I'm new, and only after reading this now. I love the song and I enjoyed the story. Knowing what's going to happen makes it very sad, espeically when Lupin comments on how great a godfather Sirius is. I think it would work better if you ended it before the 10 years later. While it's nice to know that Harry remembers it in some way I don't think that the other two add anything. Just my opinion.
I've really enjoyed the story so far and this chapter was worth the wait.
The story in general
I liked that James didn't trust Harry at first and that Sirus doesn't trust him. It makes it more believable. If you're involved in a war, even if you're a wizard, it's hard to believe that yo'r son (or in Sirus's case, godson) has come back in time. Especially when he has attacked your best friend. It was nice to see Harry build a relationship with his parents, and it would be like Remus to figure out the truth.
Now for chapter
It was surprising that it was Lily, and not James who reacted badly, and it will be interesting to find out how they react when they meet Peter. I don't think that Lily will be able to hold her temper.
Dumbledore's comment made me wonder about the effects of defeating Voldemort in this time, before he can attack Harry. So if Harry defeats Voldemort before returning I hope you do one chapter with Harry in his own time, and one showing how things worked out in the alternate timeline.
As annoyed as I am about the cliffhanger it leaves me wanting to read the next chapter. SO UPDATE SOON.
I enjoyed this chapter. I think that the way Harry taught the lesson was very realistic, especially after reading Deathly Hallows and Hermionie offering to take Rons place was in character for her.
The student teacher quidditich match was a good idea and what the students need to help them to relax in the dark times.
Good luck with your thesis. I hope it goes well for you.
This is a little "What If?" idea I had kicking around in my head. Since I don't think this is what JKR is going to do, I figured I might as well write it
I just want to say that I enjoyed the story. I think that seeing someone who resembled Lily would provke that kind of reaction in Petunia.
There's not much I can add. I think that it shows the aftermath of war very well.
I know it's late but I've just joined.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I\'m glad you think it shows the aftermath well. Thanks so much.
I'm guessing that the character speaking is Grindewald. I think you portrayed the scene well. He will win, but won't see his victory.
Author's Response: Yea, it\'s Grindelwald! Thanks for the review! And yay for you being the first to review... this fic\'s been up here for AGES... so... thanks for taking the time! And for saying I portrayed it well!
You really manage to convey the sense of loss in this story. From the first paragraph we can tell how upset Cedric’s mother is. Even the atmosphere conveys loss.
She cradled them as she had once cradled him, protected them as she had once protected him. Another line that shows us the loss.
Cedric leaves the Hall with Fleur and Viktor, followed shortly thereafter by Harry Potter. After a short bit, we all file out to the stadium. This bit just feels a bit awkward to me. Maybe you could rephrase it to something like Cedric leaves the hall with Fleur and Viktor. Shortly afterwards Harry Potter says goodbye to his friends and follows them. Minutes before the task is due to begin we all file out to the stadium.
I love how you have the flash back in first person present. It makes the events seem more immediate, rather than something that happened before. This shows how much she is still grieving for Cedric, and that the grief is still a large part of her life.
The lines immediately following the flash back had me close to tears, especially with her calling his name, like she had when she had first seen his body. It is very hard to get me that close to tears so you have once again done an excellent job conveying the emotions of Mrs. Diggory.
Hi. I just thought that I'd let you know that I enjoyed this story. Your summary is good, and enticed me to read the story.
I like how you write Ginny and Toms interaction. Especially how you have Tom show early on that he considers friends a weakness. I also like the way you write Ginny. Even with all this going on you show the qualities in her that we begin to see in Order of the Pheonix.
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you enjoyed it :)
I love Tonks' argument, and that she says she can understand why he is doing what he is.
I also liked her reaction to Sirus' death.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!!!! I'm so glad that you liked it!
I liked the chapter. I think that you captured Remus well. I also like the patronus you chose for Madame Pomfery.
A small nitpick is that I don't think that patronus communication was used outside the Order, unless she's telling someone in the Order who works at St. Mungo's.
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it.
Oh, okay... I wasn't thinking about that... thanks for pointing that out...
I like this chapter. The way you have Remus worrying about Tonks during the battle is realistic.
Author's Response: Thanks! I am glad that people find it to be real!
I like Remus' reaction here, and the chapter overall. Kingsley sneaking out to see them and asking about Remus holding Tonks' hand was a nice touch.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad that you like it. I'm glad that you think that those were good touches on this.
