Updates:
An Unclear Past - MTC is sort of like my baby. AUP is on hiatus until I finish MTC.
Meet the - Children? - 10/15 - Chapter Seven will be up soon!Sorry for the wait, guys!
Me
Bio: I'm a teenage Ravenclaw girl from the US who has recently discovered the extreme properties of MNFF. Along with my love for Harry Potter, I enjoy geeky things like Science and Math, and enjoy watching globs of cinnamon toothpaste layered onto the bristles of my Colgate toothbrush. I have recently discovered the displeasures of addiction to the computer. I am also not like Voldemort, although my parents may think so. I love Broadway and theater/singing/acting/dancing! Wicked and Hairspray = love
Name: Hannah.
Ships: Harry/Ginny, a little Harry/Hermione, Hermione/Draco, James/Lily, and Hermione/Ron.
Preference of HP books, greatest to least: 3, 7, 6, 1, 4, 5, 2
Preference of HP movies, greatest to least: 3, 5, 1, 4, 2
Beta(s): Schmergo, AKA Schmerg_The_Impaler, author of the fantastic story, the Dark Lord's Blog. (The link is in my faves.) Thanks, Schmerg!!
Books: Harry Potter, Twilight (etc.), Peaches, the Sisterhood of the Traveling Pants, Lord of the Rings, Avalon High, The Princess Diaries series, All-American Girl, Ready or Not, How to Be Popular, anything by Meg Cabot, really, Elsewhere, Piratica, Nancy Drew, everything Cornelia Funke writes, the Chronicles of Prydain, and the Chronicles of Narnia.
Movies: Music and Lyrics, Freedom Writers, Just Like Heaven, Harry Potter, Lord of the Rings, Rent, Spiderman, The Lakehouse, Calendar Girls, Hitch, Raising Helen, How to Lose a Guy in Ten Days, most of the Disney classic fims like The Little Mermaid and Cinderella, and I doubt anyone is really reading this so I shan't go on.
Music: Red Hot Chili Peppers, Good Charlotte, Avril Lavigne, the Beatles All-American Rejects,Wicked, Hairspray,all Broadway, really, Kelly Clarkson, Destiny's Child, Jurassic 5, Vanessa Carlton, KT Tunstall.... I could go on.
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Happy reading!
Sweet!
She’s fallen in love with the boy she can’t stand.
How romantic! I love that! It's an excellent description of the way Lily feels - falling in love with someone that she despises!
Down she does tumble, but James breaks her fall
Metaphorically and in this story, this is a very good show of there-for-me-when-I'm-down, which is the kind of person that James is!
Great piece!
Hannah
Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing! :]
Very cute. I really enjoyed it. Luna'ssnote at the end of it was pretty darn histerical! Great work. :]
Author's Response: Thanks - after reading the poem i thought a touch of Luna would finish it off nicely!
Hahahahahaha! Very funny. I loved your characterazation of all of the Marauders, even though they aren't the same as I imagine they would be.
I loved the last line, and the girlfriend thing, I was totally cracking up!
Great job, and I'd love to see some more humor from you - you seem to be quite the comedian!
Author's Response: Ooh, I was going for IC... I think they are IC. Except maybe Peter. Thanks for the praise, and for asking for more humour instead of a sequel. There will be more Humour. There will not be a sequel.
Awwww. I really lliked it.
Never doubt them,
Never lie,
They keep your secrets,
Until they die
That part was so heartwarming!! The tempo and rhythmn were really consistent there.
Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
Awwww! How cute! I loved Ron's brother-ness, and Hermione's giggle-ness. (Whoa, that sounds weird.)
Harry and Ginny were hilarious, and the awkwardness between them as Ginny stuck eyeliner on Harry was really funny - and well-portrayed.
Overall, this was really sweet!
Great work!
Oh, Diz! That was really touching. I ususally don't read R/Hr, but this was really sweet. :) :) :) I do like that Ron and Hermione were poor, actually, becuase it 's becoming rather cliché for Ron and Hermione to be rich. I shall say again, it was really touching; their love was really evident, and the whole 'i sold my ______ to get you your _____" was really sad - in a good way. Great job! Spiffing! :)
Author's Response: Aw!! Thanks Hannah! You made my day, buddy! First review, I\'m totally going to use your word... that was spifferic!! LOL.
