I'm Jennifer. I write fics for your enjoyment (well, mostly my own, but I hope you enjoy it too).
Awww... I loved it! It was so sweet and cutesy, especally when they kissed! i felt myself going red for Lily! (and kissing james... *drools*) it was so great!
hahaha! 'a particularly foul blast-ended skrewt'! i loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!
Another amazing chapter! it was great! do you think you could put in a truth for me? My name is Jennifer, I'm a Ravenclaw and ask her who she has a crush on! Then her answer is Todd P. And then they kiss... OK, you dont have to put the last bit in! But could you do it?
Author's Response: Sure, I can do it! I\'m not sure if I can put on the kissing part tho. I\'m sorry if it doesn\'t make it in.
aww... that was so sad! i had tears in my eyes!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! You have no idea how much that means to me. :)
Harry and Ginny and the Weasleys believe this.
This is why they send their poor Hermione to her granny’s cottage in Ireland on February twenty-ninth, Leap Year, hoping she could also leap back to life and perhaps to love once more, five years after losing Ron in the war.Hermione doesn't know it, but her parents and the Weasleys plus Harry are not content seeing her slaving away with paperwork and living by routine with a dead look in her eyes.
In Ireland, amidst the hills and the romantic whispering of the mountain breeze and the sea, in the handsome seaside village of Ardmore, someone is waiting for her.…someone waiting for something to complete his own return to life.
Someone named Andrei MacElroy...or so he claims.This had been entered into the New Year Challenge At the Sign of the Green Dragon and won 2nd Place (insert very undignified *squee* here).
Rave reviews. Not your usual Dramione fic. The sequel is up. ~Then Somebody Bends~
I completely forgot I started reading this! Sorry, Joanna! *hugs*
I should stop reading, though. You’re trying to make me like Dramione, aren’t you? :]
Draco’s personality really shone through in this chapter. You characterize him brilliantly! I laughed so much at him trying not to be a jerk to Hermione, when that was all he knew how to do.
“Have I done something, Andrei?”
“Er, no. Sorry.” He’d been saying that a lot lately.
I loved that part. It would be really hard for Draco to apologise to someone he’s hated since he met them, and you managed to convey the awkwardness really well. I don’t think you ever see Draco apologise in canon, because of his pride and arrogance. I’d imagine he would be humbled after the war, though.
It’s really good how you’ve made Draco put on a disguise, because one of the reasons I don’t usually like D/Hr is because I can’t see Hermione falling in love with Draco just like that. After al the enmity between them, it’s just not possible. But this way she can let herself get close to him, and I don’t think she would do that if she knew it really was Draco.
Okay, I’m rambling. xD
But you really put him in the most awkward situation, Joanna. Draco Malfoy surrounded by happy Irish people and Hermione Granger. That’s just plain mean!
So I’m guessing that the baby Ron is just a freakish coincidence? It does seem a bit far-fetched to me, though. I can’t really imagine Hermione just happening to be related to a baby with red hair named Ron.
… if not Aunt Patty’s friend, Deidre.
… but it was slushing so much my friend Diedre …
You spelt Deidre wrong in the second line, sweetie. :]
I can’t wait to read the rest!
Jen
Author's Response: Thank you so much, my dear sweet lil baby triplet! *evil grin* So you\'re turning into a Dramione shipper slowly and unwillingly?
will edit the misspelling when I make the time. It\'s hard right now cos the final drafts of this fic are not here in the pc but in my laptop. I haven\'t even changed the \'vacation\' to \'holiday\', see?
*huggles*I need to remember to read this, Joanna!
I cried. Poor Ron. :[
I knew that he was dead, but it was only in this chapter that you wrote about it very emotionally. The stream scene was amazing, though. You write so beautifully.
Draco just keeps getting better and better. I adore him! It’s so funny to watch him force himself not to like Hermione. It’s so sweet to see Draco actually care about someone, even if he was made to by Harry.
I like how Harry and Draco are kind of friends, though.
I’ll give you a whole cake when my child is born.
That part made me crack up laughing. A whole cake. He makes it sound so much better than half a cake! :] Sorry, Joanna. Couldn’t resist.
It’s great how you’ve made Harry seem so happy about having a child. I know he was writing to his former worst enemy about his dead best friend’s birthday at three in the morning, but he still seemed happy! The letter was just so cheerful.
Give Draco two weeks at least. He’s that slow.
Um … I thought nobody knew that Draco was Andrei? Jack, Kathy and Aunt Patty call him Andrei every other time, and I thought they thought he really was Andrei MacElroy. Correct me if all that’s wrong, but it made me a little confused.
