Hi, I'm Evie. I'm fourteen and I live in Suffolk, England. I have loads of plot bunnies bouncing round my head, so I doubt I'll ever stop doing this! :D Have a read of my stories - go on, you know you want to! :p
I have many more original stories over at the-red-chair under the name apollo13 (which I also use on the forums) so please go and check them out.
I am available to beta, so just email me if you want something done - no slash or student/teacher pairings, please.
~Evie
[Thank you to Abbi, Nikki and Amy!]
[Thank you Suzie/Crazy-purple-hp-freak!]
[Thank you Abbi/babekitty92!]
[Thank you Claire!]
[Thank you Colores!]
Teddy - have a read, go on!
I'm reviewing to tell you what the Americanisms are - this is not spam! :P The most obvious one to me is when you say that the pocket watch fell out of his pants, because pants means underwear in England, so I was seriously grossed out for a moment before remembering that you might be American. ;) The correct term would be trousers. I've spotted a couple of others, but nothing too bad, so I can't be bothered to list them
Thanks for reviewing TTW! I've been rather short of reviews lately... :(
~Evie
Author's Response: You know, I thought the \"pants\" line sounded weird, so thanks for that! I\'ll be doing revisions once the story is finished, hopefully by June. I\'ve got 2 months to beat Jo! Anywho, I\'ll keep reading and reviewing your story. 318 isn\'t short on reviews, my dear. =) 33 is short on reviews! haha! *Sunny*
You like my name?!?! I think it's awful - you know, there's a Pokemon with the same name as me, only it's spelt eevee. It's pronounced the same, though. /spam
Anyways, this story is really good, despite Harry not getting together with Ginny. **glares** I swear, my pulse was racing when I was reading that little bit with Voldy, and you've made me hate Peter EVEN MORE than I did before, which I never thought was possible.
Please do not tell me that Harry just died, or I will flame you until you bring him back to life. :P
~Evie
Author's Response: When I was a kid, there was a TV show called Out Of This World, and the star\'s name was Evie, and I\'ve just loved that name every since! Be proud! It\'s so beautiful and spunky!
Hey, if a Harry/Ginny fan likes my story, I must be doing alright, so thank you!
And I\'m glad I made you hate Peter more - that\'s necessary for the next chapter!
Me? Kill our beloved hero? hehe.
Love, Sunny
I really love this story - even though I hate Luci. Sorry, but I do. You do have a flair for writing and I always look forward to the next chapter. :)
~Evie
Author's Response: Evie is such a beautiful name, I must tell you. I\'m glad you like the story, and it\'s okay if you hate Luci, haha! Ginny fans usually do, but I don\'t mind. Thanks SO much for the review! *Sunny*
Harry's life stands at a crossroads.
He is torn between a return to the only true home he as ever known or a dark and dangerous winding and twisting road through Horcruxes and ending with murder.
But can he become a murderer? Can he over come the Dark Arts, while dabbling within them? Will Ron and Hermione stand beside him on the road to doom? And if love is truly his greatest power then why did he let his only true love go?
To defeat evil, Harry must climb a mountain of dark Death Eaters and Ministry mayhem - but will he come out on top in the Final Battle?
I'm really sorry, but i gave up trying to read this chapter halfway through - it's just a bid chnk of text and it's really confusing. It's such a shame because you have a wonderful storyline and the characterization is pefect, but I really get confused.
When a character starts speaking, you should miss a line, eg. press enter twice then start to write the dialouge.
Hope I haven't annoyed you or anything, it's just I really want to read it, but I find it hard to keep my place. Tis still a good story, though!
~Evie
Author's Response:
Evie,
I will have a look to see if i can spot what you are saying. It should all be split up into paragraphs, and my paragraphs are never that big.
I hate reading large chunks of text as well so please come back and ready the story again tomorrow and i will hopefully have sorted any problem by then.
If not message me and we can talk more in-depth about what you see is wrong. Thank You!
That should be it sorted, so sorry!
Craig
lol, sorry, I meant a big chunk of text, not a bid cnk of text! Sorry to double post!!!
~Evie
Author's Response: Its cool
I love this story. I didn't like the idea of Harry getting tatoo's, but that's because I hate the damn things (long story...) but I liked the idea of Harry getting his hair died - very cool! I was a bit confused as to why Harry kept talking like Dumbledore, it's like he's grown up overnight. It's still a great story though!
Author's Response: Yea i knew everone would not like youngHarry getting tat\'s but i feeleach one represents something very important in his life.
I would hope Harry has grown up in my story, because tough times lie ahead.
YAY! I love this story - despite my constant moaning. Sorry, that's just how I am. I'm also really happy that Harry is calling Ginny honey, because I hate it when authors call her Gin(it's a drink!) or Love (makes him sound like a 50 year old perv!).
I really like the tension you built up with the brothers (because I just realised I didn't mention that in my other reviews) and also the whole Lily, James, Dumby & Sirius watching over him thing-me-bob. I'd like to see some more intimate moments between Harry and Ginny as well, because you do them so well.
Wow, I didn't complain about anything! Call the papers! Oh, wait, I did... but that was about other authors, so that doesn't matter ;)
/hyper rambalings
~Evie
Author's Response:
Evie,
I always look forward to your reviews because you put so much into them, so dont worry about complaining.
Intimate moments, hhmmm, not sure if there one in the next chapter you\'ll just have to wait and see, its posted for submission.
I am glad you like him using \"honey\" but he will also by using \"gin\", sorry. haha.
