11/30/05
http://www.livejournal.com/~cruciatus_love
Name: Shayla
House: Slytherin and PROUD
Stories:
Amortentia
This was my first fic and therefore not my best. Although I am quite proud of the epilogue (which could be a oneshot), the rest of the piece is not as good as it could be. Someday I might go back to it.
Barty's Story: The Quidditch World Cup
This is the second chapter of what was previously my chaptered story called "A Dementor's Kiss". It eventually became an abandoned fic, so I made my favourite chapter (and most easily made to stand alone) this one-shot.
Winning Eternal Glory
This is an extremely long one-shot written for the first Gauntlet Maze Challenge. All of the obstacles Tom had to pass through were given to me, and I simply got him through them.
Through the Eyes of an Onlooker
Written for the Slytherin July Writing Relay in which I was given a prompt to write about and had to write this one-shot. The prompt was 'write a one'shot in whic Reglulus and Sirius talk on the night that Sirius is abandoned by his family'. I then added my own swing to it.
Born on the Streets
This was originally written for the June/July monthly challenge 'Alone', but was later swithced over to 'Great Love' because of how it ends up. It acts as a sort of back story to the previously mentioned Amortentia.
I Can't Love Her
This is a two-chaptered peice of which the first chapter is currently up. It's Tom's POV in the wedding day as mentioned in Amortentia. It should be finished soon.
Thanks To:
My real life freinds for supporting me,
My Slytherins for pushing me,
And all my lovely betas for helping me along.
I love you all!
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Harry's our WHAT??? by Kelsid
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: *Last chapter is up!* Due to a mishap in Charms class, James and Lily are taken away to Harry's time, only to meet Ron and Hermione. Kept hidden away from Harry by his two best friends, Ron lets something slip about Harry, James and Lily's relationship. Will James and Lily find out about their son, or at least before Remus, Sirius and Peter in the Marauder era figure out a way to bring them back? Includes people turning into ducks, Monty Python quotes and lots of Marauder goodness. PLEASE R & R- Hint, this does not mean read and run!
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 14: Bad Days
Wow, very good. You're characterazion of Remus and Sirius at the beginning of this chaoter is amazing. It's exactly how I had imagined them. You made it seeme very realistic with Ron and Lily talking, as well as when Lily saw Harry. This story definitely made me laugh a good few times. Nice job!
Date: 03/10/06 Title: None
Another great chapter, although I must say it was way past the due date.
I'm glad to see Ginny's life working out for her a little bit again, and I can't wait to read her conversation with Harry. Great job!
Date: 02/19/06 Title: None
Wow, great job! This is definitely on my favorites list and one of the best! Happy birthday, it's the 19th!
Hey, where's the new chapter?
A Thousand Words by annie
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: For the rest of the Ministry, the interdepartmental challenge was merely a failed attempt to restore trust between workers. But for Draco Malfoy and Hermione Granger, it was the catalyst for an unexpected relationship built on passionate letters, concealed identities, and secret meetings – and the beginning of an end that neither of them could ever have imagined possible, not even in their wildest dreams.
Post-war. Based somewhat on the story of the Phantom of the Opera. Also contains R/Hr, so don't read if you can't stomach that ship.
Status: Complete. Thanks for reading, everyone!
Date: 02/15/06 Title: Chapter 9: The Point of No Return
Great chapter! You have a very believable Draco/Hermione story going here. They don't just "fall in love at first sight." The anonymousness of it all is fantastic. Update soon!
Date: 02/11/06 Title: None
Wow, this is a really great story. I especially liked the way you characterized Sirius in his younger years. But, Harry seems exactly the same. He loves having fun and wants to be "cool" for his godfather, but he still knows what is right and what is wrong. I loved the reaction Harry had when seeing Lily. EVen more I liked the reaction from Sirius. Great job, really!
S'mores by Crystallic Rain
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The truth about the fifth Gryffindor boy is revealed (Remus ate him), a comforter not-so-spontaneously combusts twice, James smells funny, and Peter likes chicken. And Natalie Blackwood snogs Sirius in a broom closet (yay inbred purebloods).
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: Part One
Haha! I was laughing the whole way through on this one! I loved how you told the story using mostly dialogue. That's how things work in reality. You're characterization of Sirius, James, Peter, and Lily were great! Lupin seemed a little more obsessed with the chocolate then I would think of him, but it really added to the humour of the story! Great job! 10/10!
