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Passion, Pain, and Pumpkin Pasties by beauty and brains
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Ever wonder how Ron and Hermione really got together? How constant fighting seemed to lead to a romance? What happens when a letter to a certain Durmstrang student sends a certain Gryffindor over the edge? Join Ron and Hermione on the night they came together, and the pumpkin pasties that seem to get in the way. All told from Colin Creevey’s point of view, of course!
Date: 06/28/07 Title: Chapter 1: Passion, Pain, and Pumpkin Pasties
Aw, that was so cute! =)
Colin is one of my favorite minor characters, and you really did him justice in this. Using his viewpoint of the fight was a really original way to write about Ron and Hermione, especially since their fight scenes are written so much in fanfic. His comments made me laugh out loud, especially the bit about Hermione’s hair crackling. And the fact that he ate Pumpkin pasties the whole time was very cute.
I also really enjoyed your opening paragraph – Colin’s observations immediately caught my attention, and the description gave me a distinct image of the Common Room in my head.
And speaking of paragraphs, the ending few were perfect. Ron’s way of making Hermione ‘prove it’ was priceless, and incidentally, something I really wish would happen in the books. Having Harry come in at the last moment was a nice touch, and the very last line was a great way to tie in all the pumpkin pasty eating. =)
I do have a few tiny nit-picks:
The crackling of the fire was growing lower and lower as the night inched on, and many people had to result to the Lumous Spell for a greater light. Lumous should be changed to Lumos.
“All you have ever done is turn your back on me. I just wanted to let you know,” she sobbed, “That next time, I won’t be behind you waiting.” First off, this is one of my favorite lines in this fic. I love that Hermione sort of calls out Ron on how much he’s ignored her, and gives him an ultimatum. When I was reading this part, I couldn’t wait to see Ron’s response. The second thing, is that the ‘that’ after sobbed should have a lower case t.
Well, awesome one-shot - it was exciting, original, and very sweet. I loved it! =)
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! =]
You know, I noticed when I reread the series for my now 12th time that in CoS, we read a lot about Colin. After the second book though, we rarely hear from him, except when he retrieves Harry from class for the Weighing of the Wands ceremony. I enjoyed reading about him, but all we ever saw of the boy was in his younger years, when he was a crazed Harry fan. I always wondered what he would have been like in Harry\'s sixth or seventh year, when he would have matured greatly.
I\'m really glad you enjoyed this little one-shot. I wrote it ages ago but finally just decided to publish it to MNFF, and so far it has gone over really well. I\'m super proud of it, it\'s my little humour baby.
Thanks for the help! I find readers who use constructive critisism very helpful, because they can add so much to my writing! I\'m off to edit right now!
Thanks again for reading! =]
Always Watching by joybelle423
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: He was a Slytherin, she knew, one of the infamous Blacks. Emmeline had caught him staring at her a few times, but she knew he was only trying to make her feel uncomfortable. A lesser girl would have been, but Emmeline was only mildly amused by his attempt. It would take much more than a pair of dark, unblinking eyes to unsettle her.
Written for Marie/electronicquillster for the hprare_exchange of spring 2007 on LiveJournal.
Date: 07/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: Always Watching
Wow, that was great!
I loved that you made Emmeline such a real character. Normally she only pops up in fanfic as one of Lily's best friends or something, so this was a very refreshing read. Her reactions to Regulus watching her were very realistic, especially moving around her cauldron to take a peek at him. I think it sounds exactly like what a teenage girl would do. That and blushing. =)
Regulus was great, too. He was wonderfully mysterious, and I could just picture him smirking when he turned the tables on Emmeline when she confronted him. It was also nice to see him and Sirius getting along, and I loved that Sirius called him Arcturus. The one thing about that is wouldn’t Emmeline be confused as to why Sirius called him that ? I know there was no one else around, so she would know it was Regulus, but I would have thought she would have been curious about the name. Just a thought, though.
