I was laughing so hard!! and that hardly ever happens when I´m reading Fanfics!!

I like your story very much. Is simple, random and completely hilarius. Keep it up. (btw I love how you write Hermione)

This is the best fanfic I've read so far and I'm being completely honest. I loved it. You're a talented writer

Great chapter, Jenna! I've been meaning to review this for the longest time, but I...well...I hadn't. *rollseyes* This story gets more interesting with each chapter.

I'll start fom the beginning saying that I just love the title. It's a great word that it's no oftenly used, but it's not unheard of. A great eye-catcher if you ask me.

I believe that one of your strenghts as a writer is writing the dialogue, and it is very visible in this particular chapter. Even the one between Siobhan and Snape was enjoyable. How can you not like a tense discussion between to witty charaters as these? "It’s funny — you don’t really seem concerned about my well-being -- more about proving your own point" I particularly loved this line. It is very Siobhanesque. (hehe, I just made up a word.)

The scenes between her and Lucius are always enjoyable, of course. It was interesting to see them having their first huge fight. They've had discussions and arguments before, but never drama such as this. It was so irratating how Lucius kept avoiding the questions. I just wanted to stick my hand through the screen and bitch-slap him.

As the dialogue, the smutiness is very enjoyable. "Siobhan gasped as he muffled his pleasure with his teeth against her shoulder," This mental image made me smile. There is just something about bites during love-making that makes me guh! Sorry, for a second I forgot we were on MNFF and thought that we were on that dirrty community. *whistles*

Wonderful chapter, Jenna. I really want to see where this is going. I may not read it as soon as it is posted, but I must certainly will at one point or another.

Harald/Purplemage

Hey Jenna, let’s try this again, shall we? Ok, here we go. First of all, I’ll tell you why I love your fic: it’s different, it’s original, you’ve created an amazing OC and it’s well written. There are not many people who would dare to write about a romantic relationship of a married man with a student, and for that I applaud you, because I love reading fics that are different and out there. (I think I just out-gayed myself)

Let’s start with the characters because that’s the part I like the most. There are not enough praises for the incredible Siobhan Murphy. She is as real as you can get and besides that she’s my kind of female character. She’s witty, smart, strong, independent, and has a great sense of fashion. It’s funny because in the scene of the Death Eater attack in Diagon Alley, in my head I was picturing Siobhan wearing high heels, and in the end she was wearing them. That shows that you’ve made such a good job with her characterization that I can actually imagine what she’s wearing/looks like without you having to describe it for me.

The characterization of the canon characters is worth mentioning as well because it’s just fantastic. Lucius is perfection. I don’t think I’ve ever read such a great portrayal of this character (yet again, I haven’t read many fics with Lucius in it, but that’s besides the point). You took a character that J.K. left a little flat and turned him into a human being. I may not agree on many things he does and on many of his points of views, but I understand them. I understand why he thinks the way he does and as an author I think you should congratulate yourself for achieving this because it is not easy at all. The other canon character that I love how you portrayed is none other than Mr. Potter himself. I just love his relationship with Siobhan and how he has the need to protect her; it’s annoying and sweet at the same time. It’s very refreshing to what we’ve come to know as the typical Harry friendship.

The setting is great. The descriptions of the Malfoy Mansion were just delightful. It was so decadent and elegant (all that I love). I think the black marble table will stick with me forever (and what happens on the table also). The fact that it takes place during the wintertime adds it an extra touch. The weather is just another excuse for Siobhan and Lucius to look for ways to warm each other up. Another of the scenes that will stick for me is the one at the beginning where Siobhan is in the train looking through the window. I don’t know why, but it was beautifully described, and I can really relate to the looking-through-window-and-not-paying-attention thing.

My only critique is for the flow department (that sounded weird). I felt that Siobhan and Lucius got together a bit quick. I would’ve liked to see a bit more sexual tension between the two before they finally get together, but that’s just me. I like slow romances, but since the attraction of these two is mainly physical at first is understandable that they hooked up quickly.

Well, there is really nothing to say about the plot because I already raved it. As I already said it is original and refreshing. It is something that I had been looking for a while in fan fics. Keep up the good work, Jenna. I’ll definitely keep an eye on this.

PS: I can’t wait to see what’s going to happen. Since Harry and Snape know about the affair this just got more exciting.


Author's Response: Hee, thanks, Harald. Siobhan\'s characterisation, apparently, runs right down to her toes? *hug*

And, yeah, I didn\'t want to prolong the actual \"initiation\" of their relationship just because a) it\'s the tip of the iceberg, and b) it sort of benefits the dynamic. It was definitely a rushing into something and getting caught up so fast that it confuses the emotions and you don\'t know the difference between love and lust and blahblahblah. *cough* And, YAY for wintertime. *wishes she had someone to warm her up* sigh. And, also thanks for the compliment on Lucius -- I was talking about that to another writer the other day, the process of taking a \'bad\' character and revealing a more human side. The only problem is that some people just don\'t want to accept it and think I\'m romanticising. Heh. *is definitely not romanticising Lucius any time in the near future* Anyway. *hug* Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reviewing.

I really like your story is very cool!! I want to know what happens next! Where are Ron and Neville??

That was a very good scene, I think you rushed it to much by the end but it's still good. The "I love you, I love chocolate" part was very sweet, good job!

Author's Response: I like that part too. Thanks!

hmmm... interesting, i wonder what would happen

Author's Response: *wonders along with you*. No, really. i know what I want to happen with the rest of the story, but I haven't actually written it yet. sorry! BTW, thanx for reviewing!

The whole poem situation was really cute. We have to get in contact and see if I'll write a chapter or not, I would've done it sooner, but I've been really busy. Anyways, great story. You guys are doing a great job!

Author's Response: Hee. Glad you liked the poem. I was wondering what had happened to you actually; you can feel free to get in contact with me through the feedback form (if that still exists) or through PM\'s on the beta forums. Thanks for reviewing!

Congratulations Oppungo!! This chapter was magnifique! The part of the crazy frog made me laugh so hard! I really, really, really hate that song, I'm glad to see I'm not the only one. Also the chimney part was very funny. "Like Santa!"

Author's Response: Thank you Purplemage! I\'m really pleased you liked it! Oh, that Frog gets on my nerves - croak it already!! Though I thought it would be the perfect weapon for Voldemort! Oh, I\'m glad you liked the bit about Santa, that was one of my favourite bits too! Thanks for reviewing!