Part II of Romance Slytherin Style - However Far Away by SeaIsleWitch
Rated: Professors •Summary: He had no choice when he was marked as a servant of evil; her only mistake was to fall in love with him. Draco Malfoy and Pansy Parkinson are two lovers forced to live in a cruel reality.
This is Part II of Romance, Slytherin Style - A Trilogy. Please read Part I - Somewhere Only We Know first. *Let me change your mind about the Slytherins you love to hate.*
Warnings: Non-graphic violence, torture and sexual situations. Character death, but not Pansy or Draco.
Genres: Romance/drama with some humour and action
Main Characters: Draco Malfoy & Pansy Parkinson
Other Characters: Severus Snape, Narcissa Malfoy, Millicent Bulstrode, Bellatrix Lestrange , Lord Voldemort and many more.
Date: 03/11/06 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter Nine
Another great installment to this amazing tale. The way the two slytherin's relationship has matured is overwhelming, but also great writing.
As always, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hi, CL! Yes, Slytherins do more than bully Harry. lol They are both seventeen, which is considered an 'adult' in the Wizarding world, so I feel the complexity of their emotions should reflect that. I'm having a lot of fun writing this, and I'm happy you are still wanting more! Thank you! Ch 10 will be submitted tomorrow! - SIW
Date: 12/23/05 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven
Yet another great chapter! You're really good at this.
Great job with adding in Kevin, it reall added humour in the story to tie in all the romance. (And yes, this is still my favorite fanfic)
Have a great holiday break!~Shayla
Author's Response: Shayla, I'm so happy you are still reading. I am very sorry to have taken so long to respond and to post chapter eight. I hope to have it up very soon. Draco held his temper, didn't he? lol I've just started posting the fic I've been writing non-stop since mid-November called Pure & Proud. Thanks for keeping with me! SIW
Date: 04/14/06 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter Eleven
Another amazing chapter! Your descriptions of the cave and tunnels were great, it gave me the feeling that I was actually there. Having them lead to the tree house was great as it tied together part one and part two pefectly. I can't wait for part three!
Ack! A cliffe! Update soon, don't leave Pansy in the dark!
By the way, I'm glad you like my penname. I thought it was rather witty myself. :)
Author's Response: Cruciatus Love is definitely one of the more clever names I\'ve encountered. lol I worked hard on this chapter, so it\'s gratifying to know that you enjoyed it. They are always interrupted in that tree house! Poor Pansy! Poor Draco! Chapter 12 is Draco\'s chapter, Chapter 13 picks up with Pansy in the tree house, Chapter 14 is written and I\'m tweaking, and Chapter 15 is half written as of today. I\'ll be posting 12 & 13 this week. We are building up to the end of Part II. *rubs hands together with evil grin on face* Thanks for supporting my writing! - SIW
Date: 03/19/06 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter Ten
That passion that first pulled me into this story continues to "glow" strong. This is another great chapter, and the storyline is really progressing. I'm sorry to see there time together comming to an end, but I'm excited for what's going to happen next. great job, and keep updating!
Author's Response: Hi, Isabella! LOL! I could just see Draco saying that line, so it had to be included in their romantic encounter. The 'sexual situations' in my stories will always be romantic and will not have graphic details or violence. Pansy and Draco love each other, so they are going to treat each other with care and respect. They may slip up from time to time, but they will never be intentionally hurtful to one another. They have enough drama in their lives with all that Death Eater stuff! Thank you for appreciating my treatment of their romance.
Here's something to consider as well: Pansy and Draco are consistently shown in the books as working together, even if it's laughing at each other's jokes. They are a team and there is respect there, as I outlined in my pseudo-essay*. Real relationships that last are based on love, trust, and support, and there's no doubt that they have the beginnings of such a relationship in canon, more so than any other canon pairing. (Especially as outlined in the train compartment scene.)
Thanks, Isabella, for your continued support of my writing. - SIW
PS Chapter Eleven is complete, and I'm writing Chapter Twelve, so the chapters will keep coming regularly. (Hopefully every weekend.)