Completed? Does this have to be just a one-shot? I was hoping we’d find out what happened in Hogsmeade… Well, in any case, this was an awesome fic, so I’m very glad I saw it on the ‘Most Recent’ list. =)
Loneliness by VivienneNimue
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: This is the story of Tom Marvolo Riddle. It is a tale of Love, loss, betrayal and murder. This is why the man they call Voldemort became what he is today.
Date: 11/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: How it all began
Wow, powerful ending - having Merope know she was going to die built up to it nicely.
One thing, Then everything went black as my last breathe escaped my body. That 'breathe' should be 'breath.'
Looks like the next chapter will be from Tom's POV, right? Can't wait to see what happens. =)
Author's Response: Thanks, I haven\'t updated at all yet, but I am planning on doing so soon. So Keep an eye out!
A Woman Scorned by Hypatia
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: She offered him her love and he rejected her. She had been willing to offer him anything but he destroyed all that she held dear. However, a daughter of the house of Black does not sit idly by, wallowing in self-pity. No, she bides her time and strikes when he is weakest.
Nominated for the 2007 Quicksilver Quills Best History/Mystery Story!
Date: 10/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: What's in a Name?
This is really great! The plot is so original, and from the first flashback you had me hooked.
I loved the way you wove in all the characters from the Black family tree, and I can't say I blame Regina for not wanting to be called Walburga.
One of my favorite parts was when Tom and Regina were figuring out I am Lord Voldemort. We already knew he started using it at school, but it was interesting to see how he could have come up with it.
Great first chapter! =)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m really glad you enjoyed it and thank you for your thoughtful review!
Never Ordinary by harrypotterfangirl21
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Tom Marvolo Riddle hated the ordinary. He never thought of himself as “normal”, and didn’t want to be remembered as such. Normality was for other people, Tom had decided, he was destined for greatness. And he would go to any lengths to achieve those means…
A partial account of Tom’s life at the orphanage he so hated, showcasing the most important events of his childhood.
Nominated twice for Best General Story in the 2007 QSQs!
Date: 09/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Good Day
Interesting first chapter! I almost never see fics about Tom’s childhood, so this is definitely very original. I’m intrigued. =)
First of all, I loved how you characterized Tom! I think you kept him very close to what we saw of him acting like in the books, as well as adding your own spin to his character. In the beginning I even felt sorry for him – something I don’t normally do. He seemed like just a little boy who wanted someone to notice him. The sympathy didn’t last long though, as the story subtly shifts from making you feel sorry for Tom, to being able to see how creepy he can be, especially when he kills the rabbit. The way you wrote that scene, and also the ending line, were very powerful; I nearly had shivers.
This line also really stood out to me - No one ever remembered Tom. Not yet, anyway. I really liked that sentence, and I think it foreshadows very well what type of person Riddle’s going to become. It also fits with the title about him never wanting to be ordinary, even when he’s so young.
I also liked how you slipped in the characters we saw in HBP. It was nice to see Mrs. Cole and Billy get a personality, and I’m interested to see how their characters will play into the storyline.
Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review! ^_^ I do almost feel sorry for Tom in the beginning when everyone forgets him and nobody likes him, but as soon as he killed that rabbit I lost all of my sympathy. Thanks again for the review! (It made me smile!)
Six Roses by Vindictus Viridian
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Lillian Howell, sixth year Ravenclaw, is one of Hogwarts' entrants in the Triwizard tournament. She travels to Durmstrang to face conundrums, explore new friendships, and dare that biggest mystery of all -- boys!
This was an entry in the Triwizard challenge by Vindictus Viridian of Ravenclaw House. Everything and a hamster Animagus may occur within these screens.
Date: 08/08/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Ooh, we meet some boys. =) Lillian is such a great character so far, and I can't wait to see what the tasks are.
Date: 08/06/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Yay! I just finished A Different Sort of Peace / Happy Christmas, so I was wondering if we'd see Lillian (and the Christmas baby) again. I'm very intrigued so far, and can't wait to see what happens next! Loved the McGonagall bit, by the way. =)
Shades of Black by megan_lupin
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Sirius Black: A son, a brother; a friend, a Marauder; a prisoner, a fugitive, a godfather. Many roles were played by Sirius, most veiled with tragedy or loss ... But even in dark night skies, there are stars that shine bright.
