics.] However, I did have to read this twice, just to make sure that I completely understood what was being said. But I had to agree with her in the end, or give in, whatever you want to all it. What if none of them came back? What if they…died? But they would go down fighting, I guess. Something about it just didn't sit right with me. I was also a bit iffy about the many elipses used in the fic, but after my second reading, I realized that without them, it wouldn't be the same. They seemed to make Ginny seem more like a person we could all relate to, in that her train of thought was getting a bit jumbled, just like ours can from time to time. All around, I really enjoyed this, even if Ginny was the main character [and that's saying something.] Good job!

Woah. What a way to start your fic with a bang! Other than your intriguing summary, your first two or three sentences drew me in right away and I found that couldn't take my eyes off of the page. I wanted to know exactly just what had happened to Harry and what he was going to do about it. I could imagine what he was doing, kudos for that!

There were, however, a few things that I had to read over again, just so they would make sense. '. . . dreams Harry were having these days. . .', for example, threw me off a bit. The word 'were' makes the sentence seem awkward. Try replacing it with the word 'was,' and it'll flow better. This impossible course of action was the only way he could see of overcoming the next six months, or year if he was lucky, which didn’t end with the funeral of Harry Potter. That sentence confused me a lot. I had to read it a good three or four times before the meaning became clearer, and even now, I'm not sure what you meant to say here. Are you talking about how, if he could change the future, things would be easier for him, or is he thinking that he task seems impossible? I caught one spelling mistake, probably just a typo. '. . . suprised that anyone else would have reason to be awake. . .' the word suprised should be surprised. The only other sentence that threw me a bit was this one, Just then, Ron gave an almighty snore, similar to that of a hippo in labour (recalling the program on the Discovery Channel he had seen in Privet Drive…before Uncle Vernon had yelled at him for watching ‘un-educational’ pig-swill…he then changed the channel to ‘One hundred ways to make coal shinier’ – Number One: Cover it in glue, Number Two: Replace them with plums…). It was just a little too long, for my taste. Perhaps you could take the information in the brackets, trim it a bit [so it's not as run-on], and somehow combine it into the sentence. For example, 'Just then, Ron gave a mighty snore, similar to the cry of a hippo in labour. Harry chuckled, recalling a program about hippos that he had seen while he was staying at Privet Drive.' Just a small suggestion.

The reality of his dreams were more strikingly vivid than those he had about Voldemort, but he also knew that they couldn’t be true; since as far as he could remember, he hadn’t been murdered by Voldemort anytime in the recent past. This line made me chuckle. It really made me think of something that could have been in the series, though it didn't sound like something that JKR would write. You managed to keep the style yours, while still writing something that rang true to the novels.

Just like you started the chapter, you finished it with a bang. Hermione's declaration of the battle coming closer to Hogwarts was something that I definitely didn't see coming. Also, A sense of dread washed over him, as he realised that the inevitable Battle for Hogwarts was inching ever close. was a great way to end the chapter, and it left me wanting more.

Excellent work. I look forward to reading more of this fic in the future.

Author's Response: Hello, what an intriguing name - sounds like a kind of cat-food which has shards of metal in it. ..anywho, okay: the sentence about the funeral for Harry Potter - you're right that it doesn't flow greatly but I still thinks it makes sense...basically he was saying that if he had the power to change the future then he would be able to avert his inevitable death. Oh, and thanks I'll change the surprised typo (my spelling is usually perfect, but that's one mistake I've made since I was 5 - I like my spelling better though =) Thanks for your kind words; You must read past the first chapter coz that's the worst chapter, and it gets much better later! Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak!!

I have to admit -- your fic made me smile. It was a very good way to begin your fiction, though it did seem a bit familiar [for lack of a better word]. I really hope that this doesn't turn out to be like many other L/J fics, as I enjoyed it quite a lot. The first line drew me in -- I could picture Lily on the Platform, looking for her friends -- picturing scenes in my head is a very good thing for me when I'm reading, kudos to that.

I just have a few things to nit-pick; I'm a picky person. In the very first paragraph, there was a misspelling of Carmen's name. Now, I'm not sure if you meant to say Carman or Carmen, but you should pick one. Also, don't forget that Head Boy and Head Girl should always be capitalized, even if the words aren't at the beginning of a sentence. The same goes for the word Prefect. I also caught a few minor grammar blips, such as no punctuation at the end of one sentence, or no comma in front of someone's name when they're being spoken to [“- hey, Lils!”], but it was nothing major.

I like how you're subtly developing your characters. There were no long descriptions of Lily and her friends [which is the case in many Lily/James fictions]. I also like how Carmen and Sarah's personalities aren't outshining Lily's right away, which is another thing that I see in many L/J fics. Though you haven't fully developed them [and I really hope that you do, they seem very interesting], I still get a feel of their personalities. Many authors tend to create female versions of Remus and Sirius, and then pair them off with the Marauders. I caught a little hint about Sarah's romantic future, and I was delightfully surprised that I didn't see Remus of Sirius. Often times, authors come right out and make their OCs have dazzling personalities, and they sort of shunt Lily off to the side as the 'stuck-up' one. I didn't see you do this at all. Thank you for that. Carmen seemed a bit strong minded, but then again, so did Lily and Sarah. I like that you didn't stereotype each girl's personality [the loud one, the shy one, etc.] Great work!

I usually don't read fluff -- I'm much more of a dark romance kind of gal, but like I said before, I was delightfully surprised. I look forward to reading more in the future.

Author's Response: Thank you! I really want to make my fic different from others of the same genre, but it can be difficult! I didn't realise I had spelled them differently - thanks I will try to correct them. Carmen and Sarah will come into the story a lot maore as it progresses. Thanks for your review!