* Draco Malfoy and Pansy Parkinson: Canon Moments in Their Relationship can be found here: http://seaislewitch.livejournal.com/32543.html
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Hi, Cruciatus Love! (Your name still cracks me up.) Ah...the afterglow! He would notice that now, wouldn't he? Yes, the storyline is progressing...just wait! There will be a few more chapters in Part II and then I'll be starting Part III, which will take place six months later.
I'm happy to know that you think the story is still worthy. Thanks for your continued reading and reviewing. It means a lot to me. *smiles* -SIW
Author's Response: OOOPS! Ignore this and see the other one (above or below). Sorry!
Date: 03/19/06 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter Ten
That passion that first pulled me into this story continues to "glow" strong. This is another great chapter, and the storyline is really progressing. I'm sorry to see there time together comming to an end, but I'm excited for what's going to happen next. great job, and keep updating!
Author's Response: Hi, Cruciatus Love! (Your name still cracks me up.) Ah...the afterglow! He would notice that now, wouldn't he? Yes, the storyline is progressing...just wait! There will be a few more chapters in Part II and then I'll be starting Part III, which will take place six months later.
I'm happy to know that you think the story is still worthy. Thanks for your continued reading and reviewing. It means a lot to me. *smiles* -SIW
Date: 12/04/05 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five
Wow, first off I'd like to say that this was the first fan fiction I read because my friends reccomended it to me and I fell in love. After reading around 15 other MNFF sroteis by various authors, it's still my favoite.
This story is great because as you read it you can almost feel their passion flowing through your body. As well as a great story line, this writing is amazing!
Can't wait until chapter 6!
~Shayla
Author's Response: Hi, Shayla! I'm flattered that you chose my trilogy to be your very first fanfic. I remember mine: Conspiracy of Silence by Nomad at Red Hen. I'm happy to hear you are 'feeling' the Slytherin lovin'. Thanks for you very kind words! -SIW
Date: 03/04/06 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Eight
Great job on another amazing chapter. I'm sorry (more for me than for you) that it took me this long to read it, but I;ve been on vacation. Five minutes after I got back I turned on the computer and read it. It was worth the wait! I can't wait for chapter nine.
By the way, thanks for the dedication!
Author's Response: CL, that's quite a complement! Thanks for reading as soon as you could! I have up through chapter eleven written. Chapter ten will be posted tomorrow (Fri 3/17). -SIW
Warmth by Insecurity
Rated: Professors •Summary: Hermione is abandoned by Harry during their quest to find Malfoy Manor. She is close to exhaustion when she stumbles over her coveted location. She assumes that nobody is home, the Malfoy's are either on the run or locked in Azkaban prison, and therefore she decides to use the manor as a shelter.
This happens to be a Lucius/Hermione story (Yes, I know I am attempting the impossible.) It is rated R for later chapters
I have edited this story down to make it a small ficlet - because I just know I will never get around to finishing it. Don't worry, it still makes sense. I've cut it off at the part where I initially intended to finish it
Date: 12/23/05 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3
Wow, how do I start? The combination of Lucius and Hermione is deffinately one I would never have come up with, and I'm pretty good at coming up with odd combinations. That said though, I like it; it throws a twist into the Harry Potter stories that you dont see in J.K's books. Great job on the actual writing, although the storyline is odd (but good!), the writing is great. I can't wait to read chapter four!
The New Surprise by rache
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
Hi everyone just to say this story is finished, there will not be any more chapters. Sorry if that wasn't clear beforeb>
Harry and Ginny are married, with a seven-year old daughter. As Ginny finds out she is pregnant with her second child, memories come back to her, good and bad. The war is over, and everyone feels safe. Shouldn’t they? Strange things are happening, mysterious plots are being formed, putting Harry and his loved ones in danger. Everyone knows he will do anything for the people he loves…Especially Ginny.
Date: 02/07/06 Title: Chapter 5: Dances and dramas
Wow, just....wow. When I read the line "You may kiss the bride." I started clapping my hands and jumping for joy. This is wonderfully written! You're definitely on my favorites.
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you! perfect wedding line...aww it makes me go all tingly!! ^_^
A Battle of Mind and Heart by mollyweasleyisfantastic
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: CHAPTER 15 IS UP!!!! PLEASE READ AND REVIEW, YOU GUYS ARE AWESOME!!!