A short story collection dedicated to Padfoot.
Date: 09/07/07 Title: Chapter 1: Part I: Didn't Do It
Wow, this was really great. I’m looking forward to the next chapters. =) I really love Sirius fics, and the ones that explore his childhood are so interesting.
I think you wrote all the characters spot-on. Each young character fit their older personality very well. Bella’s ability to lie and manipulate was perfect, and Narcissa’s readiness to go along with what others say was great too.
My favorite part, though, was the ending. I thought the repetition of the I didn’t do it was chilling.
A few things –
I did notice the absence of Andromeda. Bella’s twelve, so I’d assume it’s not because she’s at Hogwarts, because Bella would be there too. It’s not a big thing, but even an offhand comment about why Andromeda isn’t there – maybe she doesn’t want to play with her younger cousins – would be a nice addition.
“Regulus,” interrupted Mrs Black, not even bothering to spear Sirius another glance… Do you mean ‘spare’ rather than ‘spear’?
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this; it seemed like a missing moment from canon.
- Melissa =)
Author's Response: Well, firstly, thank you for the review, Melissa. Yeah, Sirius-centric stories are the best, as far as I'm concerned, and his childhood is an interesting thing to explore. There's so little that's really *known*, but there's enough to sort of piece a general picture together, I think.
Ah, young!Bella is *so* much fun to write - so it's good to hear she seemed IC.
As for Andromeda's absence ... I hadn't really thought of that, of figuring out why she wasn't there - hmm? (And yes, I *did* mean 'spare'. Should really go back and fix that.
~Megan
Ubi Amor, Ibi Dolor by Hermione_Rocks
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Long before Lucius and Narcissa were wed, he was engaged to another: Narcissa's elder sister, Andromeda. This is the story of how Lucius Malfoy and Andromeda Black's relationship fell apart -- the story of how Andromeda didn't run away from her family because she was in love with a Muggleborn, but because she was in love with a pureblood she knew she could never realistically be in a relationship with.
Ubi Amor, Ibi Dolor is Latin for: Where there is love, there is pain. DH Spoilers and Sexual Situations are both VERY minor, but just in case.
Date: 11/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Differences
Well, since you had me all intrigued with your one-shot, I thought I'd pop on over here and see what prompted it. I'm glad I did, too. =) This is such an interesting idea - that Andromeda and Lucius had a relationship. I don't think I've ever read anything like it before.
I like Andromeda's character a lot so far, and poor her, falling into the fountain. The little bit we saw of Cissy was good too - I've always thought they would've been friends.
=)
Author's Response: Glad you\'re enjoying this, I had entirely too much fun with this story while writing. :) And yes, Andy is a little klutzy -- Tonks had to get her clumsiness from somewhere, yes? *giggles* Thanks for another review!
Ashes by Nadia Malfoy
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: She doesn't run. She can't run. She doesn't have anywhere to run to.
She is just a part of the wall.
Date: 11/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Wow, the ending was a surprise. I wasn't sure who was telling the story. Anyway, I really liked this. It was very different and original, and some of the lines were just so chilling. The bit about the bird being caught was - I don't know if lovely is the right word - haunting or fitting, I think. Great job.
Author's Response: Sorry it\'s taken me so long to respond!
I\'m glad you were surprised by the ending -- I was sort of going for the shock factor. I\'m not quite sure where the idea came from for this story, but I was feeling sort of down when I wrote it -- looking back, it seems very dark.
Glad you liked it! ~Nadia
The Marauderbury Tales by erikthephantom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A loving rip-off of Chaucer's great Canterbury Tales, the Marauders are here the merry travelers, set out on a mysterious training exercise by Mad-Eye Moody. Read as they struggle to survive without magic and enjoy as they attempt to entertain each other with magically enhanced story-telling.
Date: 11/29/07 Title: Chapter 2: The Potter's Tale
Haha, loved James's story! This idea is so creative, and the rhymes at the beginning are great, too.
