11/19/10
" Drastic times require drastic measures. "
Hello there, this is the biography of a very boring bookworm named Jane who has a secret fondness for chocolates and Lipton tea. She does not like coffee and can't think of a reason for people to be so dependent on caffeine. Her character is most like Luna Lovegood and she respects Severus Snape as a professor. Despite what others might think, she likes dark/angsty stories which have a sliver of romance in them.
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Snowflakes by The_Dream_Team
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: And there he was. The one boy she could not stand. His messy, jet black hair was ruffled and untidy and his glasses were sitting crooked on his nose. James Potter was here. With Lily. And all her Muggle friends. At a Muggle ski resort. Could things possibly be worse? Oh yeah, Sirius Black is there, too.
Date: 01/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1:The Christophe Brazier Lodge
Wonderful beginning. I'm just starting to read the story and I absolutely love the contrast between the characters of the four friends. It almost reminded me of the friends I had back in high school.
Author's Response: Wow, that's awesome! I'm glad you like the friends :) I really like them, too. thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: 01/30/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 The Hot Tub
The boys' interaction with Lily was really funny. Jill and Cassie's badgering of Lily for more information was also rather hilarious. Nice work there.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think it's funny! I really like slipping jokes in, even in the serious moments later on. I'm happy to have a new reader! Thanks for taking the time to review :)
The Difference You Made by Padfoot Patronus
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: All accomplished men like Dad share something in common – they are looked down, degraded, criticised for everything they say or do, right or wrong, and they take all of that in, patiently, uncharacteristically. Somewhere in those decades, the same society gives up on them, awards them with a pedestal of hero-ship and an immunity from all things used to roughen them up in a past life. People like Dad never again stand on the common ground like the rest of us.
Albus Potter reflects over past and present upon his father’s death. My impression of Harry Potter in later years – a hero of sort and so much more.
Date: 04/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I have never read a fic describing the Harry Potter's death from the perspective of his children. And from this POV, I can understand the way everyone views him as a hero.
Utterly touching. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thank you, Jane! Glad you liked it :)
Becoming Rita by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Rita Skeeter is an infamous journalist whose "savage quill has punctured many inflated reputations." But was she always like the annoying pest who Harry knows? What about her story? How did she become the Rita Skeeter we all love to hate?
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff House writing for the Untold Story Challenge. It won the challenge, and has been nominated recently for a QSQ in Best General category. :D
Thanks to Fresca (Colores) for betaing! You really helped me give the story a coherent whole. And to Carole (Equinox Chick) too, for the “revenge against the ex” tip. :D
DISCLAIMER: All characters and premises belong to J.K.Rowling. However, the Corner brothers, Simon Rosier and the Thorntons are mine. ;)
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Becoming Rita
Finally, here’s a story on Rita. I have always wondered what happened to her and how it resulted in her eventual personality.
And oh my, the first few paragraphs actually made me sympathise Rita- something which I had never thought I would do, considering how unfeeling she is (in my opinion). I guess it’s probable that Rita had an unhappy past. Her articles were probably a way to attract and seek attention for herself.
And let’s me just say this, I absolutely love the interaction between Nathan and Rita- especially during the confession part. The characterisation was done well. The OCs like Nathan and Henry were done convincingly enough.
Well, after reading this story, I have a totally different impression of Rita.
Perhaps it’s time for everyone to pay attention to all these minor characters :)
-princessbipolar
Author's Response: hello!
All for All by HermitKnut
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: In the fight against He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, Harry will either gain everything - or lose everything. This is life - to gain all, one must first risk all. Alternate sequel to Half-Blood Prince, twelve chapters.
Date: 04/20/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I love the way you laid the scene at the beginning. It was vivid and I could totally just imagine the setting itself. And your ending was really… indescribable. I really like the starting and ending of the story. Well-done with the story!
Jane
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'm glad that you enjoyed it so much. Chapter four has been submitted, so hopefully it'll be up soon. Thanks again!
HK
Changing Faces by coolh5000
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Hermione knows Draco Malfoy - he is arrogant, mean and has been nothing but hurtful towards her ever since the first time they met. Called to testify at his trial, however, she sees something other than hatred in the face of her old nemesis and begins to wonder if there is something she has been missing all along.
Date: 12/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Well frankly, I really enjoy reading Draco/Hermione stories- particularly in this case.
I like the way you describe Hermione's tangled inner feelings and thoughts and also your additional descriptions of the court room which was done convincingly enough.
The part describing Hermione's heightened awareness of Draco was also extremely well-written.