Jen
Author's Response: Oh my, I\'m always so happy to see I got a new review from you, Jen. *squish* Thank you for devoting time for TLLA. You are making me relive all the delight I was in while writing this. And my goodness, you and you alone spotted that glitch with Jack! How can I not have seen that?! Thank you for spotting it, my girl! *another squish*
Two reviews in one night! I'm on a roll! :]
The Cuppycake Song is an actual song? I never would’ve thought. :]
This was my favourite chapter so far. I feel so sorry for poor Hermione, telling them about Ron.
Blenkinsop Waterbut is very strange, but he has an awesome name. :] And is it just me, or have I heard of a pub called the Green Dragon before? The name rings a bell.
And for the second time in less than a half-hour, too, his heart made that weird jump, his stomach made that weird twitch and his breath forgot to flow smoothly.
Draco is in lurve! I knew it wouldn’t take long. When Aunt Patty was telling Hermione about finding a man that challenges her, I couldn’t stop thinking about Draco. Dramione actually does make a lot of sense if you think about. Which I try not to do. :] But despite that … Joanna, I think you’ve converted me. Are you happy now?
My wild imagination thinks that Ginny will barge in on Hermione when she kisses Draco, if she ever does. Imagine that. :]
Please to drink your sour buttercream. It’ll do you good.
I think that should be please do.
I love this story!
Jen
Author's Response: *happy dance* I have converted thee?
Hmm, the Green Dragon-- Jan specifically named it in the Challenge prompt (as is the name Blenkinsop Waterbut), and isn\'t it also in LOTR?
\'Please TO\' is intended; it\'s an archaic phrasing.Jen, I\'d have loved to work with your wild imagination while I was writing this! *grins*
Joanna! *tacklehugs*
Can you believe it? I’m reading D/Hr.
*gasps*
This was really good! I loved the description of Ireland. I’ve always wanted to go there. I haven’t read the Gallagher trilogy, but if they’re anywhere as beautiful as your writing, I will have too.
I loved how you characterised the post-war Draco, even if this was written before DH. He’s still Draco, but not complete jerk Draco. I love him. *pets*
When you did all that plus take care of an ailing cat …
That line made me laugh. Was it supposed to? It did anyway. :]
The little Ron is so cute. I’m very intrigued to find out whose son he is!
This isn’t that great of a review, but I still have 6 other chapters to make them better. Methinks you will turn me into a Dramione shipper. I’m scared.
~Jen
Author's Response: *is grinning manically*
Well, you won\'t be the first to be converted, my dear baby triplet! I was, too, long ago!
*tacklehugs back* Thank you so much for reading, hon! There\'s a sequel! *wink*That was heaps funny! I really enjoyed it. Short and sweet, my favourite! I've always wondered about that, but somehow I didn't think it would be Mad-Eye. But he never seemed to be the girl-puller to me, I thought he would've been really tough even while he was at school.
You don't see many historical fics around like this, and it was really well-written. It's an interesting concept, and you pulled it off excellently. I liked Widow, she was a great example of what witch-hunters were probably looking for back then.
I laughed when I saw the name Potter. You really love them, don't you?
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! It\'s not often I get reviews for this one, so double thanks, and I\'m glad you enjoyed it! I didn\'t really pick the Potters because their descendant would be James (although, now you mention it ...) I mostly picked them because I know they\'re an old wizarding family which is mostly pureblood, as far as we know. They just seemed the obvious choice, really. But in answer to your question ... I guess I do. =D
I really like this story! It's a little different to most of yours, but it's still heaps good. I love how Lily talks to her conscience, I do that sometimes too! I loved it!
And for the record Idiot of ravenclaw, James WAS a Head Boy. Hagrid says so in the first book.
Sorry, just had to put that in.
Author's Response: My point exactly. =D Don\'t worry, me and Idiot of Ravenclaw get on okay really, we just have these little debates sometimes. On another note, I\'m really glad you liked this! I mutter to myeslf a lot of the time when I\'m angry, but I\'m not talking to my conscience, mostly I\'m just muttering to myself. Thanks so much for the review! Yay!
that was amazing! i really liked it! i thought i hadread it before but then i read it and i realised i hadn't. the last line was so sweet
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
I liked that ... very fluffy! It was really sweet, though. One of the best poems I've read!
Author's Response: :P What can I say, I like fluff. Thanks for the review; I\'m glad you liked it!!!
Here’s a nice SPEW Buddy review for you, Anna.
First of all, this story is so unique. I have never come across a fanfic featuring an illegitimate child before, and you’ve managed to tie it into the Potterverse so well, despite the nature of the books. Lucius is the ideal character for this story, and you’ve kept him really IC. The setting of this story, in a perfect, pureblood household, is just perfect. It’s a collision waiting to happen.
I really like the title of your fic. It just grabs your eye immediately. I really envy people who can think up such great titles for things, because mine are always appalling. :]
Grace is such a fabulous character. In the first part of the prologue, she seemed so mysterious and elusive, but in this chapter she seems to have let her guard down, and she has a nicer, motherly side to her. It’s actually very like full Veelas, but I don’t know if you did that on purpose or not.