Ginny and Harry worked together throughout the war to overcome darkness, with some particularly unfortunate outcomes. As she looks back now and remembers their lives, the milestones and major moments, she finds herself lonely and missing her best friend. However, unexpected surprises await her as she moves forward in her life...hopes return as well as those she loves.
Thank you for all the reads so far, keep the reviews coming!
Date: 12/29/05 Title: Chapter 2: Enter James Potter
Wow, a great love story. There's really nothing else to say. The writing itself is really good and the story line is exceptional. It's great how you switch between past and present to show the most important parts of the story.
I don't think it's confusing. ;)
Author's Response: I'm glad you don't find it confusing! I was getting worried there! Thank you for the compliments and I will keep the good stuff coming!
The Twelve Days of Christmas, by Crookshanks by Madnessisme
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Crookshanks is bored, and can't sleep due to the younger students singing Christmas songs. But one of them catches his interest, and being a smart critter, decides to word it himself ... entry for Winter Snows Challenge Four, by Madnessisme of Slytherin.
Date: 02/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Merry Christmas, Crookshanks!
Great job on that! It was really creative. You deffinately know your cats and what they want!
Author's Response: Thanks! Well, I have two cats myself, so you can say that I wrote from experience. =D
Date: 02/13/06 Title: None
I must say, I love this story. Nevile being gay definitely came as a surprise but it's a nice twist. Great job!
Death Did Us Part by miss padfoot
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Death can stop your breath. But what can it do to love?
Date: 04/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
Wow, this is definitely heart-warming. I actually started crying reading this. But, I do have three suggestions:
"...she stepped forwards into that feeling of compression" should be "she stepped forward..."
"His mother had been shocked when she had announced this to her parents and his parents. She refused point-blank to allow her to get dressed without fussing over her gown or her make-up, but with a bit of persuasion from her husband, she agreed half-heartedly."
In the books, Mrs. Weasley isn't all that fond of Fleur. I can kind of imagine her wanting to take pictures of Fleur WITH her son, but I can't imagine them having "bonding" time. I see where you're coming from, as Mrs. Weasley is a very caring mother, but it still doesn't seem right.
“'I love you,' he whispered.
Tears shone in her eyes. 'I told you I mustn’t see this again.'"
For this part, I think it's beautifully written and I like how you refer back to one of his lines in the beginning, but as he says this right before he dies, I kind of imagine it being slower. Adding in a few ellipses would make the line more powerful and show that he is really struggling to speak.
Overall, I really liked this. I loved how you switched between emotion and storyline. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review! And yes, Mrs. Weasley isn\'t all that fond of Fleur, but remember how she hugged Fleur and stuff at the end of HBP? She realised Fleur was nice when she still wanted to marry Bill after the bite. So... it seemed possible that she would fuss over Fleur\'s clothes, at least for her son\'s sake ;)
Mummy Loves You by expecto_patronum_this
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The night of Lily and James's death. As Lily watches the Dark Lord destroy everything in her life she has ever cared for, she realizes that she must explain to Harry why she can't be there for him forever, and make sure he knows that "Mummy loves you..."
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Mummy Loves You
Wow, you actually send shivers up my spine with this one. Just two things I picked up though:
It felt like there was a hint of fear in the air, like the darkness outside was slowly seeping in through the small cracks of the house like ink; almost as if the pitchy blackness was wrapping smooth fingers around the house, suffocating its occupants.
Whoa, this is a really long sentance. I would break it up as...
It felt like there was a hint of fear in the air, like the darkness outside was slowly seeping in through the small cracks of the house like ink. It was almost as if the pitchy blackness was wrapping smooth fingers around the house, suffocating its occupants.
The spell deflected off of Harry and hit Voldemort...
Technically, you can't say 'off of' in proper English. It's just 'off'.
Other than that, I loved it. Your characterization of Lily and James was great, I especially liked the first flashback. It gave a kind of happy-side to the dark story. Great job!
Author's Response:
Yay! A nit-picker! Do you have any idea how much I adore nit-pickers? Well, it\'s a lot. Thank you for finding those mistakes for me.
I gave you shivers? Wow. That\'s amazing. I really enjoyed writing this because it was the first thing I ever wrote that had a darker aspect to it. So I\'m really happy it had to effect I was looking for.
Thank you so much for the review. It means a lot. :)