The overall pace of the story is extremely well-paced and the different parts of the plot flows rather smoothly.
That's all. Keep on writing !
-Jane (princessbipolar)
-Signed the Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
If Only I Could Make You Mine by Inclination
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: "Sirius is slipping, Remus thinks, and it doesn't matter how hard he tries to hold him back, in the end it's no use." Remus/Sirius, written for the LiveJournal community 64damn prompts, for prompt #55, Landslide.
Date: 01/16/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
A very short yet emotional piece. I really love the way you described Sirius as if he was a '' broken shell '' that was devoid of any life. This quiet interaction between Sirius and Remus was very touching. Though it's a short piece, you definitely captured the entire mood of the story well.
Keep on writing !
The Longest Walk of Her Life by charlottetrips
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Today is my wedding day. It should have been the happiest day of my life. It would have been, if only I was getting married to the right man. A Dramione story. Sequel now up "One Second Can Be A Lifetime"
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Longest Walk of Her Life
Nice description of the wedding scene-especially the way Hermione notices the details of the people standing by the aisle.The ending was so unexpected and romantic. It would be nice if you continue the story.
Author's Response: I did continue it!!! YAY!! *Smattering Applause* It's called "One Second Can Be A Lifetime"!! Well I/P
Forever Entwined by lucca4
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
From the first time Rose Weasley saw Scorpius Malfoy on the Hogwarts Express, she knew they were fated to be enemies. At least, that was the plan. But as the years went on, she found that it was easier said than done. The gap between who she was and who her family wanted her to be was always widening. Her life becomes a tangled web of mistakes and regrets as she finds herself drawn to the one boy she was told to hate, until finally she makes a choice. A choice that might have just lost her the only one who had always been there for her…
Date: 12/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Forever Entwined
Oh my, that was such a sweet story.
Personally, I like the way you split the parts of the story into individual years. It also makes the story much more smoother. Furthermore, I can see the changes of Rose's character and attitude towards Scorpius much more easily.
The awkward relationship and date between Robert and Rose was also described perfectly.
Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for taking the time to review! I'm glad you liked the format of the story, I was worried it would be too choppy for some people :). Haha, and I'm glad you liked the part about Robert, that was really fun to write. Thanks again for reviewing! xx Ariana
Date: 12/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Forever Entwined
Oh my, that was such a sweet story.
Personally, I like the way you split the parts of the story into individual years. It also makes the story much more smoother. Furthermore, I can see the changes of Rose's character and attitude towards Scorpius much more easily.
The awkward relationship and date between Robert and Rose was also described perfectly.
Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for taking the time to review! I'm glad you liked the format of the story…I was worried it would be too choppy for some people :). Haha, and I'm glad you liked the part about Robert, that was really fun to write. Thanks again for reviewing! xx Ariana
Once Upon a Merry Christmas by Sapphire at Dawn
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: It's Christmas, 1998. The first Christmas since the Battle of Hogwarts, and, coincidentally, the first Christmas George Weasley has spent without his twin.
Wallowing in misery and dwelling on the very real emptiness George feels, he abandons his family at The Burrow and all its Christmas trappings, and heads for his bare, unfestive flat above the shop. However, someone unexpected arrives to try and remind him that at this time of year, he should be celebrating and doing best to honour Fred's memory in style.
[B]This is Sapphire at Dawn of Gryffindor writing for the Of Christmas' Past, Present and Future challenge in the Great Hall. This is for prompt four. [/B]
Date: 12/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Hello :) I really enjoyed reading this one-shot.
I used to wonder about how George or the Weasley famiily would react and how they will get over Fred's death. For your story, you have portrayed his inner struggles and anguish convincingly enough and it is rather well-written.
The idea of Fred transforming into a ghost was extremely clever. Somehow, I had never thought of that. It is a rather new concept.
Well, that's all. I really enjoyed this Fred & George story. Keep writing !
-Jane (princessbipolar)
--Signed the Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Hi Jane, thanks very much for the review, and for the compliments!
Difficulties of Avoidance by chaiteelatte
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: (AU following OotP) When Ginny stumbles upon a young Tom Riddle passed out in a remote Hogwarts passageway, she resolves to have nothing to do with him. However, as he becomes more entangled in her life, Ginny is drawn into protecting Riddle from himself - if she can first protect herself from him.
Date: 12/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Testing the Waters
Your description of the first paragraph was a rather commendable effort.
However, I have noticed that the word ‘’ roared ‘’ was repeated twice in a row (next few lines). It might just be a personal reference but I feel that the sentence will flow more smoothly if you make use a wide range of vocabulary. . You can probably use others word of the same meaning or intensity to replace the second repeated verb.