~Thanks! Lindsey :)
Oh, wow! That was really good!
No, they wouldn’t see him again. That was it, everyone would know, his friends would not want to be near him anymore.
Ouch! That's realy heartbreaking! I think this exerpt here really sets the tone for the rest of the story. Remus' character is excellent.
He stared down at the space below him, over a thousand feet down to the grounds, imagining the fall. How many seconds before you hit the ground? Would you die instantly when you hit it?
Oh, dear. That's a great reality of suicidal thoughts. I'm not saying I'm suicidal, lol, but that really well-portrays his heartbreak.
He should have been somewhere else, in a different House. Was there even a House for useless werewolves?
Awww! Poor Remmy! That part is probably the most touching. Like, his thoughts that he's useless, worthless, etc. =(
You did very well at showing Remus' thoughts, and keeping them up the whole story!
Okay, now for some nitpicks:
Remus Lupin sat at the top of the North Tower, staring into the darkness. He wished he had brought his cloak. It was getting cold on the battlements of the tower, but he couldn’t go back to the dormitory.
The comma should be a period after "cloak", and "it" should be a new sentence.
Not now they knew.
Not know that they knew?
He couldn’t believe they had found out; he thought he had been careful that they’d never know.
You need a little pause after "out". You could put a period there, also.
He couldn’t go back to the common room, or even stay anywhere in the castle right now.
No comma, "not" to "right".
I don't want to go on so you think that I didn't like your story - I did, it was excellent, I'm just a little nitpicky is all. >.<
Anyway, great job!
Hannah
Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Don\'t worry, I can be quite nitpicky too, and help is always appreciated! I feel quite sorry for Remus, he has a lot of problems and copes well, but I don\'t think he\'s able to cope all the time. Thanks for the review!!
Ooh! Wow!
Brilliant piece of work!
The characters are extremely well done - Amaryllis is in no way a Mary-Sue; just from this poem, her actions are not cliché at all.
The imagery is really clear, and I get a sense of their emotions - and their surroundings.
The only thing I might suggest for next time is that the rhythm is a little off. It starts by going 9 syllables to 7 to 8 to 6 to 9 to 6, etc.
Not like that's a really bad thing; some poets like Emily Dickinson used completely irregular rhythm. However, for a reader here it's a little bit of a bumpy ride.
Anyway, excellent job!
Hannah
Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: I was a bit worried about readers viewing Amaryllis as a Mary-Sue so I was extremely happy after reading your review. Thanks for the amazing feedback!
I love it, hunny. Beautious. I must go do dreaded homework, I shall comment again when I get back later...
Author's Response: Hannah! Yay! I\'m so glad that you are reading my work! It makes me very squeeful! *squee squee squee*
LOL, thanks for your review, sweetie. Have fun on your homework. I don\'t have to go back to school util Thursday.. I amazingly just found that out today.
Thanks buddy, and the second chapter is in the queue as I am typing this! ~Lindsey :)
Awwwwww....
Rereading this makes it so much more touching. Tears have actually formed in my eyes (of course, I'm listening to the song "Chasing Cars", which is rather sad).
Thanks to Winged Artemis, for being a wonderful friend, beta, and prompt-giver for the Ravenclaw fic exchange.
*gets all warm and fuzzy* Awwwwww....
He looked a bit confused, but he answered, “Yes. I’m killing bugs.”
That part somehow was really emotionally effective. The childishness of the statement was extremely touching.
The use of "like a mother" was an excellent description; it's a very nice way to put how Ginny treated him. It showed how she thought of herself and how she acted - it gave me a reflection on the H/G relationship, and the situation.
she remembered with startling clarity how it felt to be young, how it felt to giggle behind school books, how it felt to be love and be loved and, being young... to be left behind.
That's deep. I felt the heat rising in me, and the rush of the intense meaning of "young". Being young is something that people can never bring back. Parents and adults never conceive it again... you can have it... and it's gone.
The tiny crystals fell like moonlit stars onto her cheeks, and one by one, they melted.
Excellent description! When you said moonlit stars, I could see the fluttery twinkle of the falling snow, and the melting flakes.
