Really, really cool. You know, you never did say whether or not Andrea and Harry are twins, so I'll take that as a yes... anyway, I like the story, it's awesome. Dumbledore's bit was really funny. If you don't review then I may have to get a bit, uh... stern.
10/10
Author's Response: You go ahead and believe your assumptions about Harry and Andrea being twins. *grins wickedly* Anyway, I really feel lucky with Dumbledore in this chapter. It was a stroke of genius/inspiration, and I love it when that happens. Thanks for the review.
Great chapter, I loved it. i particularly enjoyed Darren's acting like a blazing lunatic, but i'm not in a review mood, so... you're lucky to get one at all. But I love your story, get the next one up as soon as possible, and I'll send you the longest review in history! Happy? And I still think they're twins... 10/10
Okay, here's the 'longest review in history' that I promised. Though whether it's actually going to be that long is a totally different question. I write long reviews when I don't mean to and short reviews when I do. But that's got nothing to do with the story.And I guess I'm gonna have to give you a nice, useful review cause no one else seems to have done it. Anyway, Darren was funny again, and I like George's nervousness, and the way you broke up the 'soppy' scene because too much is worse than too little. Plus, if it was all sunshine and daisies no one would read it. It'd be pretty boring. I like it when things like that happen because, well, it's funny. But if you ask me everything's funny if you look at it the right way. I like it that Andrea's planning on being a proffessional quidditch player. I had thought auror, but she can't really do everything the same as Harry can she? Twins - especially non-identical ones, aren't exactly the same. You may have noticed that I still think they're twins. The fact that you don't even give me a proper answer just makes me even more convinced... See ya. PS Is it long enough? 10/10 (I'm not fussy)
All right then, I will believe my 'assumptions' as you call them. After all, it's not like you've actually said yes or no, so... And yes you HAVE to stick Sirius in there. Of course you do. See ya.
This story's cool,but I expect you know that by now. Anyway, let's get straight to the point. Andrea's Harry's twin, isn't she? ISN'T SHE!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! Again, great story. See ya!
Author's Response: If Andrea was Harry's twin, do you think I would actually confirm or deny it? MWAHAHAHAHA! Ah, the powers of being the all-knowing author....except, sometimes things happen that even I wasn't expecting...Like Neal Thatcher...He just all of a sudden appeared and ended up driving a lot of the plot. :) Thanks for the review.
Really good as always. I like the fact that Tom's having dreams and stuff, like ol' Greedy is possessing him, though of course, while Grindelwald might be doing something to Miriam, I reckon she's just some sort of seer. I don't really have anything to complain about, so excellent, keep it up, and update as soon as possible, okay? See ya 10/10
Author's Response: Thanks for the R&R and for the 10! :-D I just submitted the next chapter a little while ago, so hopefully it'll be up soon. Keep your eyes peeled, lol.
Great chapter, as always. Quite interesting, particularly her vision. My only concerns are that a) you, like practically everyone else on this site, have a tendency to be nice and to favour your main character, and b) that you should probably try do something a bit more different from JK's stuff. I mean, it's not like you're writing Harry and co with different names, but things like Quidditch, the dueling club, the mirror.... try giving Miriam some more problems, and things she's not so good at. I'm not too bothered because everyone does it, but readers have a love/hate relationship with problems, i find. They love the story because it's way more interesting and stuff and they get more emotional about it (how could they, that's so unfair!) but because we almost always love our main characters, we also hate them (problems). But don't think I'm saying I don't like your story, I love it. It's on my favourites (not that I'm very choosey, but hey) so keep up the great work, and follow the aforementioned advice. See ya! 10/10
Author's Response: Hi! The thing with following JK's world was when I started the story, I was still new (ala Newbie) to the whole concept of HP fanfic. At the time, I thought it was sort of an unwritten requirement that you were to keep stories more within JK's world, and not deviate from it. It wasn't until much later on that I realized that that wasn't the case. Of course, it looks like I'm making an excuse, which really, I'm not trying to do. Honest. :-) But I'm really, really, glad you told me so I'll know for later on. Also, before I go, I just want to say that there will be one more crossover to JK's world and everything before and afterward will be original (and following pre-hbp canon). I'm really glad that you like the story so far. :-D
And yeah, I know what you mean about favoring the main character. I was trying not to do that. lol Though everything seems all honky-dory with Miriam, it will quickly change.
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James and Lily Potter were possibly the most famous parents in wizarding history. We know alot about their adult life, but what do we really know about their childhood? Even Harry never knew about the Drama, jealousy, danger, friendships, happiness, sadness, resentment,confusion and love that his parents went through as children. Here, their lives, from when the two of them were eleven to when they were brutally murdered at only 21, is recorded. Lily and James Potter were unsung heros. This is their story.