Characterisation wise, I really like your portrayal of Ginny and Luna Lovegood (one of my favourite characters)-particularly their exchange which was humorous in a way.
That’s all! Keep writing!
~ Jane (princessbipolar)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! You're absolutely right; 'roared' twice in one sentence does sound silly. Funny story: I opened my main story document to find the problem and was like "what the heck is she talking about?" and it turns out I uploaded this chapter based on an older file of the story! The first 'roared' should be 'shrieked'! Oh man... I need to figure out how to re-upload. Thanks for catching that.
I'm glad you liked Luna. I have to say she is seriously one of the hardest characters to write. I'm having trouble with her as the story gets more serious and sometimes I just don't know how to handle her. Wish me luck!
A Very Sirius Christmas by rachelnotrach
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The Marauders help Harry celebrate his first Christmas while Lily tries to reconcile her old visions of Christmases with the reality of the war.
I'm rachelnotrach of Hufflepuff and this is my submission to the Great Hall Of Christmas' Past, Present and Future Challenge- Prompt 1.
Date: 12/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: A Very Sirius Christmas
Firstly, I would like to comment that the title was extremely creative- the way you made use of a character’s name to give the meaning of another word.
Also, I absolutely adore the interaction between Sirius and Lily. It is particularly satisfying (at least for me) whenever I see any well-written interaction between both of them besides the usual Severus/Lily or James/Lily.
“Lily, he isn’t even one. He doesn’t know what he likes. He doesn’t even know what I’m saying,” Sirius complains. “This story is lame! My godson deserves a story with adventure, thrill and motorbikes”
It is actually rather funny- according to the way Sirius speaks in this story. And of course, I really enjoy seeing the overprotective and maternal side of Lily Potter.
Frankly, this is a very well-written story that sort of contrasts the Christmas mood with Lily’s fears of the Death Eaters showing up. I think you really portrayed that part well without overdoing it.
So, keep on writing! There are readers out there that await for more of such stories
-Jane (princessbipolar)
--Signed the Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Thanks, I love writing for Sirius and Remus especially. I really wanted to have a story they were all there and happy with Harry. My other entry to the contest ties into to this story. It takes place Christmas Harry's third year and is from Remus' point of view.
I am glad you enjoyed it. I really had fun writing it. I actually came up with the title before I even wrote the story, I just knew Sirius was going to be one of the focuses.
Keep an eye out because I'm working on a chaptered Marauder fic and a one-shot of letters between Sirius and Remus.
Christmas in Oz by abovelevel
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
Hermione deals with the past and learns to move forward during the unforgettable Christmas of 1999 in Australia.
Written for the 'Of Christmases' Past, Present and Future Challenge' in the Great Hall on the Forums, Prompt #3. Thanks!
Thanks also to my very helpful beta-reader, Bookworm!
Date: 12/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: Christmas in Oz
Firstly, I would like to comment that I simply love the interaction (or the bashful way they tease each other) between Ron and Hermione. It seems entirely natural and not awkward at all – unlike other stories.
“Bill told me you didn’t until you were nearly five.”
I really like the humour portrayed. It gives a light touch to the entire story.
“Hermione Granger,” And I really like the way Ron emphasises on her surname- as if to remind Hermione that she is a part of the Granger family and is no stranger to her parents.
The descriptions of the Christmas decorations put up by Hermione’s parents also helped me to visualise the scene which helps a lot. And the fact that you linked the decorations back to her childhood home really serves to emphasise the past.
‘’The sun was juxtaposed oddly against the Christmas decorations, giving them an orange tinge. ‘’
I really like the way you made use of juxtaposition. The direct contrast between the two scenes seems almost vivid. It’s a really clever technique which you made use of.
Generally, this piece of writing was extremely enjoyable. Keep on writing !
-Jane (princessbipolar)
Signed the Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing Jane! I love Ron/Hermione, so I'm glad you thought their interaction was realistic... I definitely thought a lot about how to make it cute but not silly. I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
-Claire
Of Weasleys and Malfoys by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Four moments from their life that brought them together. This is Dinny's Christmas present for the 2010 Gryffindor Swap. And this is not what J.K.Rowling has been working on, no.
Date: 12/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Incredible characterisation. I particularly like the way you show the interaction between Scorpius and Rose. Furthermore, the dialogue flows smoothly and fits the individual characters' traits.
But I just want to say that last part was utterly hilarious.
Nice work there!
Author's Response: Hello!