If you like the tension i built up with the brothers in this fic, wait till i post my other fic about Harry\'s sixth year, there is some good moments in that.
But for now i am concentrating on this fiction, glad your enjoying it, please keep reviewing.
Craig x
Wow, this poem is so moving and sad - you should be very proud of yourself! I can't write poetry myself, so I have little interest in it but I clicked on yours by accident and I'm so glad I did. I love how the only colour you describe is rose red, which I think is very clever. I'd have liked to have seen who killed her but apart from that I loved it!
Author's Response: Thank you!!!! Her killer was not that important to the poem and I had no idead how I would have fit him in!!! Thank you for the rev!!!
I love this chapter but... I'm sure I've read it before... and I think that he goes and meets Voldie and Voldie tells him that he's on his side really and Lupin and the others were tricking him...
I'm probably thinking of another fic - anyways, I love this story; I particually like Harry's reactions to the photographs.
Author's Response: NO! Don\'t say anything else, hun. This is that story, but it was deleted. So I had to start over. Go to my profile for the full story. But PLEASE say no more! Everyone, disregard this review. PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the review, though.
~Moony ; )
Oh. But Ginny said no. I'm confused - why?
Author's Response: Dum-da-dummm.... She said no? I\'d take it that way if I was Harry. It will all make sense in the end. (2 more chapters to go!) Thanks DFTn\'s! ~Patrony :)
Pre-DH
2010: Ahaa, God, I just took another look at this story and, uh...the only defense I have is that I was a lot younger when I wrote it. Whew.
This is such a good fic, you have the characters nailed. I find it really difficult to write Ginny but you've written her so well! Just a hint though, in England, Soccer is called football (we don't have American football with funny rugby ball and massive shoulder pads ;) ) although I was so happy to see that you have written "Mum" instead of "Mom"!
~Evie
Author's Response: haha, yeah, i realized that--i changed it for the next chapter.
That has got to be the most derranged fic I've ever read - I love it!! A bit confusing but that's to be expected in a fic containing Voldemorts Deathpants and... er... a Quidditch match against Death Eaters...
Author's Response: Why thank you! I take pride in having my writing called \'deranged!\' I know it\'s confusing... it was written in Round Robin format! Eek! Cheers!
--Schmergo (Schmerg_The_Impaler)
Author's Response:
Mind_Over_Matter : I know, it\'s crazy, huh? We tried to get it running relatively smoothly, and I think it worked out mostly alright.
But the story itself was bound to be a little crazy. What with the initial premise of the Order vs. the Death Eaters. And the fact that Schmergo was on the team ^^ *Luvv*
lol, I loved the Mr Picket character, he's a Rita Skeeta in the making. I would have liked to have seen some of his report though... Still great story - it's going on my favorites list!
So sad! This fic is so full of emotion - you should be very proud of yourself!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Beautiful! You gave such fantastic descriptions and you captured the emotions of each Founder wonderfully! I loved the whole colour thing at the end! It really makes you think!
Author's Response: Yes, it does make you think, doesn\'t it? ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
I am so happy that you posted this. My dad works with children with autism and I agree that not enough people know about it or understand it. This fic clearly shows that you understand it and can write it in a realistic way. I'm writing an autism fic at the moment and it also has Harry's daughter as autistic (I swear I'm not copying from you! Great minds think alike, eh?) and, although I'm having a little difficulty with it, It really is rewarding.
~Evie
Author's Response: Hello, Evie!
Thank you very much for stopping by to let me know all that! You know, this story had a little bit of problem to get past the queue, primarily due to the sensitive topic. That\'s why, as an advice, I\'d suggest you to think and write it carefully (not that you weren\'t! :) ). If you want, you can send it to me and I\'ll beta it for you (I\'m a beta by the way, heh). However, I know that someone with your experience will probably do a great job!
And thank you very much! It\'s great to hear that the fic portrays it in a realistic way. My writing style is always a little bit different from what you\'d expect (with all the comparison of the stars and all), so I\'m glad that you liked it!
Thanks very much for sharing your opinion, and as I said, if you need help with your fic, please do let me know!
~Astro
Ahhh! Poor Harry!! It seemed like a really happy, fluffy, cheery fic at first but it was so sad at the end! I loved it; you've done really well, I was pratically in tears at the end.
~Evie
Ahhh! Such a sweet, fluffy fic! Really good, I thought you caught James' character very well, wasn't so sure about Lily though; I wouldn't have thought she'd just suddenly fancie him, I thought it would be a bit like Harry/Ginny, she wouldn't notice that she did for ages until something drastic happened. Still very good though!
Author's Response: Yeah, maybe I shoud have made that more clear. She had started liking James before but that wasn\'t included in the story. She didn\'t begin to fancy him at the beginning. THanks though!
I really love this fic; you captured Ginnys emotions and pain very well. I thought it was a little cliche that she went to salem but it was still a really good plot line and you made it your own. Well done!
Author's Response: Is it cliched? i haven\'t read any other stories where that happened...regardless, it had to be to fit with the song, so I guess I\'ll settle for being a little cliched. Thank you for reviewing!
i liked this fic! i thought the way people thought of her was excellent, you really caught her frustration and anger. Hope to see the next chapter up soon!
Author's Response: thank you very much! I\'m so glad the frustration/anger/annoyance is coming through! I\'m getting the next chapter up...it\'s currently going back and forth between myself and my wonderful beta reader. Hopefully it\'ll be ready for submission within the next week or so!