For the last time, I DO NOT HATE ROBERT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I mean, he is sort of messing up the story, but that's not exactly his fault, is it? But still, I love ya story, the Howler was great! I'd be sooooooooooo humiliated if I was callista. See ya! 10/10
Author's Response: hey, thanks for the review and ok ok! I know you dont hate him...next time Ill simply say everyone except _spinifex_ hates robert! Im glad you like the chapter, I would be too! Cya!
Cool! I really like your story, though there is some grammar mistakes. And who's my favourite character? Well, it's gotta be... um... good question! I think I like, um, Jada probably. Why? Because she's got a heart, I guess. She notices things other people don't and it's obvious she'd be a true friend, loyal forever. I know she'd do what she thinks is right. Mind you, I quite like Lily and James as well. I rate you...............
Author's Response: Wow, hey, thanks for your review!! Jada is my fav too!! Your description of her is exactly how I was trying to get her personality across as, thanks!!! What did you rate me, WHAT DID YOU RATE ME!!!!! thanks again!
That is an excellent question... next question... just kidding. Anyway, I'm really not sure. I'd say I'm most like a blend of Lily and Sirius, though I've got a bit of Thaliana's wildness (or should I say craziness?) I'm smarter than she is, though. So, yeah... great story. 10/10. Oh, and is Fire Temper, the one who reviewed about a hundred and fifty times, insane? Just wondering... see ya.
Author's Response: hey, thanks for the review hehe I love my Thali (not literally) she'll become a bigger character as the story goes on, don't worry! I'm so glad that you liked the chapter! PS, i don't know...I certainly hope not... maybe she/he really likes my story...I think its a she... lol
Great story, loved it as always. The love-potion thing was kind of obvious, though. I bet the main reason they didn't think of it was because, well, they don't know they're a fan fiction story so I'm betting they wouldn't be expecting something like that even at Hogwarts. Anyway, I'm not really sure who's done the best, though I quite approved of your characterisation of Peter, Sirius, James and Remus. I approved of all of them actually. I do think that Lily and James need more difficulties - if it were easy it would be boring and we wouldn't be reading it anyway. I like the fact that it's adventurous and has actual substance, not the whole 'I love you, you love me, lets get married and live happily ever after' type story. Those get really boring. Then again, I like adventure. And no, I so do NOT hate Robert, I think he's really nice. It's not HIS fault he's interfering with the story, how's he supposed to know he's messing with J.K.R.? Okay, so I don't think the whole Robert-Lily thing should go very far, but then, they're only twelve. OH well. Keep up the good work, and see ya! PS you're on my favourites, by the way, thought you'd like to know.
Author's Response: hey, thanks for the heaps long review!!! Yeah, it was a little obvious, but you are right, they wouldnt expect something like that to happen, would they? Im glad you like all of them, its nice to hear! Dont worryl, theyll have difficulties in the near future! Theyre only twelve, they have plenty of time to be getting on with the whole I hate you thing. Im glad you like the plot as well, i was trying not to make it ordinary, though I have had comments that the plot has been used before....since there is so much going on, I find it hard to believe, but moving on... yay, Im mglad you like Robert, I like him :P They wont go too far, as you aid, theyre only 12 :P yay, thanks for adding me on there! cya!
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Cool story, I actually read the first part of it ages ago, totally forgot about it, and only came across it just now. You're a really good author, I think the stuff about Reggie's really interesting, so yeah. She/he's right, you know, Sirius had no idea about the dark mark, but I'm generally willing to forgive small errors - particularly from good authors (hint, hint), it's just certain things that really get on my nerves. For example, I have no tolerance for stories that portray James Potter as anything but a Seeker, for some reason. Not that it matters right now. Anyway, See Ya!!12345678987654321/10
It's really, really, REALLY funny. Honest. See ya.
Messrs. Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs -- These names are known by every person in Hogwarts. These names, and an envelope with a scarlet wax seal bearing the letters: MWPP.
The teachers dread it, the students revel in it...but who are these 'Marauders,' as they are called? That's just it. Nobody knows. Most every prank Hogwarts sees is at the hands of these mysterious Marauders, and the perpetrators always walk free. They could never be caught. You can’t catch phantoms.
Lily Evans is just as curious as the next student as to who these Marauders are, but her curiosity is transformed into a hungry need, when she receives a letter herself from a certain Mr. Prongs.
[This story is slightly AU, but more on that in the author's note at the end.]