I'm really enjoying the story so far. I wonder how Michael/Archie will survive the dementor attack, and what happened to the other people on the list.
While the concept of the story is interesting I wondered why Michael
/Archie had to be given a new identity and sent away, but seeing the way his memory is returning I think I know why now.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing my story, and I am glad that you like it so far. Though I cannot offer any estimates as to when Chapter Five will be updated (for starters, I have to finish writing it!), I can say that the story gets more exciting and interesting – hopefully!
\r\n\r\nNow, what happens to Archer Price/Michael Cunningham? Well, as you correctly guessed, he does survive the Dementor attack; after all, it would be anti-climactic and just plain depressing if I ended the story at the conclusion of Chapter Four! Concerning what happened to the other soldiers on the casualty list… that is not all that important to the story, so make your own conclusions.
\r\n\r\nLater in the story, you will find out why the Obliviator did what he did to Archer, and he does in fact get his memory back eventually. However, that is less than half of the entire story! The finished product will be quite long, and I have absolutely no idea when I’ll finish it.
\r\n\r\nThanks again for reviewing my story. I am very glad that you like it! By the way, I apologise for the ugly “rn” tags – I have no control over them.
\r\n\r\nTim the Enchanter
\r\nI like how they still feel connected to the people that they knew or were in their previous lives. I wonder if Lillian will get t talk to Severus Snape's portrait and what he will say if she does?
I do think that Harry would have made sure that Severus' role in the war was well known, but maybe with time it was forgotten.
Author's Response: Yes, and there\'s a reason for those connections (which you obviously know, and they will be important later on). Your question about the portrait is a good one, but you\'ll have to wait and see what happens. :) I also think you\'re right about Harry making Severus\'s role well-known, but I also think that Harry was still prejudiced against him for those years of mistreatment and how much Snape disliked James. Harry Potter is, at this time, almost seventy years old, so lots of time has passed. Most people only remember the major heroes of the Second War, not the people who seemed to have been working for the other side all along. Thank you for your review, Elf! I really appreciate it! :) ~GG
I don't normally review for something that hasn't been updated in a while, but I like the start you have created here.
Elizabeth not wanting her mother to know how her life really is is something that I think would be typical for someone in her situation, and like the person we know from Muggling Along and Loss is the Colour of My True Love's Eye.
I want to know if you're going to update or has this been abandoned.
Author's Response: Not abandoned at all, and I have the rest of it written and it is in re-writing - then there will be a new version of Muggling Along which will follow Elizabeth up to the final battle or so. There are major portions of that written as well. Thanks for getting me off my duff - there should be an update within a week. and thanks for letting me know my character is consistent so far! I've been worrying about that!
Thanks again, PP
This shouldn't have been marked as complete. I'm enjoying the story, but the transition from the house to the train station was done too sharply. I think you should have shown more about the build up of the relationship between Jess and Star.
Author's Response: OMG! I totally didn\'t know it was marked as complete! I\'m not even near being finished; I guess I just spazzed out and pushed a button wrong, or something. Sorry sorry sorry! Geez, I feel stupid now...:S well, thanks a million for telling me.
I liked this chapter. I don't think that James would hang around with First Years though and I don't think that Gryffindors would leave with Comet on the loose.
I like the interaction between Star and her friends, and the fact that she has to work to be good at magic.
Hi. I love how you bring Albus, Rose and Scorpious into the story. I enjoyed the chapter. I can imagine her not being happy to hear her real name being used. I liked you putting Scorpious into Gryffindor. It will be interesting to see what happens.
aww Star falling asleep was so cute. So Albus got into Gryffindor. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
I like Albus showing his Gryffindor recklessness.
I love the way you included canon in this chapter. Sirus suspecting Remus of being the traitor and the reason for the secret keeper switch. I think that you gave a plausible reason for why Sirus spent so much time with James and Lily rather than with Angela and Caine.
I'd like to see a sequel with Angelas reaction to Sirus being sent to Azakaban.
Author's Response: First of all, thanks for reviewing. Yes, I wanted to stick to canon as much as possible. Poor Sirius - he\'s going to Azkaban again! \r\nAbout the sequel - the first chapter is already on the site, although it isn\'t about Angela\'s reaction for suddenly finding herself married to a prisoner.