You have a very interesting way of writing. I don’t really know how to explain it, but it’s just so different to what you normally see. I don’t mean that in a bad way, though. It’s wonderful, and you capture the scene and the characters really well. If I didn’t know, I would never have been able to tell that English wasn’t your first language.
An odd, most unfamiliar, feeling of gloom came upon him as he watched the scroll blacken, crumple and disappear.
This is what I mean. You describe everything so vividly, and it makes your writing amazing. I loved this line. It’s the little details like this that draw me into a story, and make me want to read on.
I’m really interested to see where this fic is headed. I want to know what you’re going to do with Lucas. I can’t imagine someone never knowing their father, and then not having any interest at all in seeing him. It doesn’t seem like Grace has badmouthed Lucius or anything, so surely Lucas would want to meet him? I know I would. Then again, with Lucius and Grace as his parents, he’s going to be a very unusual character.
Anyway, this is an amazing story so far, Anna, and I don’t have a word of criticism. At least now I’m not the only SPEWer left who hasn’t read this fic! :]
~Jen
This was very surprising! I was not expecting it to be Harry and Pansy and Draco and Hermione’s children when I read the summary.
It’s a very interesting pairing you’ve got here, though. Usually fics that are based around Potter and Malfoy pairings are filled with conflict between the parents and the children to begin with, but I like how you’ve done this. Short and sweet.
However, I think you could have done much more with this fic than you have. You write very well, but I think the plot could have been expanded another 500 or so words, and it would be much more enjoyable to read. You seem to rush through things. When Triton hesitates before entering the garden, he’s really nervous, but then barely a minute later he’s asking her out. That doesn’t seem very plausible.
Also, you don’t really explain much about why they’re becoming friends again. I can’t really see them sitting in the garden and becoming friends straightaway, after all the time they’ve spent apart from each other, even if they used to be really close.
I think you should put more detail into the fic. You have it in some places, but in other places it’s lacking. Spread it out a little. Detail is what draws readers in. If everything you’ve written is just to get to the end of the story, it becomes a little boring. Maybe you could put in how worried Triton is about her reaction when he asks her out, or how pleased Estelle is.
Your dialogue is excellent, though. I laughed aloud when Triton started to babble on about his crush. It was very cute. It all seems so lifelike, and you can imagine them saying it in real life.
The last paragraph was absolutely breathtaking, especially the final line. I love it when stories end so beautifully, because it lingers in your mind long after you finish reading. It was a wonderful choice of words, and I loved how you referred back to the garden.
Well done!
~Jennifer
Author's Response: I know it’s pretty short; plot has never been one of my strong points. ;) Plus, this was for a fic exchange, and I was working with a deadline. I know that\'s not an excuse, though. =] I really like your suggestions. I should go back and add to it and flesh it out more. I realize that there are definitely problems with it, but I’m glad you enjoyed it anyway. Thanks so much for your review and for the advice, Jennifer!
Another great story! You must get sick of all my reviews being like this, but I don't have any criticisms to make about your fics. Sirius was hilarious in this story, and I love how you portrayed Peter as being a good friend and a Marauder, instead of an outsider like some people do. Because he was a marauder before he killed Lily and James, the little rat. *growls*
Anyway, I think this is probably one of the best fics you've written! Keep it up!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, that\'s so nice of you! Really! I\'m glad you liked it, and Sirius too, who is always a lot of fun. And thanks about the Peter thing, too, I\'m glad I finally seem to be able to pull him off. That took a LOT of practise ...
That was heaps good! At first I thought Ron to Hermione, then when you mentioned Herbology I thought it was Neville to Hermione, and then I was like: WHAT THE??? and cracked up laughing. Very, very good.
Author's Response: Thank you!
That was heaps funny! I was looking through your profile and I thought I had read all your stories but then I noticed this one! It was really good, I loved Sirius flirting with 'Kinky'. A bit weird, but funny.
I hate you and you smell bad,” James muttered.
I loved that line. You're a heaps good writer, I wish I was as good as you! But my stories just keep getting rejected... *sobs*
Great story! (I know I've said that about three times now but I had to say something to finish off the review!)
So... great story!
Author's Response: Lol, thanks, I\'m glad you liked it. If you want to be a good writer, my advice is basically just to write. All the time. Believe it or not, I had LOADS of stories that kept getting rejected when I first started. So, keep going is my advice. I\'m glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing!
I loved that! It was short and sweet. You wrote Harry's mortification in really well! The ending was great. Hmmm ... Remus in pyjamas, Tonks in pyjamas. I'm not even going to ask.
That was heaps funny! Poor Harry, imagine seeing your parents being locked in a broom cuboard together ... I can't wait 4 the next chapter!