This is a pretty good story, and I liked the whole thing about James Potter writing anonymous love letters, and the mysterious and romantic Marauders, and how they were practically phantoms. The only thing I dislike is that I think the ending was rather abrupt. I think it would almost definitely have been longer and more abrupt had your version of events been the case. However, it was, admittedly, very sweet. And would you please, pretty PPPLLLEEEAAASSSEEE check out my fic? Reasons: um..... just read it, please? After all, I first discovered this story when you were updating it more regularly, and I kept checking it for more chapters even though you took ages to get this one up. And I like your story, don't I? All right, I'll go now, before you start thinking I'm insane. It's called 'The Eye of the Snake' by the way. See ya! 8/10
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Yes, it was rather abrupt, but I intended it to be that way. :) When I get the time, I will try and read your story, but I am obscenely busy at the moment, so I'm sorry if I don't get to it right away. :\
Really funny, as always. I'm thinkinig it's Malfoy, Ginny, Hagrid, Voldemort/anyone who wants to kill Harry, right? I always like to try guess who sent the letters. I liked the comment about ferret breath, by the way. Keep writing as fast as you can, because I hate it when my favourite authors won't update (and you ARE one of my favourite authors)... See ya 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you! Well, you\'re half right on your guesses! But, I must make a confession. One of the letters isn\'t from a canon character at all. But you will see the significance of it later...! For your last guess, you are sort of right...well, you\'ll see! Thanks, it\'s always great when you guys pick out bits you like! I was quite fond of the ferret breath myself, so I\'m glad you liked it too! I will keep writing as fast as I can, I\'m sorry there was a bit of a wait for this chapter, but life got hectic! I\'ll try and submit the next one soon! (dare I say - next weekend? If possible, anyway!) Wow! I\'m one of your favourite authors? *feels extremely proud* *gets writing asap!!* Thank you!!
Very,very,very,very,very,very,very funny. I reckon there should be letters from Voldy and Malfoy about losing his side-kick (Crabbe) and Snape should try sending one about HIM being misunderstood because he had a bad childhood...yadi yadi dah... oh and I thing the name's really funny as well...Dear Dumby, honestly... I also like trying to guess who all the letters are from, too. Seeya!
PS You've been on my favourites thingy ever since I read it when there was two chapters.
Author's Response: Wow, thats a lot of 'very's!! Thanks!! I'm glad you liked it! Lol, Snape feeling misunderstood!! I will include Malfoy n Voldy though!! I'm really glad you liked the name, as theres quite a contraversy on it!! Ooh, yay! A dedicated fave, right from the (near) start!! Thank you!!
This story's cool, really, really, really interesting. If you don't tell me who the narrator is, then I'm afraid I'll die a long, painfull death, and you won't get my updates no more! So hurry up, why don't cha? Brilliant story. See ya. 100000000/10
Author's Response: ... Ah well. Go ahead and die then. I'm no Mounty, why should I care?
Joke! Joke! Keep reviewing! *sobs* It's the only thing that keeps me happy...
After all the other reviews I don't think you need another one, but I felt like saying this anyway.
YOU ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Are you kidding? I LOVE reviews! Especially positive ones like yours! I'm addicted to them!!! THANK YOU!
Cool story, very funny. Holly was lying, of course, but there's no WAY they'd ever be smart enough to realise that... except maybe Sirius... and only because he's not falling for her... but anyway. Remus, of course, would know straight away, but oh well. I'm looking forward to the next chapter it's going to be SO funny
See ya!
Author's Response: u r oh-so-very-wise... in the words of the person that made the witty t-shirts (and is consequently rolling in money) once said, "boys r stupid. throw rocks at them." now, of course, this is not always true. we LOVE our marauders (and a few other select boys, too). thanks for appreciating our sense of humor! chapter five has more where that came from, but at the same time, we gave the characters a little more depth. i hope u like it! thanks for reviewing! *hand out a special edition chocolate frog card.. that has UR face on it, b/c ur THAT cool!* have a LOVELY day! :)
That was... interesting. The whole thing about how James related to Snape and that, I mean. It was funny, too (and stories HAVE to be funny), and James stupidity cracked me up. I never really looked at them talking that way. Actually, scratch that, I never thought of them having a sane (more or less) conversation. Keep it up. See ya!
Author's Response: honestly, we never really considered the idea ourselves until we were having a very intellectual discussion about the characters one night, and we decided that somewhere deep inside ourselves (we're talking VERY, VERY deep here... like digging to the core of the earth deep), we might harbor a little ounce of respect for some of our "enemies." they'd have to at least recognize the skill of the other, wouldn't they? plus, if you can't beat them, they say you should join them, and since we all know THAT wouldn't happen, we think it makes sense that maybe they had to find a way to deal w/ eachother... at least occassionally... once every blue moon or two. we'd have to agree that humor is a necessity! we're trying our best to get the next chapter up before we take our week off! have a FABULOUS day! :) *gift bag from our favorite twins for u! ;)!*