If they could not relive the past, Ginny decided, they would have to create new memories. Though people and places and all the particulars had been lost, Ginny knew that Harry remembered loving her, and such a memory could live on indefinitely, and they could let the rest slide into history as they began a new life together. Love had kept him going this long, and love would hold them together for a very, very long time.
That paragraph is really poignant. It's a very nice closing sentence - it's like, all of this cutting and decorating and then a final pasting.
This was perfect amount of frosting - not too much, not too little - for the lovely slice of cake you've fed me. Thanks a million!
Author's Response: Awwww... again! :P
You are too sweet, do you know that? :D I\'m just thrilled that you really liked the story. <3 x a bunch
Hahahah! I have nothing to say, just... that was really funny!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ooh, lala!
I'm feeling really unconstructive at the moment, so I can't leave a lot of concrit, but I really liek where this story is going t,eh character development, and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I totally understand that. I\'m glad you like it enough to attempt a review!
Awww! Great job, Jess! *woot*
I'll be getting you back #2 realllllllly soon!
Just one little thing - "prolouge" is spelled "prologue", lol. (fyi)
Anyway, congrats! *huggles*
Hannah
Author's Response: Thanks, Hannah!! You are a great beta!! *hoorah for Hannah!!* LOL. I will be submitting two tomorrow, since today turned out too busy!
I'm so glad it got through finally! *huggles*
Author's Response: Me too! *huggles back* Thank you so much for your help, Hannah!! :D
Only you could take "Good Morning" and turn it into "Avada Kedavra"! Excellent addition, Schmerg! I absolutely love the Beatles.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Hannah! It\'s always great to see Beatles fans!
Haha! Excellent edition, Schmergo!
"mangled squid intestines that looked more like meatloaf (I’m not sure that’s an improvement), and pudding that"
You forgot to end that sentence. I'm curious what you were going to say.
Anyway, I love the whole thing about the Avada-fork and, of course, Parentheses Overusers Anonymous! Oh, and HP. I laughed outloud and my sister, who is sick (like, physically ill) went, "Hannah, shut it!"
But anyway, as I said, excellent sequel, and I'm sure it will do justice to the first!
Author's Response: Oh, the pudding thing was supposed to be left off like that. He just realized that his food was moving. I guess I should have used ellipses to make that more clear, though.
I\'m glad you like it! I was very excited to see a review from you.
This was absolutely amazing! It was funny, and touching, and it showed a bit of each in-character character. Great job!
It's going on my favorites.
Author's Response: Absolutely amazing, you say? Well thank you! I\'m flattered :).
Schmerg! That was amazing! Completely different yet very alike in the sense of quality as the Dark Lord's Blog!
Let's see... my favorite character, I think, was Ted. I really liked his natural-ness (is that even a word?). No, but seriously, I thought that he seemed the most human (pun intended).
My least favorite was maybe Emma... I don't mean this in any critical way, but I got confused a lot between her and Haley because I didn't see a stable characterization. I did like her character, don't get me wrong!
Anyway, amazing fic, and I can't wait for the sequels! =)
Author's Response: Well thanks very much! This means a lot coming from a wonderful author like yourself! Yeah, I tried hard to make the werewolf character the most human and nice... and I understand what you mean about Emma and Haley, because they\'re very much a unit in this one. They kind of come into their own a little more in the next installment.
Haha, Schmerg! that's my favorite chapter yet!
“IVY POTTER IS THE COOLEST NAME EVER!” bellowed Emma. “It sounds like a potted plant or something!”
I was cracking up so hard when I read that (quite to not wake my dog.) And I loved the Elf-reference. I love that movie! And "RONALD WEASLEY" was pretty hilarious.
The last line was really good, too. I can see Draco being a really good dad.
Anyway, nice job, especially of mixing a well-plotted story with some humor!
Author's Response: Awww, thank ye! I personally do think the chapters get better as the story goes on.
Ooh, Schmergo! This is really, really good! I like your characterizations of all of the canon characters. The kids are really well-done too; they're not duplicates as I've seen done, they're different.
And this is one of the first fics I've seen where Harry doesn't have a daughter named Lily (well, there's Harriet-Lily, but she doesn't go by Lily) or a son named James.
Great job! Now I have to move on to the next chapter... and put this on my favorites! =)
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah! Well, you can bet your bonzai that Harry wanted to name his kids James \'n\' Lily, but Ginny was having none of that!