Hope you update soon - I want to know who's next! :D
The Mattering Report File: Sirius Black by dancingwithneville
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Sirius Black left behind a journal leaving important evidence about his life but will Head Mattering accept this and will the Wizarding world finally know the truth about the pure blood who had gone mad?
Date: 11/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Part One The First Entry
This is really interesting so far! I love the switches between Head Mattering and the journal entries. Can't wait to see where this goes from here. =)
Author's Response: Thank you! I just sent off the second chapter to my wonderful Beta reader so I\'m hoping to have the next chapter before December 1st...no promises but I will try!
A Little More Time by Pallas
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Was it possible to save two lives in the past without altering history? Was it possible to give his parents a future twenty years after they had supposedly died? Teddy Lupin thought so...
Date: 10/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Watching
Wow, this is so great! I love the plot and the way you've written all the characters. Can't wait until your next update. =)
As Shadows Fall by FullofLife
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang but a whimper.
—T.S. Eliot, "The Hollow Men" (1925)
‘My name’s Sirius,’ he said. ‘Sirius Black. I killed my wife.’
The Dark Lord’s hold over the British Empire has grown, his armies now stronger and more numerous than ever. The mere mention of his name strikes terror into the heart of witches and wizards all over the world. Shadows are beginning to fall, hope beginning to fade. Albus Dumbledore is doing his best to muster his own army. Unbeknownst to all, a Prophecy is about to be made – one that will change the course of the future forever.
Yet in some places, small joys can be found, in the midst of heartbreak. Sirius Black is mourning for his dead wife, when he meets a young girl, just out of Hogwarts. Will he allow her into his life? Will she allow him into hers?
Marauder-Era. Sirius/OC, James/Lily, Peter/OC. Warning will be changed along the course of the story.
Date: 10/28/07 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Well, you’ve got my attention! =D
It was a really good start. Your narrator seems very interesting, and Sirius was intriguingly mysterious. I can’t wait to see where you’re going with the plot.
One thing - in this paragraph:
‘You see, I’m a murder,’ he said, smiling slightly at the look I was giving him, as he got to his feet and dusted off his robes.
‘A murderer?’ I said, amazed. He looked nothing like a murder. Murders didn’t have straight noses and aristocratic good-looks — they had club feet!
You ‘murder’ instead of ‘murderer’ a couple of times. Just a minor thing.
Great job - I’ll be looking for your next update! =)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for picking out the mistakes! I fixed them. :) And thanks for the review, glad you liked the chapter.
Love & Misery: The Trials of Truth and Lies by lullaby BANG
Rated: Professors •Summary: You’re holding her heart in the palm of your hand. Squeeze it slightly, and you’re killing her; let it go, and she’s lost all hope.
For Sirius and Clarimonde, it wasn’t cliché the day they ran into each other, it was fate. What becomes more surprising is that Clarimonde is a Slytherin, something which Sirius has detested since his emergence in the world. But something kept them together, and it wasn’t just their hate for Regulus that bound them together, it was what they knew, and truly (and in a cliché sense), the love they felt for each other. But what happens when the Slytherin side of Clarimonde shows through? What happens when Sirius bashes everything her house stands for? What happens when Clarimonde is being taunted by demons that won’t let her go? Can their relationship last even when she thinks its cliché, and he thinks its fate, even though it has transpired into this crazy little thing called love?
Date: 12/13/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: One Sided
Yay, yay, yay! It's up! I love this chapter.
You're wonderful. =)
Author's Response: And I just sent you a PM about this. Ha. It\'s finally up! Yay time to celebrate!
Trying to Pretend by Hermione_Rocks
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: What was supposed to be a calm dinner date ends up being much more emotional and rocky for both Lucius Malfoy and Andromeda Black.
Takes place sometime during Chapter Two of Ubi Amor, Ibi Dolor, but will still probably make sense if you haven't read UAIB first.