The Torture of Hermione Granger by littlebird
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: One above, two below. We know the boy's story, what about the girl's? One-Shot about Hermione's torture by Bellatrix.
Date: 12/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Torture of Hermione Granger
Utterly perfect. This is the first time I have read the torture written in Hermione's perspective. It is yet another side to the story and hence, rather refreshing for once.
Your descriptions of the torture Bellatrix had inflicted on Hermione was completely real and well-written.
I also like the way you portray Hermione's pain. It isn't exactly easy to do it without going over-board and yet, you have done it!
That's all. Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm pleased you found it believable. That is what is most important to me. And I'm glad that this type of thing has not been done to death. Not being an avid reader of fanfiction, I thought I was probably just adding to the pile, so to speak.
Screaming In Our Hearts by AngelJunior
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Barty Crouch Jr.'s parents save him from Azkaban, but what is left of their boy? Focuses on the day they save him, but the beginning takes a look into Junior's year in the prison.
Date: 01/07/11 Title: Chapter 1: Screaming In Our Hearts
Hi there, I really love your Barty Crouch- inspired story.
I like your first few parts- especially when you vividly describe Barty’s pain, emotional turmoil and anguish. The characterisation of all the characters was also done well. You did show Barty’s worship of Lord Voldemort and how he detested his father.
The mother’s pleas and sadness were exceptionally touching. It is indeed easy to picture how she longed for her precious son to have a chance to live.
That's all. Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Glad to hear it comes out in this story, as I did feel these events very strongly as I wrote them. Ever since I first read GoF in 2004, this day they saved him intrigued me the most in the Crouch family timeline.
Thank you! :)
More Than a Divided Country by OliveOil_Med
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: When Korea was divided by a war, twin sisters—Yu Mi-cha and Eun-cha—were separated as well. Almost fifty years later, their granddaughters are brought together through being Muggle-born witches: Kim Hae-won from the South and Ryang Young-jae from the North.
But even in this new world of magic, they are not free of political turmoil, and the Korean wizarding world is on the verge of a choice that could change the world forever.
Date: 03/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue The Missing Yu Twin
The first thing I thought of when I saw the story was: Why're there no reviews?
Seriously, this story is really under-appreciated but anyway, I got interested in reading this story when I first saw your banner on the forums. It intrigued me mainly because I'm an Asian and that it's really refreshing to see the wizarding world portrayed in a different hemisphere, instead of purely just British.
Personally, I think you grasped the theme well (seeing as everyone is aware of the conflict between N and S korea). Also, the idea itself is extremely original and inspirational. It would be more difficult to write a historical story (especially in AU).
I like your writing style and I believe that Mi-cha possess more common sense than her sister. You laid the setting well through the introduction and the readers gets a good sense of where the story is heading to.
I'm looking forward for more chapters and, don't get discouraged by the lack of reviews :)
Author's Response: Yes, exploring the world outside of Britain is one of my specialties. And I hope the rest of the story will capture your interest as well...along with maybe a few more reviews?
Date: 03/14/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 Kim Hae-won
‘’ She didn’t see what was so fun about a computerized kitten who lived in a keychain—‘’
Oh well, I remember the craze over those gadgets (Hello Kitty, Pokemon perhaps?) when I was little. Okay, that's a little digression.
I really love how you linked the story (Story princess) to the grandmother’s own experience. As I mentioned in my previous review earlier, it must be hard to link all the historical facts and actual situation in reality to the story but you’ve managed it well. And I like the contrast in terms of the personalities between Hae-won’s friends.
Nice chapter. Looking forward to more :]
~Jane/princessbipolar
The Abyss Gazes by Calico
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
-Friedrich Nietzsche
Scorpius Malfoy has avoided Althea Burbage – and everyone else at Hogwarts – for five long years. Who, he thinks, would want to be friends with the son of a Death Eater? Certainly not a girl whose aunt was murdered before the eyes of his father and grandfather.
Unfortunately, Thea doesn't seem to agree.
Date: 04/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Complications of Contemplation
Well, this was an interesting portrayal of Scorpius. And it's rather nice to read about a character who is somehow linked to the poor Muggle Studies professor killed so long ago. In fact, I quite like this particular connection here.
Somehow, I guess this chapter presents a different perspective on how Scorpius will turn out like. There has been much speculation and I'm pleased to finally have a chance to read on a Scorpius who withdraws from the outside world and ponders over his own thoughts.
Your descriptions of Scorpius internal struggle was very well done and I love your characterisation of him. The last line left quite a deep impression on my mind too.
This is a good start to your chaptered story. Looking forward to more :)