Date: 11/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: Trying to Pretend
Well, I haven't read your chaptered story, but this made sense. And, I'll definitely be checking out said chaptered story in a few moments. =) Anyway, I really liked this. I loved the dialogue between Andromeda and Lucius - you could see they cared for each other, but also the differences that will (most likely) cause problems between them. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the nice review! :D I love this pairing, and it\'s nice to know I might be persuading others . . . or at least spreading the idea. ;)
A Little Lighter Than Black by kritchen
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: From the ancient and noble house of Black to the obscurity of being Muggleborn, seventh year just promised to be another school year, although their last. Andromeda is testing her boundaries and the limits placed upon her. She's rebelling a bit from the ideals that she was brought up with. Ted is just living in the moment, still trying to decide what he wants to be. Fighting with habitual messiness and lack of organization, the cheerful, happy-go-lucky Hufflepuff soon finds himself in the midst of something he hadn't expected. Two unlikely characters, a spark of life, and the awkwardness of repeated encounters leads to more than they expected out of their seventh year.
I'm sorry for the long wait for the next chapter. It's finally finished. I graduated high school in 2010 and then entered college. It was quite a stressful time and quite the transition. I also lost the chapter once when my computer crashed. I had struggled with it for so long (writer's block) and when it was almost done, there it went into technological oblivion. I was so frustrated, I couldn't bring myself to try rewriting it until recently.
Date: 12/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Curiosity Killed The Cat
Yay for tiny Andromeda/Ted moments! I loved all their glances and smiles - it was very cute. :)
Anyway, you've done a great job of fleshing out Ted's character so far. All of his quirks makes him seem like a real person, and his narration is very easy to read. And I really like that he and Aveline seem comfortable around each other; it makes it believable that they're best friends.
Well, now I'm off to the next chapter. I want to see if Ted's about to find himself in a bit of trouble... *clicks* :)
Author's Response: Lol. Thanks for all the compliments. I tried my best to get across both flaws and strengths, as well as relationships. :] I\'m glad you\'re enjoying this so far.
Date: 12/30/07 Title: Chapter 2: Jealousy Becomes Him
It was a little bit of a surprise when it's Andromeda narrating this chapter, but I really liked the change. It's cool to see both her and Ted's point of view and what they think about each other.
I really like the way you write Andromeda, too. Her descriptions of life at home and of her life at Hogwarts seem like they could be canon. Her "relationship" with Raphael, who seems like the biggest jerk ;), is an interesting twist, and I'm excited to see what's going to happen with him next. That last line looks pretty promising.
I'm very much enjoying this story so far! :)
Author's Response: Haha. Well when I began thinking about writing this, I realized I didn\'t want to write in third person. I almost always write in first person anyways. However, I couldn\'t see writing from just one point of view. Andromeda kept popping up and stating her views so I let her have it. :]
I rather thought throwing Raphael in was cliche but I was willing to take the risk. I rather saw her family setting her up early on in life like they did in the old days with royal families.
Date: 12/31/07 Title: Chapter 3: Damsels in Distress and Knights-In-Shining-Armor
Go Ted! I kept waiting for him to get up and take out Raphael, and I was very happy that when he punched him. :)
I love that Sirius gave Andromeda the star pin, and her comment about him was sad and sweet at the same time.
Update soon, please! I want to see if Ted ends up with that reward kiss. :)
Author's Response: These are the best comments. It\'s awesome to see how well the readers are connecting with the characters. :] I\'ve sent the fourth chapter to my betas but I fear they\'re both on vacation. So as soon as I get that back and make the changes, you can expect a new chapter. :]
Matarse by Colores
Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Summary: The green light is the most powerful light of all. Many lives have been lost to the curse of the green light. One man on Halloween is about to learn what happens to those that try to control the green light.
Date: 02/09/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Wow, that was great! The writing style was something I really haven't seen before, and the originality of it made it very interesting to read.
That one symbolizes death, death, the absence of life, death, the loss of life, death, the loss of light as one is consumed by eternal darkness. This line in particular is so haunting; it was one of my favorites. I loved the way you repeated death throughout the sentence.
One thing I noticed: He watched it pass through James Potters’ body... Your apostrophe should be in between the 'r' and the 's.' But that's just a minor thing.
Oh, and Matarse - is that Spanish for 'to kill oneself'? My translation could be off, but in any case, the title caught my attention!
Great job! :)